I Couldn't See the Moon
quatrains in 8/6/8/6166 total reviews
Comment from DSMalott
So very enjoyable.
Rhyme scheme was so nicely placed, without being forced or trite. The depth of thought was instantly recognized into the first stanza. Your 8/6//8/6 meter is not only classic but precise.
Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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So very enjoyable.
Rhyme scheme was so nicely placed, without being forced or trite. The depth of thought was instantly recognized into the first stanza. Your 8/6//8/6 meter is not only classic but precise.
Well done.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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DSMalott, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Andrewajgblue
A really well written poem,with a really strong message , I loved the rhyming as always, and your wording was really nice, it had a really nice rhythm when reading, I really enjoyed it,
Andrew
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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A really well written poem,with a really strong message , I loved the rhyming as always, and your wording was really nice, it had a really nice rhythm when reading, I really enjoyed it,
Andrew
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Andrew, thank you so much :-)
Brooke
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A well written, clever poem Brooke. Well written in good abcb form. It clearly demonstrates the power of the elements - I particularly like your stanzas 1&2 about the power of the moon. A good read. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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A well written, clever poem Brooke. Well written in good abcb form. It clearly demonstrates the power of the elements - I particularly like your stanzas 1&2 about the power of the moon. A good read. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Dorothy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from granny goes viral
"When I can't see what still is there." Perfect. This line really resonated with me. Of course I am not going into the kind of reviews you give. With all the terminology. Your poems are always perfect. It is what they invoke in me that gets me. Thanks.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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"When I can't see what still is there." Perfect. This line really resonated with me. Of course I am not going into the kind of reviews you give. With all the terminology. Your poems are always perfect. It is what they invoke in me that gets me. Thanks.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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granny, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from padumachitta
Hey. I will indeed print this and put it on my bulletin board. I can get so caught in the dark and forget that the sun and moon are there...that light is there just behind the fog banks.
thanks padumachitta
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Hey. I will indeed print this and put it on my bulletin board. I can get so caught in the dark and forget that the sun and moon are there...that light is there just behind the fog banks.
thanks padumachitta
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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padumachitta, thank you for sharing that with me - I am always thrilled when one of my poems touches somebody that way :-) Brooke
Comment from irishauthorme
This is a beautiful work that explores that certain part of our nature that allows us to see beyond the clouds, and through the fog, to ascertain what is still there. We live behind a veil, and yet, by reflecting can maintain our faith in the reason for, and the eventual destination of, mankind.
irish
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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This is a beautiful work that explores that certain part of our nature that allows us to see beyond the clouds, and through the fog, to ascertain what is still there. We live behind a veil, and yet, by reflecting can maintain our faith in the reason for, and the eventual destination of, mankind.
irish
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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irish, thank you so very much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Brooke,
It's amazing how a photo/artwork can effect one's mood, thoughts. This artwork made me so homesick for my country roots.
I love your poem as well, and paired with it made me think of the fog settling in over the crops.
The last time I was in Ohio was when my grandma died in 81, but I still see and feel it as clearly now as when I lived there.
Beautiful!
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*<*)
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Hi Brooke,
It's amazing how a photo/artwork can effect one's mood, thoughts. This artwork made me so homesick for my country roots.
I love your poem as well, and paired with it made me think of the fog settling in over the crops.
The last time I was in Ohio was when my grandma died in 81, but I still see and feel it as clearly now as when I lived there.
Beautiful!
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*<*)
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Jax, thank you so very much for your generous and gracious response to this poem :-) Brooke
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You are so welcome. It's amazing how a little thing can bring on such 'wonderful' nostalgia. Thx for lovely memories. (*>*)
Comment from mshirachot
Brooke! What a wonderful piece about faith. I enjoyed the illustration of night and morning, the moon and the rising of the sun...unseen, yet there all the same.
The alliteration with "as buds burst into bloom" added a nice touch.
And...to top it off...you added that lovely picture of the wheat blowing gently..."I tell you the truth, unless a kernel of wheat falls into the soil..."
Thanks for sharing!
Blessings and hugs,
Marsha
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Brooke! What a wonderful piece about faith. I enjoyed the illustration of night and morning, the moon and the rising of the sun...unseen, yet there all the same.
The alliteration with "as buds burst into bloom" added a nice touch.
And...to top it off...you added that lovely picture of the wheat blowing gently..."I tell you the truth, unless a kernel of wheat falls into the soil..."
Thanks for sharing!
Blessings and hugs,
Marsha
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Marsha, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from RodG
I really like the TWO tones that come through in this poem. First, is the child-like tone of the speaker who senses all is okay despite not being able to see the moon or sun. Then we have the serious undertone of a more mature speaker reminding us of nature's presence always and implying how valuable faith is to mankind. You convey your ideas clearly and impressively on both levels, Brooke.
Rod
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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I really like the TWO tones that come through in this poem. First, is the child-like tone of the speaker who senses all is okay despite not being able to see the moon or sun. Then we have the serious undertone of a more mature speaker reminding us of nature's presence always and implying how valuable faith is to mankind. You convey your ideas clearly and impressively on both levels, Brooke.
Rod
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Rod, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from chasennov
quatrains in 8/6/8/6 'I Couldn't See the Moon.' This is yet another excellent poem you have created here, Brooke. How marvelous it is to watch out for the Sun, The Moon and nature in general. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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quatrains in 8/6/8/6 'I Couldn't See the Moon.' This is yet another excellent poem you have created here, Brooke. How marvelous it is to watch out for the Sun, The Moon and nature in general. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much, chasennov :-) Brooke
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You are most welcome, Brooke.
