The Sky Dancers
a short poem about the wind and kite dancing through the sky3 total reviews
Comment from Allieas
Short, sweet poem. This reminds me of a TV show I used to watch growing up with the same name - Now I've got their theme song stuck in my head! Anyway, good luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Short, sweet poem. This reminds me of a TV show I used to watch growing up with the same name - Now I've got their theme song stuck in my head! Anyway, good luck with the contest!
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Thank you!
Comment from jlsavell
masseypayton, first of all, welcome to Fanstory.
This is a wonderful 5/7/5. Brilliant imagery and potent in so few words. Well done and best wishes on the contest. jls
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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masseypayton, first of all, welcome to Fanstory.
This is a wonderful 5/7/5. Brilliant imagery and potent in so few words. Well done and best wishes on the contest. jls
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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Thanks a bunch. It's wonderful to have feedback on my writing from...well anyone!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You have a good entry into the contest. I believe the last line should read 'they dance' not the dance. I know others have probably already pointed that out. Make one mistake and hear from 30 about it. Anyway, I like your poem. I can see this image. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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You have a good entry into the contest. I believe the last line should read 'they dance' not the dance. I know others have probably already pointed that out. Make one mistake and hear from 30 about it. Anyway, I like your poem. I can see this image. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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Thanks a bunch! I just joined this website and I didn't think anyone would already see it. Thanks for pointing out my mistake it means a lot.
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Watch out for the Poem Police.
