Grief
Many emotions as twin towers fell.112 total reviews
Comment from rrabinow
Wonderfully written poem that you wrote for this poem. Great job describing what grief is. Great flow. I like the picture as well. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Wonderfully written poem that you wrote for this poem. Great job describing what grief is. Great flow. I like the picture as well. Best of luck.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
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Thank you for reading.
Comment from Linda England Bonam
You did a wonderful job of writing about the horrific
day that we will always remember. Grief was a good emotion for this writing prompt, and your poem was a hit with me.
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You did a wonderful job of writing about the horrific
day that we will always remember. Grief was a good emotion for this writing prompt, and your poem was a hit with me.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
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Thanks you for reading.
Comment from emrpoems
The perfect description of how grief operates.
but the octopus-like tentacles of grief
have attached themselves to our deepest flesh
and will never bring relief
Well penned free verse. Good luck in the contest
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The perfect description of how grief operates.
but the octopus-like tentacles of grief
have attached themselves to our deepest flesh
and will never bring relief
Well penned free verse. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from stroncoso1
This is a very poignant poem on grief. The picture appropriate and eloquently accompanies your very well written poem. You have very descriptive phrases and your message comes across very poetically.
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This is a very poignant poem on grief. The picture appropriate and eloquently accompanies your very well written poem. You have very descriptive phrases and your message comes across very poetically.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from kiwijenny
Well penned...you did so well because you chose a universal act that caused grief for all...a uniting emotion as towers fell...people dived out of buildings ..I remember a Fox reporter throwing up.it was horrific...real We were all grief stricken.god bless
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Well penned...you did so well because you chose a universal act that caused grief for all...a uniting emotion as towers fell...people dived out of buildings ..I remember a Fox reporter throwing up.it was horrific...real We were all grief stricken.god bless
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from adewpearl
day's end - add apostrophe for possessive
make a man out the window send - the syntax of that line sounds a bit forced in order to make the rhyme work out
good use of occasional rhyme
vivid descriptive detail
strong emotional appeal
effective image of the tentacles of grief
Brooke
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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day's end - add apostrophe for possessive
make a man out the window send - the syntax of that line sounds a bit forced in order to make the rhyme work out
good use of occasional rhyme
vivid descriptive detail
strong emotional appeal
effective image of the tentacles of grief
Brooke
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Thank you for reading and for your suggestions.
Comment from SkirtCrash
I commend your remembrance of 9 11
To be in a situation like that is unimaginable.
I tried to feel the emotion that was written in the poem but it didn't quite take me there...I know that writing on a subject such as this can be taboo to some degree especially something that has affected so many.Looking forward to reading some of your other work.
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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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I commend your remembrance of 9 11
To be in a situation like that is unimaginable.
I tried to feel the emotion that was written in the poem but it didn't quite take me there...I know that writing on a subject such as this can be taboo to some degree especially something that has affected so many.Looking forward to reading some of your other work.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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SkirtCrash: a reviewer is always entitled to his/her opinion but I have a couple of question for you. Have you read this site's guidelines for ratings? When you give a writer a 3 rating it means that there is serious problems with the poem and that it needs a rewrite it is so bad. And, then, you need to list all the problems. The fact the you couldn't feel the emotion tells me that it is a personal problem of yours, not a writing problem of mine. I say that because this poem and many others I have written are always applauded for how well I describe the emotion involved and how it has moved them. However, I thank you for reading and suggest you might want to go to my portfolio and see what else does 'not quite take you there'.
Comment from Emily George
The horror Unimaginable you painted the picture with strong descriptive words .
Your chosen illustration a strong vivid choice to represent your well set out and poignantly sad poem.That such a thing happened mystified the world.
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The horror Unimaginable you painted the picture with strong descriptive words .
Your chosen illustration a strong vivid choice to represent your well set out and poignantly sad poem.That such a thing happened mystified the world.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
Great picture and a great free verse poem. Deeply shocking of 9/11 scenario as the world watched and grieved glued to the television screen night & day, day & night, crying, crying still!
War whether by one, few, several, or many, is horrible, disastrous, and forever a lasting tragedy for those who survive.
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Great picture and a great free verse poem. Deeply shocking of 9/11 scenario as the world watched and grieved glued to the television screen night & day, day & night, crying, crying still!
War whether by one, few, several, or many, is horrible, disastrous, and forever a lasting tragedy for those who survive.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
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Thanks for reading.
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Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job expressing yourself. I like the image as it is fitting for your poem. I like the way you say 'octopus-like tentacles.' I would change nothing. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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You did a great job expressing yourself. I like the image as it is fitting for your poem. I like the way you say 'octopus-like tentacles.' I would change nothing. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
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Thanks for reading.
