Comment from Acquired Taste

Excellent

Terrific poem and great contest entry. Is Frost a frequent visitor to your psyche? I have to imagine we all think about "the other road" - I know I do. Your offering seems to encourage each of us to take another. Nicely done - best of luck. AT=/

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014

Thanks, AT.

I am a little bemused that most people claim they 'wouldn't change a thing' - I have a whole list of things I would change.

Steve

reply by Acquired Taste on 16-Sep-2014

Talk to me...I've started a second Moleskine with notes on ... yes, no and maybe possibilities.... Jean

Comment from N.K. Wagner

Excellent

You make the chain rhyme look so easy, Steve. I just tried my hand. It's not. I do like the way you've tied this pondering up with a monorhyme in the last stanza. It truly does sound "finished". Well done. :) Nancy

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014

Thanks, Nancy.

Gets easier with practice perhaps...

Steve

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

Hi steve, this is a wonderfully written poem for this competition my friend, with reflections of what could have been had you taken a different path in life, it has excellent rhyme and rhythm, good meter and a wonderful flow, What If!wonderful.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

reply by Eric1 on 19-Sep-2014

You are welcome steve, sorry about the delayed reply, been on holiday.

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

That one thud was Frost giving a spasmodic twitch in his coffin. He didn't quite wake up. after my Random Noise,
how could I say other than excellent?

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014

Thank you.

I've had frost spinning a few times in my verses....

Steve

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

I love the well chosen words for you poem, It is a fact that our whole lives could change drastically by one decision hence the road less traveled

I enjoyed it, well written, Good luck in the contest
Mary

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014

Thanks, Mary!

Steve

Comment from lynglyng

Excellent

This poem is a good spin off of Robert Frost, "The Road Less Traveled." Which has been my favorite poem since I was a junior in high school. That was a very long time ago. This is nicely written with great imagery and details. It's message is clear as the person in the story is nearing death and asking themselves what would be different if another choice had been made. Thank you for sharing your great work.

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 Comment Written 13-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014

Thanks for the generous review.

Steve