Comment from TheWritingType

Excellent

This was very sweet, very moving and the final line even made me giggle a bit as it was wholly unexpected. I enjoyed this poem very much. Well done.

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2014

Comment from DSMalott

Excellent

Very good.
Such a very nice reading cadence. It virtually rolled off my tongue when read aloud.
Quatrain = yes
Rhyming = yes
7/6/8/6 = yes
Visual = yes
Nicely done!

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 Comment Written 12-Sep-2014

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

This is perfect Brooke for a children's sunday school class. The rhythm and rhyme are wonderful and kind of sing-songy.
Teresa

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 Comment Written 12-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014

Teresa, thank you so much - I had that setting in mind too :-) Brooke

Comment from GeraldS

Exceptional

Ah ha! Finally I'm the first to comment. This is nicely written with a definite flavor for a child's mind. That's probably why I like it too.

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014

Thank you so much, Gerald, for being so generous in your response to this poem, which is hot off the presses. :-) Brooke