When God Created Color
rhyming quatrains in 7/6/8/6164 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ha ha, your too, Brooke?
A lovely little verse, with nice imagery and a sweet, endearing message, as usual. Now, if the devil paints your lawn, I can tell you, it's not nearly as pretty a sight, LOL. Plus all those dirt mounds from grav... well, I'd better stop while I'm ahead. :)
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Ha ha, your too, Brooke?
A lovely little verse, with nice imagery and a sweet, endearing message, as usual. Now, if the devil paints your lawn, I can tell you, it's not nearly as pretty a sight, LOL. Plus all those dirt mounds from grav... well, I'd better stop while I'm ahead. :)
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
Comment from gypsycaravan
I really don't want this review to sound too patronizing, but must tell you that when I read your poetry, I enjoy it more than I've enjoyed poetry in many years. I still love Edgar Guest, so down to earth and understandable. That's one of the reasons yours is special to me. Every line says exactly what you want the reader to hear, it provokes feelings, smell, taste and visions. Some works, be they poetry or prose can do that and so glad I found one that does. You also write with variety. Never just one subject, like angels, or romance and all their many variations. Both are good topics but there is more to write about in this marvelous world. Thanks for your talent and work here on FS.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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I really don't want this review to sound too patronizing, but must tell you that when I read your poetry, I enjoy it more than I've enjoyed poetry in many years. I still love Edgar Guest, so down to earth and understandable. That's one of the reasons yours is special to me. Every line says exactly what you want the reader to hear, it provokes feelings, smell, taste and visions. Some works, be they poetry or prose can do that and so glad I found one that does. You also write with variety. Never just one subject, like angels, or romance and all their many variations. Both are good topics but there is more to write about in this marvelous world. Thanks for your talent and work here on FS.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much, gypsy. That comment means a lot to me because that is my goal. When I write, I am not writing to the New Yorker crowd. My love of poetry came from my steamfitter father, who would recite things like Whittier's Snowbound to me. I want to write poetry that my dad would like and the people from my church would like and just about anyone can read and understand and connect with. Ezra Pound I am not nor do I want to be :-) Brooke
Comment from Drew Delaney
This poem is so very sweet. I am so impressed with your poetry, Brooke. They always leave me with a feel of nature's beauty and also beauty in the little things we sometimes take for granted.
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This poem is so very sweet. I am so impressed with your poetry, Brooke. They always leave me with a feel of nature's beauty and also beauty in the little things we sometimes take for granted.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
Comment from granny goes viral
"AWWWWWWWWWWW"...this is an "AWWWWWWW" poem. Some lovely words, so sweet and colorful, well paced; rhymed. Love the lady bug. Then the personal ending. So adorable.
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"AWWWWWWWWWWW"...this is an "AWWWWWWW" poem. Some lovely words, so sweet and colorful, well paced; rhymed. Love the lady bug. Then the personal ending. So adorable.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
Comment from mshirachot
Brooke! What a splash of color you do paint with words. The "polka dot behind" was a nice touch of whimsy! After reading this I can imagine in my mind the lovely garden you must have created in your lawn.
I love the simplicity of these rhyming quatrains. This poem made me smile! :)
Have a great weekend!
Marsha
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Brooke! What a splash of color you do paint with words. The "polka dot behind" was a nice touch of whimsy! After reading this I can imagine in my mind the lovely garden you must have created in your lawn.
I love the simplicity of these rhyming quatrains. This poem made me smile! :)
Have a great weekend!
Marsha
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Marsha, thank you so much for your generous review. It is good to see you :-) Brooke
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You are kindly welcome. That grandson of yours gets cuter by the day!
Comment from sibhus
This is nice. I liked the simply little rhymes that sound so much like a child talking of the wonders all around them. The rhymes make onderful descriptions of the flash of the brillinat colors and small miracles all around us. Good stuff there, Brooke.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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This is nice. I liked the simply little rhymes that sound so much like a child talking of the wonders all around them. The rhymes make onderful descriptions of the flash of the brillinat colors and small miracles all around us. Good stuff there, Brooke.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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sibhus, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Domino 2
Hi, Brooke.
I think 2nd last line appears a bit forced with single syllable words to meet the meter - 'do' is not necessary to add meaning IMO.
Maybe, with respect, my star and willing pupil, hahaha:
'but one thing I am certain of'
Lovely expressions of visuals in colour, and a very uplifting whimsical read.
Best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Hi, Brooke.
I think 2nd last line appears a bit forced with single syllable words to meet the meter - 'do' is not necessary to add meaning IMO.
Maybe, with respect, my star and willing pupil, hahaha:
'but one thing I am certain of'
Lovely expressions of visuals in colour, and a very uplifting whimsical read.
Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Ray - originally I wrote but one thing I know certainly, but I changed it
I agree with you about using do/did in most cases - I even talk about it in my meter and rhyme poetry class as a method to avoid in trying to make meter or rhyme work out, but in this case, I think the "do" serves a purpose of adding emphasis to the statement, so I believe it is a time "do" has a significant function in the line :-) Brooke
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Your decision to stick with 'd' amazes me, Brookers, as you're usually so willing to accept my brilliant suggestions for improvement. LOL
Thanks for your gracious and interesting reply.
Would I get discount if I signed up for a class? ;-)
Luvsya, Ray xx
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Seeing that Tom is the one who handles the money and the registration, I'm doubting that would ever happen ;-)
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:-) Oh well...and I bet me and you could have some very interesting debates, too. xx
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I was the captain of the debate team in high school - just a warning! ;-)
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Who cares, as I rarely listen to women. MWAHA ;-) xx
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Also. my debating record against my pet parrot, Polly, isn't too bad. ;-) xx
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uh uh uh, Ray - you're skating on thin ice, my friend :-)
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I didn't mean it, Brookers.
Polly ordered me to say it. He's such a rotten chauvinist, and I disagree with him completely, but if I fail to follow his instructions, he cusses me, and my delicate constitution can't abide colourful language. ;-) xx
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blame it on a poor, defenseless bird? how sad, my friend, how sad to have sunk so low... LOL
Comment from c_lucas
God created color to give the sun a rest.
The smiles of the children more than matched the test.
This is very well written.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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God created color to give the sun a rest.
The smiles of the children more than matched the test.
This is very well written.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Charlie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from misscookie
Another wonderful colorful poem
I like the photo that you choose to go with your poem
That ladybugs truly relates to your word yes God is an artist His color are a delight and I love the green grass special when it's cut.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Another wonderful colorful poem
I like the photo that you choose to go with your poem
That ladybugs truly relates to your word yes God is an artist His color are a delight and I love the green grass special when it's cut.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Miss Cookie, thank you so much for your thoughtfulness :-) Brooke
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It was my pleasure.
Comment from ravenblack
...especially if your lawn is dotted with dandelions ( I'm sure yours is, and that is not a bad thing). And the masterpiece of color- our skin. As long as we do not allow it to divide us.
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...especially if your lawn is dotted with dandelions ( I'm sure yours is, and that is not a bad thing). And the masterpiece of color- our skin. As long as we do not allow it to divide us.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
