Of Kings and Queens
What awaits you there?80 total reviews
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I love the rhythm of this... and this line especially is very appealing: And, should we trek towards ghostly gloom, where ghastly nomad demons loom,
Nice use of alliteration, too. Really a good poem, aside from the icky subject matter. But I do like the photo of me you added at the bottom. I look so much thinner. :)
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2014
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I love the rhythm of this... and this line especially is very appealing: And, should we trek towards ghostly gloom, where ghastly nomad demons loom,
Nice use of alliteration, too. Really a good poem, aside from the icky subject matter. But I do like the photo of me you added at the bottom. I look so much thinner. :)
Comment Written 14-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2014
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Ha ha, thanks, Phyllis. You never fail to brighten up an otherwise dull and dreary day for me. Whether it's a lively debate on a topic we both disagree on, amicably, of course, or a highly entertaining review like the one you've given me here, I truly do appreciate and respect your opinions.
Almost got my manuscript edited for publication, then I will be back to FanStory once agin in full force!
Thanks a bunch, Phyllis :}
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is yet another dark and brooding tale of death and corpses that the author has created with this piece of work. I am always taken in by your writing.
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This is yet another dark and brooding tale of death and corpses that the author has created with this piece of work. I am always taken in by your writing.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2014
Comment from nancy_e_davis
There you'll wander, evermore, entombed within the bowels of lore.
Is that what happened to you Dean? And now you are warning everyone off or they will suffer the same fate. LOL Be careful of our choices, things are not always as they seem. Well done and scary. Kinda like the "Hotel California."
Great alliteration> mired minions moan, Luna looms,feral friend or foe, feeble, fickle fates, and more!... Wow it's just full of it! Well done my friend. Nancy
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There you'll wander, evermore, entombed within the bowels of lore.
Is that what happened to you Dean? And now you are warning everyone off or they will suffer the same fate. LOL Be careful of our choices, things are not always as they seem. Well done and scary. Kinda like the "Hotel California."
Great alliteration> mired minions moan, Luna looms,feral friend or foe, feeble, fickle fates, and more!... Wow it's just full of it! Well done my friend. Nancy
Comment Written 14-Sep-2014
Comment from cupa tea
what a haunting poem...love the images you placed with it...kinda gives me the creeps....easy to follow and to understand...well done...
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what a haunting poem...love the images you placed with it...kinda gives me the creeps....easy to follow and to understand...well done...
Comment Written 14-Sep-2014
Comment from lancellot
A very well crafted tale. Writing a coherent tale with internal rhymes for each line, and not sounding forced is a difficult task. That you've done it, speaks to your skill. As always your presentation is excellent as well.
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A very well crafted tale. Writing a coherent tale with internal rhymes for each line, and not sounding forced is a difficult task. That you've done it, speaks to your skill. As always your presentation is excellent as well.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2014
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Once again you have written an entertaining and creative poem. I enjoyed reading. I bet you have a blast at Halloween.
You may enter, but never leave (NOT GOOD! NOT GOOD!)
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Once again you have written an entertaining and creative poem. I enjoyed reading. I bet you have a blast at Halloween.
You may enter, but never leave (NOT GOOD! NOT GOOD!)
Comment Written 14-Sep-2014
Comment from misscookie
Wow!
The artwork is awesome.
It captured my attention from the first line to the last.
I;m glad I'm reading this a day light.
At night I wouldn't be able to sleep;. This is a great write for Halloween.
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Wow!
The artwork is awesome.
It captured my attention from the first line to the last.
I;m glad I'm reading this a day light.
At night I wouldn't be able to sleep;. This is a great write for Halloween.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2014
Comment from Sueellen11
Oh my you are the master Dean it's been awhile since I was on site but I see the master of the screams is still producing excellent stories,, great picture Dean I enjoyed reading it had excellent rhythm and flow and very vivid,, well done my friend,,, blessings sueellen
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Oh my you are the master Dean it's been awhile since I was on site but I see the master of the screams is still producing excellent stories,, great picture Dean I enjoyed reading it had excellent rhythm and flow and very vivid,, well done my friend,,, blessings sueellen
Comment Written 14-Sep-2014
Comment from emrpoems
Great choice of words that give a powerfully dark message. Excellent use of alliteration and internal rhymes.
Stunning presentation and good use of enjambment.
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Great choice of words that give a powerfully dark message. Excellent use of alliteration and internal rhymes.
Stunning presentation and good use of enjambment.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2014
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
"Darkness hides few lucid things, mired minions moan, lone angel sings;" - Thank goodness there is always at least one joyful voice in the daily crowd of screams. This is wonderfully written and filled with such haunting imagery that the artwork becomes unnecessary. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
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"Darkness hides few lucid things, mired minions moan, lone angel sings;" - Thank goodness there is always at least one joyful voice in the daily crowd of screams. This is wonderfully written and filled with such haunting imagery that the artwork becomes unnecessary. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2014
