Of Kings and Queens
What awaits you there?80 total reviews
Comment from Sasha
This is absolutely superb! So dark yet amazingly eloquent. The words flowed so smoothly and your illustrations added so much to the dark side of this. I couldn't help thinking 'you can't take it with you' as I looked at the corpse wearing his jeweled clothing...or maybe you can?
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This is absolutely superb! So dark yet amazingly eloquent. The words flowed so smoothly and your illustrations added so much to the dark side of this. I couldn't help thinking 'you can't take it with you' as I looked at the corpse wearing his jeweled clothing...or maybe you can?
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
Comment from TAB_that's me
I'm not sure how you did that but to me it is eloquently written yet creepy at the same time. Eloquent and creepy just usually do not go together - lol. Your flow is smooth with great rhyme and meter.
Teresa
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I'm not sure how you did that but to me it is eloquently written yet creepy at the same time. Eloquent and creepy just usually do not go together - lol. Your flow is smooth with great rhyme and meter.
Teresa
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
Comment from TheSprite
Wonderful choice of music! OMG! What is it and where did it come from? I'm feeling very guilty, as though I should know this!!! "Hauntingly" familiar music. ;)
I'll tell you, my friend, this feels very much like Frank Lebby Stanton's "Graveyard Rabbit." Your is, of course, more sinister than his but it's an internal thing for the reader. I do think you will do nicely next to a poet laureate. Don't you? :) If you don't know this short little work, please Google it and read it, with that music on!
Question: "On you write, like a bard possessed, you've marked pride's path at their behest..." Whose behest? Did I miss that part?
"...while there you wander, evermore, entombed within the bowels of lore."
Where do you get this stuff? I know it's supposed to be eerie but it all breaks my heart!
"Luna looms above us nightly, bewitching all mankind to feel that life can oft times feel surreal." And I am one of the bewitched apparently. :)
Anybody reading this stuff is gonna have me committed! Trust me, I have tried to find mistakes or things to say but I'm not doing a very good job. Dammit! :p
The art work? Another amazing fit. Did the art inspire the work or did you just get lucky?
And, yes, I do like cemeteries and I am a graveyard rabbit. Yes, people do think I'm a bit disturbed but, oh well.
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Wonderful choice of music! OMG! What is it and where did it come from? I'm feeling very guilty, as though I should know this!!! "Hauntingly" familiar music. ;)
I'll tell you, my friend, this feels very much like Frank Lebby Stanton's "Graveyard Rabbit." Your is, of course, more sinister than his but it's an internal thing for the reader. I do think you will do nicely next to a poet laureate. Don't you? :) If you don't know this short little work, please Google it and read it, with that music on!
Question: "On you write, like a bard possessed, you've marked pride's path at their behest..." Whose behest? Did I miss that part?
"...while there you wander, evermore, entombed within the bowels of lore."
Where do you get this stuff? I know it's supposed to be eerie but it all breaks my heart!
"Luna looms above us nightly, bewitching all mankind to feel that life can oft times feel surreal." And I am one of the bewitched apparently. :)
Anybody reading this stuff is gonna have me committed! Trust me, I have tried to find mistakes or things to say but I'm not doing a very good job. Dammit! :p
The art work? Another amazing fit. Did the art inspire the work or did you just get lucky?
And, yes, I do like cemeteries and I am a graveyard rabbit. Yes, people do think I'm a bit disturbed but, oh well.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
Comment from thee-name
Nicely done. Good and creepy. You made me smile.
BEYOND THE REALMS OF KING AND QUEEN
THERE, LIES DARK LANDS
BENEATH THE GLEAMS
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Nicely done. Good and creepy. You made me smile.
BEYOND THE REALMS OF KING AND QUEEN
THERE, LIES DARK LANDS
BENEATH THE GLEAMS
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
Comment from drivenbackward
Hey, Dean. Sorry, but for some reason, I couldn't get into this one. Maybe it was the topic. Or, it could have been that most of your poems hook me so quickly and don't let go. Maybe it wasn't as unique. I don't know. I tried to read it several times to get into it, but to no avail. At least you will know I'm telling the truth about the ones I truly enjoy. :) Not that any of this matters much since I'm not really on the poetry side.
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Hey, Dean. Sorry, but for some reason, I couldn't get into this one. Maybe it was the topic. Or, it could have been that most of your poems hook me so quickly and don't let go. Maybe it wasn't as unique. I don't know. I tried to read it several times to get into it, but to no avail. At least you will know I'm telling the truth about the ones I truly enjoy. :) Not that any of this matters much since I'm not really on the poetry side.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
Comment from lindalcreel
O loved the picture and the poem. I think horror is definitely your calling card. You write these poems with such ease. You are a very talented poet, my friend. Keep them coming.
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O loved the picture and the poem. I think horror is definitely your calling card. You write these poems with such ease. You are a very talented poet, my friend. Keep them coming.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Dean - This is extremely well written. It flowed so very well and when I looked for the rhyme and found none I wondered how that could be. Then I re-read and found the very good internal rhyme. Your poem is full of good alliteration. 'On you write, like a Bard possessed' - I think, Dean, you are talking about yourself here. LOL. You list as horror and thriller, but some of your lines are not at all frightening - quite lovely -
'Without the darkness none would see a heavenly show put on for free,
of twinkling stars, whose brilliant light, will only show their glow by night'.
Very good. Warm regards Dorothy x
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Hi Dean - This is extremely well written. It flowed so very well and when I looked for the rhyme and found none I wondered how that could be. Then I re-read and found the very good internal rhyme. Your poem is full of good alliteration. 'On you write, like a Bard possessed' - I think, Dean, you are talking about yourself here. LOL. You list as horror and thriller, but some of your lines are not at all frightening - quite lovely -
'Without the darkness none would see a heavenly show put on for free,
of twinkling stars, whose brilliant light, will only show their glow by night'.
Very good. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
Comment from Dawn Munro
first line - "...there lie...<< no "s" on "lies"
Metering is problematic, but the internal rhyme is great, as is the 'story'. Alliteration is not overdone, either - it's just right, in my opinion. And as always, the presentation is fabulous (although I had to turn off the sound to focus again - LOL). Great job, Dean. :0)
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first line - "...there lie...<< no "s" on "lies"
Metering is problematic, but the internal rhyme is great, as is the 'story'. Alliteration is not overdone, either - it's just right, in my opinion. And as always, the presentation is fabulous (although I had to turn off the sound to focus again - LOL). Great job, Dean. :0)
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
Comment from madhatter1977
A great poem, Dean! The image is fascinating of the skeleton and the rhyme flows so well - you fit so many words to a line (I find that hard) and they all make sense in context of the poem. Reminds me of Ozymandias by Percy Shelley (married to Mary of Frankenstein fame) if you want to read that. Best wishes and pleasant screams! Pete
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A great poem, Dean! The image is fascinating of the skeleton and the rhyme flows so well - you fit so many words to a line (I find that hard) and they all make sense in context of the poem. Reminds me of Ozymandias by Percy Shelley (married to Mary of Frankenstein fame) if you want to read that. Best wishes and pleasant screams! Pete
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
Comment from Trybuck
Might be good to keep some of those childhood dreams alive. A little light exposes much darkness. Standing in His light we are free from the worries of what lies beneath..
Well done, Buck
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Might be good to keep some of those childhood dreams alive. A little light exposes much darkness. Standing in His light we are free from the worries of what lies beneath..
Well done, Buck
Comment Written 14-Sep-2014
