Though Autumn Wears...
a modified pantoum160 total reviews
Comment from Linda England Bonam
I loved this! I especially liked how you used 'garland' in her hair. What an expressive way to say it!
You continue to amaze me, Brooke!
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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I loved this! I especially liked how you used 'garland' in her hair. What an expressive way to say it!
You continue to amaze me, Brooke!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Linda, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Bina1
I can still remember what I was doing that day when we heard, guess it will be remembered as will JFK's death. What a beautiful, complex poem. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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I can still remember what I was doing that day when we heard, guess it will be remembered as will JFK's death. What a beautiful, complex poem. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much, Bina, for generous response to this poem. Yep, I can remember that morning in far far greater detail than I remember most days. I can remember people's exact words to me, like the teacher who told me I could watch the TV in his room during my break period after he told me of the first crash. I remember which desk I was sitting at when I watched the second crash live... Brooke
Comment from trimple
Oh my goodness Brooke your poetry appears to be positively outstanding recently. I don't know if you are experiencing something wonderful in your life right now, but something is pushing the boundaries of what it is to write so eloquently.
Like your autumnal leaves, I am blown away...
much love
tracey:)
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Oh my goodness Brooke your poetry appears to be positively outstanding recently. I don't know if you are experiencing something wonderful in your life right now, but something is pushing the boundaries of what it is to write so eloquently.
Like your autumnal leaves, I am blown away...
much love
tracey:)
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Thank you so very much, tracey, for your gracious comments and generous rating :-) Brooke
Comment from misscookie
I like the artwork you choose to go with your poem I capture my attention first than your poem
The fall is a beautiful time of year even if it quickly disappears the memories I'm glad last much longer,
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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I like the artwork you choose to go with your poem I capture my attention first than your poem
The fall is a beautiful time of year even if it quickly disappears the memories I'm glad last much longer,
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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miss cookie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are very welcome, have a blessed week end.
Cookie
Comment from emrpoems
Loved the rhyming scheme and rhythm
Excellent enjambment
Nice alliteration
Good commentary on The deathly effect of Autumn. or a moment I thought your were metaphorically referring to the terrorist act but then by your author's notes I don't think you were
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Loved the rhyming scheme and rhythm
Excellent enjambment
Nice alliteration
Good commentary on The deathly effect of Autumn. or a moment I thought your were metaphorically referring to the terrorist act but then by your author's notes I don't think you were
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, emrpoems :-) Brooke
Comment from GWHARGIS
Everyone assumes that the beach is the best n the summer, but I gotta tell you, the fall is the most beautiful time of year here. The water is warm, the grasses turn an amazing golden color and the pace is slower. It is when Autumn here, at least, is when she shines. Great poem.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Everyone assumes that the beach is the best n the summer, but I gotta tell you, the fall is the most beautiful time of year here. The water is warm, the grasses turn an amazing golden color and the pace is slower. It is when Autumn here, at least, is when she shines. Great poem.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Gretchen, thank you so much :-) I love that brief period in fall when everything is so beautiful before all the leaves just turn brown and ugly. :-) Brooke
Comment from evilynne
I remember well how beautiful a day that day when terror struck and we looked on disbelief. Your poem is symbolic in its expression of the beauty of autumn into the stark onset of winter; a beautiful autumn day passing into one of the darkest moments in history.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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I remember well how beautiful a day that day when terror struck and we looked on disbelief. Your poem is symbolic in its expression of the beauty of autumn into the stark onset of winter; a beautiful autumn day passing into one of the darkest moments in history.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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evilynne, thank you so very much for your generous and thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from mfowler
This is a sombre tribute clothed in the metaphorical autum's death frock. You remember 9-11, and connect it to the moments when the beauty of the day gives over to death by terrorism. I can't remember the style of poetry, but it's reeling lines felt like a dirge or death knell as I read. Deceptively beautiful, while obviously pain-filled.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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This is a sombre tribute clothed in the metaphorical autum's death frock. You remember 9-11, and connect it to the moments when the beauty of the day gives over to death by terrorism. I can't remember the style of poetry, but it's reeling lines felt like a dirge or death knell as I read. Deceptively beautiful, while obviously pain-filled.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Mark, thank you so much for your thoughtful response to this pantoum. Brooke
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a thought provoking poem about time elapsing and the perfectness of a moment. Autumn is a very pretty time but it is a time of what seems like death. As all the death that on Sept. 11, 2001 that started on a perfect day.
I see that the 3d lines are alterd grammatically so the poem flows.
It is a beautiful picture.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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This is a thought provoking poem about time elapsing and the perfectness of a moment. Autumn is a very pretty time but it is a time of what seems like death. As all the death that on Sept. 11, 2001 that started on a perfect day.
I see that the 3d lines are alterd grammatically so the poem flows.
It is a beautiful picture.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Joan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are so very welcome, Brooke.
Joan
Comment from TheWritingType
The cycling of lines was really interesting, i've never seen that before. Is there a name for that kind of poem structure or is it something you've come up with independantly? If so- kudos to you! There were a few lines that tripped me up but over all I think it was very good :)
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The cycling of lines was really interesting, i've never seen that before. Is there a name for that kind of poem structure or is it something you've come up with independantly? If so- kudos to you! There were a few lines that tripped me up but over all I think it was very good :)
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
