Though Autumn Wears...
a modified pantoum160 total reviews
Comment from Niyuta
A well constructed poem reflecting the somber moments of our lives. The Nature's splendor before the winter hibernation is caught well in the first stanza and the passage of Time that brings inevitable wrinkles on our face is well depicted. It is a poem that brings somber moods and makes us reflect on the cycle of birth, life's journey and death. I felt the poem got little bit away from the autumn leaves in the middle and returned to them at the end.-Not sure if 9/11 event of past had any relation to the main theme of the poem.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2014
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A well constructed poem reflecting the somber moments of our lives. The Nature's splendor before the winter hibernation is caught well in the first stanza and the passage of Time that brings inevitable wrinkles on our face is well depicted. It is a poem that brings somber moods and makes us reflect on the cycle of birth, life's journey and death. I felt the poem got little bit away from the autumn leaves in the middle and returned to them at the end.-Not sure if 9/11 event of past had any relation to the main theme of the poem.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2014
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Thank you for reading, Niyuta. As the writer of the poem, I assure you the events of 9/11 were in my mind as I wrote the poem. If that failed to come through, I apologize. Brooke
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Brook you don't need to apologize! It is a privilege of a poet to write the poem as she or he feels and sometimes subtle meanings of word remain so and that is not a negative thing; it is the difference between the understanding and feelings of two different individuals. Thanks for the reply.-Arun
Comment from Acquired Taste
Really sad and a bit foreboding. I so enjoy this time of year, but your words are true - when time demands, leaves drop and the bare trees are what we have left. Enjoy this a lot Brooke. Jean
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2014
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Really sad and a bit foreboding. I so enjoy this time of year, but your words are true - when time demands, leaves drop and the bare trees are what we have left. Enjoy this a lot Brooke. Jean
Comment Written 11-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2014
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Jean, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an interesting and foreboding poem that the author has created with this piece of work. Yes indeed, time waits for nobody. As sure as the seasons come and go, the years pass by as well. I will be in the rocking chair in the corner before I know it. LOL.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2014
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This is an interesting and foreboding poem that the author has created with this piece of work. Yes indeed, time waits for nobody. As sure as the seasons come and go, the years pass by as well. I will be in the rocking chair in the corner before I know it. LOL.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2014
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Tomes, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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My pleasure
Comment from humpwhistle
It's sad that any day and any season has to bear
the stigma of such sadness and horror. Yes, it did appear to be a perfect day.
You depict early autumn as a glorious time--as it should be. A time of color and harvest.
And, yes it usually is Time demands the change.
But for once it wasn't Time's tune to call.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2014
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It's sad that any day and any season has to bear
the stigma of such sadness and horror. Yes, it did appear to be a perfect day.
You depict early autumn as a glorious time--as it should be. A time of color and harvest.
And, yes it usually is Time demands the change.
But for once it wasn't Time's tune to call.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 11-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2014
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Lee, thank you so much, my thoughtful friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Ben Colder
Sitting near the garden and watching leaves fall from my fruit orchard, I thought of this while reading your poem. Well done Brooke. It sings a timely rhythm. Blessings
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Sitting near the garden and watching leaves fall from my fruit orchard, I thought of this while reading your poem. Well done Brooke. It sings a timely rhythm. Blessings
Comment Written 11-Sep-2014
Comment from ravenblack
Excellent and a six if I they had not already fallen from my hands like Autumn leaves. Yes, as we remember this day, it is tainted by the brown garb of death. But, just have to remember that garland of Color that we will be wearing eventually when the clock stops.
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Excellent and a six if I they had not already fallen from my hands like Autumn leaves. Yes, as we remember this day, it is tainted by the brown garb of death. But, just have to remember that garland of Color that we will be wearing eventually when the clock stops.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2014
Comment from c_lucas
As usual, this is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a tremendous read. There is good imagery and descriptive scheme.
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As usual, this is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a tremendous read. There is good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2014
Comment from nancy_e_davis
A lovely pantoum Brooke. The autumn is ablaze with color before the big chill sets in and kills the beauty of the landscape. I love the second stanza here. The thought of a widows frock is very sad as was that terrible day in our history. well done. Nancy
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A lovely pantoum Brooke. The autumn is ablaze with color before the big chill sets in and kills the beauty of the landscape. I love the second stanza here. The thought of a widows frock is very sad as was that terrible day in our history. well done. Nancy
Comment Written 11-Sep-2014
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, brooke, stark imagery presented through this modified pantoum poem and it makes the reader ponder the words within. I enjoyed reading it...
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this is an excellent write, brooke, stark imagery presented through this modified pantoum poem and it makes the reader ponder the words within. I enjoyed reading it...
Comment Written 11-Sep-2014
Comment from TAB_that's me
I love the Autumn leaves but not the bare trees that are left nor the winter weather. Nice Autumn poem Brooke with great imagery.
Teresa
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reply by the author on 11-Sep-2014
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I love the Autumn leaves but not the bare trees that are left nor the winter weather. Nice Autumn poem Brooke with great imagery.
Teresa
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Comment Written 11-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Teresa :-) Brooke
