Writing Prompt Entries 2014
Viewing comments for Chapter 73 "This Morning (before 8)"The clue is in the title!
10 total reviews
Comment from Jean Lutz
I do childcare in a home with three children under six. Amazing how much joy -- and chaos -- they can bring. I am still sulking from being outsmarted by a three year old yesterday. She convinced me yogurt covered raisins were not sweets but fruit. Next time I will read the label instead of taking her word.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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I do childcare in a home with three children under six. Amazing how much joy -- and chaos -- they can bring. I am still sulking from being outsmarted by a three year old yesterday. She convinced me yogurt covered raisins were not sweets but fruit. Next time I will read the label instead of taking her word.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Hello Jean :) Thank you for dropping by! Three year olds can be very convincing can't they?! Mine would have me believe whatever suits her at any given time LOL!
Children are a joy (mostly!) I just wish that my three would get along with each other a little better.
Kindest regards as always, Debra
Comment from Leineco
Thank God for coffee!!
I imagine many of us are bears first thing in the morning. . .growling and grumpy LOL
All we want is some peace and quiet for 5 LOUSY minutes!!! Dang-it!
{sigh}
Thank God for coffee. . . . . .
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
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Thank God for coffee!!
I imagine many of us are bears first thing in the morning. . .growling and grumpy LOL
All we want is some peace and quiet for 5 LOUSY minutes!!! Dang-it!
{sigh}
Thank God for coffee. . . . . .
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
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I know, its' not too much to ask is it? Really?!
I'm actually kind of good in the morning - til the kids get up. It's like they've been programmed to press my buttons!
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
LOL! I remember those days. Chaos! And, me, not being a morning person can soooo identify with this one.
Great poem, with spot on artwork as well. Very calmly pouring her coffee whilst she wants to scream! LOL
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*^*)
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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LOL! I remember those days. Chaos! And, me, not being a morning person can soooo identify with this one.
Great poem, with spot on artwork as well. Very calmly pouring her coffee whilst she wants to scream! LOL
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*^*)
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Hi Jax :) thank you south for your great feedback and empathy! I also really appreciate your good luck wishes :) kindest regards...
Comment from rrabinow
Wonderfully written poem that you wrote for this prompt. I like the way that you formatted your poem. Great picture as well. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Wonderfully written poem that you wrote for this prompt. I like the way that you formatted your poem. Great picture as well. Best of luck.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thank you rrabinow for your great feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)
Comment from gypsycaravan
Admit it. You had a granny cam on my morning, didn't you? Very cute and clever. Think I'm going to like this gog-something style poetry. Good luck.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Admit it. You had a granny cam on my morning, didn't you? Very cute and clever. Think I'm going to like this gog-something style poetry. Good luck.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Hi gypsycaravan :) Thank you so much for your fun feedback and also for your good luck wishes! I appreciate both :) Kindest regards...
Comment from Imogen JH
Yes. I can relate very nicely to the theme of this poem. It's always a good feeling to see the last of them disappear out of the door.
Nicely laid out poem. The first two lines sets the scene well. It creates the tension you are trying to express.
Third line, I might have been tempted to bring in even more sentiment than you have.
The forth line is brilliant. Now you have brought in the raw, desperate emotion.
Even the author notes adds to the feel. There's a bit of feeling there also.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Yes. I can relate very nicely to the theme of this poem. It's always a good feeling to see the last of them disappear out of the door.
Nicely laid out poem. The first two lines sets the scene well. It creates the tension you are trying to express.
Third line, I might have been tempted to bring in even more sentiment than you have.
The forth line is brilliant. Now you have brought in the raw, desperate emotion.
Even the author notes adds to the feel. There's a bit of feeling there also.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Hi Imogen :)
Thank you so much for your great feedback. I really appreciate hearing what you specifically enjoyed and what works well.
Kindest regards as always...:)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You poem is so true. We have all been there and done that. I like your word choices in line four. The image is perfect. No changes needed. Good job.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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You poem is so true. We have all been there and done that. I like your word choices in line four. The image is perfect. No changes needed. Good job.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much jannypan for your great feedback :) Kindest regards...
Comment from lindalcreel
Oh, I remember those days when the kids were in school. Then one day they were grown, married and had children. I found I rather enjoyed the solitude for awhile. Mornings are me time and I am not the most pleasant person until I've had that first cup of Java. LOL
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Oh, I remember those days when the kids were in school. Then one day they were grown, married and had children. I found I rather enjoyed the solitude for awhile. Mornings are me time and I am not the most pleasant person until I've had that first cup of Java. LOL
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Hi lindalcreel :) From one coffee lover to another, thank you so much for your great feedback! Kindest regards...:)
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MY pleasure:) Linda
Comment from OLA THOMAS
This poem even read like a cacophony poem, with vivid effects of noise through your choices of words. Very effective use of personification of the hidden force at work.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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This poem even read like a cacophony poem, with vivid effects of noise through your choices of words. Very effective use of personification of the hidden force at work.
ola thomas
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thank you Ola for your great feedback. Kindest regards...:)
Comment from DerivedBetter
This was pretty funny. I think tough that you need to space your lines it. I see that you have basically five sentences, but the way they are formatted makes it hard to tell what your five lines are. Just a thought for the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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This was pretty funny. I think tough that you need to space your lines it. I see that you have basically five sentences, but the way they are formatted makes it hard to tell what your five lines are. Just a thought for the contest.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Hi DerivedBetter, thank you for your great feedback. I have reformatted the poem as suggested :) Kindest regards...
