Free Will
chain rhyming143 total reviews
Comment from Winslow
Dear Brooke,
I agree with you. God gave us free-will. If we do wrong it is our responsibility which is much better than following a script. Predestination I believe doesn't exist.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Dear Brooke,
I agree with you. God gave us free-will. If we do wrong it is our responsibility which is much better than following a script. Predestination I believe doesn't exist.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much, Winslow :-) Brooke
Comment from Spitfire
What is chain rhyming? This is a thought-provoking poem. According to one theory, we plan our next life according to whatever karmic debts we owe from a past life. But we do have free will and that's where someone changes his script and may end up in jail. LOL. On the other hand, maybe that was his/her choice too. I think the puppeteer has give us both talent and flaws. It's up to us how to use them.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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What is chain rhyming? This is a thought-provoking poem. According to one theory, we plan our next life according to whatever karmic debts we owe from a past life. But we do have free will and that's where someone changes his script and may end up in jail. LOL. On the other hand, maybe that was his/her choice too. I think the puppeteer has give us both talent and flaws. It's up to us how to use them.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, Spitfire. Chain rhyming goes aaba bbcb ccdc - that third line of a stanza determines the rhyming group of the next stanza and so on and so forth, so the stanzas are linked together like a chain :-) I don't believe in past lives, but I know some do, and I honor everyone's right to choose their own belief system :-) Brooke
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Thanks for clarifying the chain rhyme. As for past lives, who knows?
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello adewpearl, Brooke, OMG, this poem expresses so much of what I've been thinking about and saying, especially about the "puppeteer. Do you have ESP or have you been living within my mind - lol ... perhaps, a little of both.
I especially liked:
but are our lives so disengaged,
a script writ on another's page,
that we don't have the final say
in whom we love or wars we wage?
And:
If life is just a part I play,
a script from which I cannot stray,
directed by some puppeteer,
who tells me what I must obey,
(Puppeteer has definitely been the word of the week for my last two weeks. It's time to get the scissors and cut the
strings. I'll pass you the scissors when I'm done --
big-teeth smile.)
Thank you for the author's notes. Very good. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Hello adewpearl, Brooke, OMG, this poem expresses so much of what I've been thinking about and saying, especially about the "puppeteer. Do you have ESP or have you been living within my mind - lol ... perhaps, a little of both.
I especially liked:
but are our lives so disengaged,
a script writ on another's page,
that we don't have the final say
in whom we love or wars we wage?
And:
If life is just a part I play,
a script from which I cannot stray,
directed by some puppeteer,
who tells me what I must obey,
(Puppeteer has definitely been the word of the week for my last two weeks. It's time to get the scissors and cut the
strings. I'll pass you the scissors when I'm done --
big-teeth smile.)
Thank you for the author's notes. Very good. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much, LateBloomer. I am always moved to hear that something I've said resonates on this level with a reader's emotions and experience. I so appreciate your sharing that with me :-) Brooke
Comment from rrabinow
I like the line the product of another's schemes. Great use of descriptive words in your poem. Great rhyme scheme used. I enjoyed reading your poem.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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I like the line the product of another's schemes. Great use of descriptive words in your poem. Great rhyme scheme used. I enjoyed reading your poem.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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rrabinow,thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from l.raven
HI Brooke, sometimes I wonder why we are here...feel like a puppet at times...Love your poem...very interest...a poem for thought...Miranda should be a professional photographer by now...what a stunning picture...so very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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HI Brooke, sometimes I wonder why we are here...feel like a puppet at times...Love your poem...very interest...a poem for thought...Miranda should be a professional photographer by now...what a stunning picture...so very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Linda, thank you so much, my friend. I'll pass the compliment on to Miranda :-) Brooke
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Please do....she deserves it...have a great night ...Love xxoo you are so welcome...
Comment from daeneam
A very good poem to ponder... If life is just a part I play, I guess, I'm not that good as an actor. I have a tendency to go astray. But, it's a treasure finding an inspirational poem like this that will lead one to play his part well. c", Mae
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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A very good poem to ponder... If life is just a part I play, I guess, I'm not that good as an actor. I have a tendency to go astray. But, it's a treasure finding an inspirational poem like this that will lead one to play his part well. c", Mae
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Mae, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from lancellot
A very thought provoking piece. You tackle a question that the greatest and least of minds could not answer throughout history. I like to think we have free will and there is no script.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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A very thought provoking piece. You tackle a question that the greatest and least of minds could not answer throughout history. I like to think we have free will and there is no script.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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lancellot, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from DSMalott
Very good indeed.
Well paced, rhymed and structured.
I enjoyed the ease of the read and the flow of thought. A great mixture of questioning and resolving.
Even without the author's notes I got it!
Very well done.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Very good indeed.
Well paced, rhymed and structured.
I enjoyed the ease of the read and the flow of thought. A great mixture of questioning and resolving.
Even without the author's notes I got it!
Very well done.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Thank you, DS, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from RGstar
Shakespeare's soliloquies may not be so wrong with the speech mentioned, for in some way or form, regardless of the control we may think we have, or the path we think we ourselves choose, we may find that a lot of our choices are often influenced by others. This can be good or bad, mainly because life changing decisions are usually the product of our environment and those who occupy or control it.
Good rhetorical questions here and nicely presented.
Rgstar
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Shakespeare's soliloquies may not be so wrong with the speech mentioned, for in some way or form, regardless of the control we may think we have, or the path we think we ourselves choose, we may find that a lot of our choices are often influenced by others. This can be good or bad, mainly because life changing decisions are usually the product of our environment and those who occupy or control it.
Good rhetorical questions here and nicely presented.
Rgstar
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Thank you for your insights, RG :-) Brooke
Comment from kukarad70
Dear Adewpearl
Human life is so short, but dreams are innumerable. One after another always they get aroused. We are only the performer on the stage and life is like turning pages of scripts. No idea who controls us, but when our roles get over, we must say bye bye to this world.
Very nicely written poem inspired from Shakespearean two soliloquys. I have found excellent flow in your poetry and the most selective words, upper level writing standard.
Thanks and regards.
Kamal
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Dear Adewpearl
Human life is so short, but dreams are innumerable. One after another always they get aroused. We are only the performer on the stage and life is like turning pages of scripts. No idea who controls us, but when our roles get over, we must say bye bye to this world.
Very nicely written poem inspired from Shakespearean two soliloquys. I have found excellent flow in your poetry and the most selective words, upper level writing standard.
Thanks and regards.
Kamal
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Kamal, thank you so much for your most thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
