Free Will
chain rhyming143 total reviews
Comment from Donya Quijote
love the reference to Shakespeare. The stage is a great metaphor for life. The references rang in my ear from the moment I started reading. The first stanza oddly enough reminded me of the ending to Men in Black when are aliens are seen playing with marbles and the marbles are galaxies and one is ours. Don't ask I just got home from school but thought you might like to know the oddities running through my brain as I review.
Nice philosophical tone especially with the questions. They have a universal quality, and I think many ask the same question from time to time. Ultimately, you are asking if there be a purpose to all this.
Not familiar with chain rhymes, but I can say there is something about the sound as it is read aloud. There's movement, and mood too. And yet it is smooth, not at all like the bounce created by the pronounced iambic of the previous post.
Just between you and me, I'm on the side of free will and not the script, but with free will comes responsibility and that is where the problems lie, so many problems.
Another good one. Such a pleasure to read...
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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love the reference to Shakespeare. The stage is a great metaphor for life. The references rang in my ear from the moment I started reading. The first stanza oddly enough reminded me of the ending to Men in Black when are aliens are seen playing with marbles and the marbles are galaxies and one is ours. Don't ask I just got home from school but thought you might like to know the oddities running through my brain as I review.
Nice philosophical tone especially with the questions. They have a universal quality, and I think many ask the same question from time to time. Ultimately, you are asking if there be a purpose to all this.
Not familiar with chain rhymes, but I can say there is something about the sound as it is read aloud. There's movement, and mood too. And yet it is smooth, not at all like the bounce created by the pronounced iambic of the previous post.
Just between you and me, I'm on the side of free will and not the script, but with free will comes responsibility and that is where the problems lie, so many problems.
Another good one. Such a pleasure to read...
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much, Donya - the chain rhyme is the same as the one Robert Frost used in Stopping by Woods. And I love to hear what is running through your brain :-) Brooke
Comment from Genya
How important is free will. Sometimes we may make the wrong choices, but better to make a choice than having something forced upon us. I know both plays you mention by Shakespeare and must admit All the world's a stage and all the men and women merely players. Love this soliloquy. So much is said here and the way you brought it into your poem was brilliantly done...whose parts are played upon a stage. Such a pleasure to read your work as it really is inspirational. Genya
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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How important is free will. Sometimes we may make the wrong choices, but better to make a choice than having something forced upon us. I know both plays you mention by Shakespeare and must admit All the world's a stage and all the men and women merely players. Love this soliloquy. So much is said here and the way you brought it into your poem was brilliantly done...whose parts are played upon a stage. Such a pleasure to read your work as it really is inspirational. Genya
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Genya, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Oatmeal
adewpear,
The theme well thought out. I enjoyed this poem very much. Reading it was a pleasure. The flow was smooth.
It is spotless.
Your feelings are very understandable and expressed through the poem.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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adewpear,
The theme well thought out. I enjoyed this poem very much. Reading it was a pleasure. The flow was smooth.
It is spotless.
Your feelings are very understandable and expressed through the poem.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Oatmeal, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from boxergirl
I like your poem about Free Will. It emphasizes the futility of life if we just were pawns on a chest board. I, for one, am glad that we have free will, even if I do make some "bad" choices sometimes. 8-)
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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I like your poem about Free Will. It emphasizes the futility of life if we just were pawns on a chest board. I, for one, am glad that we have free will, even if I do make some "bad" choices sometimes. 8-)
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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boxergirl, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Trybuck
Are we the stuff of other's dreams
a pawn in another's schemes
Not having a mind of our own
With which to ponder these things
I say my mind is not on loan
and never will it condone
Being slave to another's plan
Sitting dormant like a stone
Ok, I'm through now.. Takes too long to count those syllables..
Well done as always with your chain rhyme, Buck
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Are we the stuff of other's dreams
a pawn in another's schemes
Not having a mind of our own
With which to ponder these things
I say my mind is not on loan
and never will it condone
Being slave to another's plan
Sitting dormant like a stone
Ok, I'm through now.. Takes too long to count those syllables..
Well done as always with your chain rhyme, Buck
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, Buck, for your generous and thoughtful poetic response to my poem :-) Brooke
Comment from JudyS
Brooke, I like this one a lot. Good use of Shakespeare. It certainly gets you thinking about life. Excellent write. Have a wonderful day. Judy
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Brooke, I like this one a lot. Good use of Shakespeare. It certainly gets you thinking about life. Excellent write. Have a wonderful day. Judy
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Judy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from risktaker
A great testament to the fact that each one of us controls our destiny by our thoughts and actions. We are the engineers of our life experiences through our choices, and beliefs. We give our power to others when we are not true to ourselves or embrace and develop the talents that make us unique. We choose to be a leader or a follower throughout life. Thanks
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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A great testament to the fact that each one of us controls our destiny by our thoughts and actions. We are the engineers of our life experiences through our choices, and beliefs. We give our power to others when we are not true to ourselves or embrace and develop the talents that make us unique. We choose to be a leader or a follower throughout life. Thanks
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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risktaker, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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Comment from krys123
Brooke;
this accurate placement, and annotated commentary on the effectiveness of man's own say so of his life and the future of his existence, is marvelously written.
The technical aspects of your writing are masterfully done, where your writing is neither forced nor labored and the rhythm flowing smoothly throughout the writing and where you're rhyming helps with the rhythmic flow, and is a pleasure to read.
From an observational point of view The imagery is marvelously descriptive and uniquely and elegantly expressive throughout your writing: "...we don't have the final say in whom we love or war we wage?" That in a nutshell is an exclusive understanding that we don't have any control over our fate and or destiny.
Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for everyone to be and may the Lord be with you always Brooke.
Alex
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Brooke;
this accurate placement, and annotated commentary on the effectiveness of man's own say so of his life and the future of his existence, is marvelously written.
The technical aspects of your writing are masterfully done, where your writing is neither forced nor labored and the rhythm flowing smoothly throughout the writing and where you're rhyming helps with the rhythmic flow, and is a pleasure to read.
From an observational point of view The imagery is marvelously descriptive and uniquely and elegantly expressive throughout your writing: "...we don't have the final say in whom we love or war we wage?" That in a nutshell is an exclusive understanding that we don't have any control over our fate and or destiny.
Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for everyone to be and may the Lord be with you always Brooke.
Alex
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, Alex :-) I missed you in chat at 4. I sent you a PM asking if you want to reschedule for Tuesday or Wednesday :-) Brooke
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As I told you before I had a run-in with the tomato. You are so sincerely welcome my dearest friend.
Alex
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The poem is unique and engaged my mind right from the beginning. The author's words are strong,
confronting and thought provoking. The artwork is perfect and compliments the creative words of this poem.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Excellent Poem! The poem is unique and engaged my mind right from the beginning. The author's words are strong,
confronting and thought provoking. The artwork is perfect and compliments the creative words of this poem.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Harmony, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from LIJ Red
The closer the sunset the less I like the last part of that
seven ages rap. Oh, we have self-determination- I just don't like the ten to one ohcrap to attaboy ratio. Luck's a chance but trouble's sure, A.E.H. said. You're sombre today
but write as well as ever.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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The closer the sunset the less I like the last part of that
seven ages rap. Oh, we have self-determination- I just don't like the ten to one ohcrap to attaboy ratio. Luck's a chance but trouble's sure, A.E.H. said. You're sombre today
but write as well as ever.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much, LIJ. It's Sawyer's first day of school, and I'm sitting on pins and needles waiting to hear how it has gone, so that has me in a somber mood. LOL :-) Brooke
