Burned
How love can affect the fate of the mind2 total reviews
Comment from lynglyng
This poem reminded me of that old Johnny Cash song, "Ring of Fire" Very clear message and good job with the ideas flowing nicely from one line to the next. Thank you for sharing.
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This poem reminded me of that old Johnny Cash song, "Ring of Fire" Very clear message and good job with the ideas flowing nicely from one line to the next. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
Comment from Trybuck
When you get the syllable count right, you've got a good entry for the contest.
Your first line has 4 syllables
Your second line has 6 syllables
Your third line is perfect with five..
You may want to change the first two lines, Buck
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When you get the syllable count right, you've got a good entry for the contest.
Your first line has 4 syllables
Your second line has 6 syllables
Your third line is perfect with five..
You may want to change the first two lines, Buck
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
