Texas Dream Catcher
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "CHAPTER SEIS, PART UNO"Drug & human trafficking, can romance win?
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Comment from L.M.Mullins
Excellent use of dialogue to show the building tension. Nice to see some interaction with our mystery man Jim and both Soni and Alex.
LM
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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Excellent use of dialogue to show the building tension. Nice to see some interaction with our mystery man Jim and both Soni and Alex.
LM
Comment Written 22-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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I see you are a true fan, thank you.
Comment from write hand blue
Hi Barbara, your story is most relistic with the right amount of dialogue to show the scene.
Sounds as if the border agents have quite a time stopping that route.
A story based on truth, giving a good picture. :) mel.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Hi Barbara, your story is most relistic with the right amount of dialogue to show the scene.
Sounds as if the border agents have quite a time stopping that route.
A story based on truth, giving a good picture. :) mel.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Thank you for dropping by. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from jim lawler
Very well done no editing needed; it's interesting, I like the way your dialogue moves along; nice rhythm and it's believable. All in all this an excellent presentation Barbara. Keep it up! Good luck. Jim Lawler
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Very well done no editing needed; it's interesting, I like the way your dialogue moves along; nice rhythm and it's believable. All in all this an excellent presentation Barbara. Keep it up! Good luck. Jim Lawler
Comment Written 11-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Thank you for dropping by. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from José Ángel
I liked your story, despite not having read it before, it's a good job, I liked the plot and how the story unfolds. Congratulations, great job. A hug from Chile
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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I liked your story, despite not having read it before, it's a good job, I liked the plot and how the story unfolds. Congratulations, great job. A hug from Chile
Comment Written 11-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Thank you for dropping by. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from Keith Argyle
This the first I have read of this story, but I'm intrigued and impressed at the story so far. I love the dialogue very much and it portrays the characters very well and strongly. It's always a good idea to read your work out loud and then you will find the errors of your dialogue and narrative when you see and hear how they sound. Read it as a stranger would see your work. However, even though I have only just read this section, it stamps of a damn good story. Your description is strong, be careful not to overdo it though, padding never helps. I know nothing of drug barons or anything of the like, but the story comes over very strongly about that subject. It should prove to be a very interesting read. Keep it going and expand from your notes. This is my technique and it works very well. Planning is the secret. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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This the first I have read of this story, but I'm intrigued and impressed at the story so far. I love the dialogue very much and it portrays the characters very well and strongly. It's always a good idea to read your work out loud and then you will find the errors of your dialogue and narrative when you see and hear how they sound. Read it as a stranger would see your work. However, even though I have only just read this section, it stamps of a damn good story. Your description is strong, be careful not to overdo it though, padding never helps. I know nothing of drug barons or anything of the like, but the story comes over very strongly about that subject. It should prove to be a very interesting read. Keep it going and expand from your notes. This is my technique and it works very well. Planning is the secret. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Thank you for dropping by. I appreciate the kind review.
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You are very welcome, no worries. Keep up the great story. Keith.
Comment from Fridayauthor
This chapter is well written with particularly good dialog. The story moves along nicely and encourages the reader to continue.
Nice posting. Thank you.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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This chapter is well written with particularly good dialog. The story moves along nicely and encourages the reader to continue.
Nice posting. Thank you.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Thank you for dropping by. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from Kausar_Javeria
Hello there~!
That last dialogue from Jim, lol! I love this work. I wonder if there's gonna be a special scene at the dining table. Wonder if Soni will start speaking to him again... Wonder if... aahahh.. I c an't wait for the next part!
JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)
(^_^)-<~~KAUSAR~~>-(^_^)
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Hello there~!
That last dialogue from Jim, lol! I love this work. I wonder if there's gonna be a special scene at the dining table. Wonder if Soni will start speaking to him again... Wonder if... aahahh.. I c an't wait for the next part!
JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)
(^_^)-<~~KAUSAR~~>-(^_^)
Comment Written 11-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Thank you for dropping by. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A good chapter. Sounds like he is up to no good. Theres a town about 30 miles from here that is the drug capital of Iowa. I used to work there but would be afraid to get out of the car now. Shootings, stabbings are quite common. Scary place. Hope your having a good night, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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A good chapter. Sounds like he is up to no good. Theres a town about 30 miles from here that is the drug capital of Iowa. I used to work there but would be afraid to get out of the car now. Shootings, stabbings are quite common. Scary place. Hope your having a good night, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 10-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Thank you for dropping by. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from Allieas
I haven't read the rest of your story, but I really felt drawn in from this small segment. As you mentioned in the comments, I am confused! But not because of errors, just because I haven't read the rest of the story. Anyway, I especially enjoy your dialogue. It feels very realistic and flows well.
I didn't find any errors. Looks good! Good luck with your story! =)
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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I haven't read the rest of your story, but I really felt drawn in from this small segment. As you mentioned in the comments, I am confused! But not because of errors, just because I haven't read the rest of the story. Anyway, I especially enjoy your dialogue. It feels very realistic and flows well.
I didn't find any errors. Looks good! Good luck with your story! =)
Comment Written 10-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Thank you for dropping by. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from Sasha
This post is not the least bit too long. I enjoyed it very much. Your characters are developing nicely and the story is picking up at a great pace. Keep up the good work. Lots of good information in this one too.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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This post is not the least bit too long. I enjoyed it very much. Your characters are developing nicely and the story is picking up at a great pace. Keep up the good work. Lots of good information in this one too.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Thank you for dropping by. I appreciate the kind review.
