Reap What You Sow
A legend is born.54 total reviews
Comment from Gargantuan2
Hard to get all that in one syllable words. Here are a few edits I would suggest:
I sit, lone in the dark;
I sit, the lone one in the dark;
Till now
'Till now
tasted (2 syllables)
gnawed maybe?
Good luck in the voting booth. :)
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Hard to get all that in one syllable words. Here are a few edits I would suggest:
I sit, lone in the dark;
I sit, the lone one in the dark;
Till now
'Till now
tasted (2 syllables)
gnawed maybe?
Good luck in the voting booth. :)
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Yup it was. Thank you for the excellent review.
Comment from Michaelk
This is an excellent story. The descriptions you used were so wonderfully vivid. You painted a master artwork with your words. It was so visual, I could see the bullet whizzing past his ear in matrix like bullet time. I liked that you had him stop and talk to the last victim. Especially to chastise him. 'You could've befriended me' is such a wonderfully unique line, I would've never considered it.
You had me hooked on this story from the beginning. Excellent job. Thank you for using my picture. I see you've put it to very good use.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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This is an excellent story. The descriptions you used were so wonderfully vivid. You painted a master artwork with your words. It was so visual, I could see the bullet whizzing past his ear in matrix like bullet time. I liked that you had him stop and talk to the last victim. Especially to chastise him. 'You could've befriended me' is such a wonderfully unique line, I would've never considered it.
You had me hooked on this story from the beginning. Excellent job. Thank you for using my picture. I see you've put it to very good use.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Michael. I truly appreciate the exceptional rating and the awesome art work to go with my tale. It is all appreciated.
Comment from humpwhistle
This prompt baffles me. I can't see how writing exclusively in single syllable words can improve anyone's writing skills. Well, not for me to judge.
As with the other entries I've read, I find myself distracted by the form, so I'm not paying attention to the plot. I think you stretch in a few areas--'lone' when you really mean 'alone', for instance.
Good luck.
Peace, Lee
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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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This prompt baffles me. I can't see how writing exclusively in single syllable words can improve anyone's writing skills. Well, not for me to judge.
As with the other entries I've read, I find myself distracted by the form, so I'm not paying attention to the plot. I think you stretch in a few areas--'lone' when you really mean 'alone', for instance.
Good luck.
Peace, Lee
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Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Lee, thanks for the review. I've made a few of the suggested changes. Thanks for the great review.
Comment from Eigle Rull
This piece was very well written in easy to read and understand words. The storyline is great. The dialog is also great. It is interesting and it held my attention easily. I enjoyed reading this story. It was excellent.
Always with respect,
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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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This piece was very well written in easy to read and understand words. The storyline is great. The dialog is also great. It is interesting and it held my attention easily. I enjoyed reading this story. It was excellent.
Always with respect,
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Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review.
