Vision and Sound: Their Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "An Ancient Embrace"Two souls that meet as strangers on earth.
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Comment from seaglass
This is, in my opinion, quite philosophical . Reminds me, just faintly, of the philosophical approach by Robert Bach in "Jonathan Livingston Seagull'
On the humorous side, the idea of making a man think an idea is his is a female trait, to be sure. We learned many years ago that claiming the glory for the idea isn't nearly as important as having our way. (<:)
The idea that God would send guides to shape the development of man is very believable to me. I've always found it interesting that throughout history, every cultural (not just Christians)had individuals whose teachings improved life and humanized the said society.
i.e. Confucius, Gandhi, M.L King Jr, Mandela and many more.
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This is, in my opinion, quite philosophical . Reminds me, just faintly, of the philosophical approach by Robert Bach in "Jonathan Livingston Seagull'
On the humorous side, the idea of making a man think an idea is his is a female trait, to be sure. We learned many years ago that claiming the glory for the idea isn't nearly as important as having our way. (<:)
The idea that God would send guides to shape the development of man is very believable to me. I've always found it interesting that throughout history, every cultural (not just Christians)had individuals whose teachings improved life and humanized the said society.
i.e. Confucius, Gandhi, M.L King Jr, Mandela and many more.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I admit I have trouble getting interested in ancient tribes hunting, but I have to say this...
The following sentences are among the most intelligent thinking I have ever seen on Fanstory (which may not be saying much... LOL). Seriously, amazing insight here:
"Beliefs on Earth are strengthened by sharing. If one believes something it becomes more solid with the agreement of another especially if there is respect or regard for that other."
I don't agree that it must be one on one, though. This is how political ideals are spread... the more who adhere to the principals, the more POPULAR they seem and the more SHEEP follow along. Very seldom is any independent thinking done. Slogans and "facts" (true or not) are simply adopted and the matter is settled in the lazy brain. This is the source of the nation's problems right now, and it's only getting worse. Schools no longer encourage individuals to THINK for themselves, but to parrot back "right" answers, that may be very flawed... but students win grades and acceptance by playing along. Why do all that hard thinking when it only gets you bad grades? And when you get a job, you must toe the company line on politics as well as perform your job. It wasn't always this way. Another reason we are DOOMED.
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I admit I have trouble getting interested in ancient tribes hunting, but I have to say this...
The following sentences are among the most intelligent thinking I have ever seen on Fanstory (which may not be saying much... LOL). Seriously, amazing insight here:
"Beliefs on Earth are strengthened by sharing. If one believes something it becomes more solid with the agreement of another especially if there is respect or regard for that other."
I don't agree that it must be one on one, though. This is how political ideals are spread... the more who adhere to the principals, the more POPULAR they seem and the more SHEEP follow along. Very seldom is any independent thinking done. Slogans and "facts" (true or not) are simply adopted and the matter is settled in the lazy brain. This is the source of the nation's problems right now, and it's only getting worse. Schools no longer encourage individuals to THINK for themselves, but to parrot back "right" answers, that may be very flawed... but students win grades and acceptance by playing along. Why do all that hard thinking when it only gets you bad grades? And when you get a job, you must toe the company line on politics as well as perform your job. It wasn't always this way. Another reason we are DOOMED.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the story. The souls are still changing the fate of man. Most of the people in this age would not be able to think of such a plan. Bing a female, the soul was able to plant the idea in the leader's head. A man could not have done it. The leader would have thought it an idea to take over the tribe. Great work..
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I love the story. The souls are still changing the fate of man. Most of the people in this age would not be able to think of such a plan. Bing a female, the soul was able to plant the idea in the leader's head. A man could not have done it. The leader would have thought it an idea to take over the tribe. Great work..
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
This is starting to move along now. Great depiction of the lifestyle. Dialogue sounds true. The connection is apparent but not too obvious between the two souls. Loving it. Truly unique story. Liking Magic Felix with the more relaxed demeaner.
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This is starting to move along now. Great depiction of the lifestyle. Dialogue sounds true. The connection is apparent but not too obvious between the two souls. Loving it. Truly unique story. Liking Magic Felix with the more relaxed demeaner.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
Comment from Michaelk
I guess its going to take a little while before half of your story isn't taken up by explanation. Your story is good, but it gets confusing when the main characters switch names halfway through. I like your premise behind these stories, I'm just having a hard time getting used to it. I see that Sam and vi are friends again. Will there ever be a story where they aren't? I liked the description of the tribes hierarchy, and the strict adherence to it. I'm looking forward to seeing if this bunt goes as well as the hunt from the last story.
Good chapter.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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I guess its going to take a little while before half of your story isn't taken up by explanation. Your story is good, but it gets confusing when the main characters switch names halfway through. I like your premise behind these stories, I'm just having a hard time getting used to it. I see that Sam and vi are friends again. Will there ever be a story where they aren't? I liked the description of the tribes hierarchy, and the strict adherence to it. I'm looking forward to seeing if this bunt goes as well as the hunt from the last story.
Good chapter.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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The earthbound stories will start to get longer and more conventional. It was a little difficult getting rolling. Had to establish some things. Most of the rest of the explanations will be sprinkled in here and there. The hunt will be interesting because they were in an almost identical situation before. They aren't always going to be friends though they probably won't be personal enemies but more so because of circumstance like one born a Jew and the other a Muslim. That doesn't happen, just an example. Or maybe it will. Hahaha. Appreciate the input. I feel what you're saying when I write this. I am anxious for it to get rolling too. mikey
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Thanks for your reply. Reading this gave me an idea. What if it is an antagonistic situation? Say on was born an American Indian and one born a settler, or born on two different sides of the civil war? You could use them to show that animosity doesn't have to be the norm between such people.
just a thought.
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Love the prehistoric mammoth scene. This reads nice. The prose is extra clean looking. Looks like you are preparing for the contest. I like fantasy... like Avatar. This is very interesting to read. I enjoyed it. i wish you luck with many reviews of this trilogy novel as it blossoms. Count your doubloon... wackydo
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Love the prehistoric mammoth scene. This reads nice. The prose is extra clean looking. Looks like you are preparing for the contest. I like fantasy... like Avatar. This is very interesting to read. I enjoyed it. i wish you luck with many reviews of this trilogy novel as it blossoms. Count your doubloon... wackydo
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
Comment from CR Delport
I like how you imprint your own personality on the narrator. This is an interesting story and you paint the picture well how it might have been in ancient times. Good job, Mikey.
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I like how you imprint your own personality on the narrator. This is an interesting story and you paint the picture well how it might have been in ancient times. Good job, Mikey.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, I smile at the last statement of leaders who think that ideas are of their own making but just heard it from someone else, female, no less. Just a thought. Think of some way to disguise the women's female scent because the beasts will smell the difference on the hunt. This is a creative write using a story that many historians find reasonable. Nice direction and philosophy. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, I smile at the last statement of leaders who think that ideas are of their own making but just heard it from someone else, female, no less. Just a thought. Think of some way to disguise the women's female scent because the beasts will smell the difference on the hunt. This is a creative write using a story that many historians find reasonable. Nice direction and philosophy. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
Comment from Titan Black
I like this write. For, it is more
than just your average talk... so to
speak. It actually takes the reader
through zones, and on to a more spiritual
level. Nice job. Keep writing.
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I like this write. For, it is more
than just your average talk... so to
speak. It actually takes the reader
through zones, and on to a more spiritual
level. Nice job. Keep writing.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
Comment from Jay Squires
Entertaining, with the voice of the Magic One and Farth, keeping the plot moving foreward.
New souls appear and there origin is a mystery to us, even to me. [their origin is...]
"To survive, we must hunt the mammoth. [I'm glad to see you use some dialogue. Unbroken narrative, even when by a humorous and wise person like The Magic one, gets kind of heavy and slow moving.
Good job, Mikey (?) Someone's Mikey.
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Entertaining, with the voice of the Magic One and Farth, keeping the plot moving foreward.
New souls appear and there origin is a mystery to us, even to me. [their origin is...]
"To survive, we must hunt the mammoth. [I'm glad to see you use some dialogue. Unbroken narrative, even when by a humorous and wise person like The Magic one, gets kind of heavy and slow moving.
Good job, Mikey (?) Someone's Mikey.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
