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The Animal Doctor

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Love Among the Thorns

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Comment from Allieas
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Wow, your recap of the last chapter hooked me immediately. I didn't know what was going on, but must have come in at a good time because I was drawn in. Great chapter, and really good writing. I didn't catch any SPAG issues. Thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 11-Sep-2014
    And thank you, Alexandra for taking the time to read. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from barkingdog
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Your novel is coming along nicely. I've been off line for a while and am trying to get back in the swing of things.
As always your chapters are packed full of plot information. You have quite the intrigue going. Well done. Most enjoyable.

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 11-Sep-2014
    OMG! I'm sooo glad to hear from you. I didn't know what happened. But, I did the same thing a few months ago. I missed you. Thank you so much for coming back and reading my chapter. Bless you.
reply by barkingdog on 12-Sep-2014
    I'm not posting. Just enjoying the talent--reading. See you again on the page. :) ellen
Comment from Kausar_Javeria
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Hello there~!
I have to say, I love Elisabeth very much! Love that character! Great job. this is very well-written.

JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)

(^_^)-<~~KAUSAR~~>-(^_^)

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 11-Sep-2014
    thank you very much.
Comment from Drew Delaney
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floor-lenth - should be floor-length

I found this chapter totally interesting and it is good. I also try to keep my chapters short. It's difficult to know what the readers want to do. Some would like them longer, but other's short. But there is not a whole lot of time for things to happen. Nice job.

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
    Thank you so much, Drew. Don't know how that pesky "g" got away from me.
reply by Drew Delaney on 10-Sep-2014
    It happens! LOL
Comment from adewpearl
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what does this have to do with you? - add question mark
excellent use of dialogue to convey strong emotion and conflict
Extremely strong emotions at play here, and it all seems very unpleasantly real
Brooke

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014

    Thank you, Brooke. I missed that. I'll correct it right away.
Comment from padumachitta
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Hi. The six is for the little details that make this a good read.
was held with a ruby and pearl-studded comb
fanning herself nervously
These give us an idea of the characters without a big fuss. We pick up on the small nuances and then can flseh them out better.

Ah, and the intrigue is just starting...secrets and secrets and scnadal and hearts...just the thing for aa grey afternoon..padumachitta

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
    My goodness, thank you so much, my dear. I'm so glad you enjoyed this read. And thanks ever so much for the six stars.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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Wonderful ending! Very sweet. :)

Grace should at least hear him out. She must not love him, or she would at least listen to what he has to say. I don't like Grace very much... too stuck on herself, UNFORGIVING. That's not the mark of a good person. It's very selfish. She is depriving her daughter of her father too.. that is the worst crime... far worse than Nate's mistake.

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
    Wow, Phyllis, this is interesting; you're the first person to dislike Grace.But I don't mind, I want my readers to have a reaction to my characters. Great review, Phyllis.
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
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I have read each chapter and am still intrigued by the life of Nathan and Grace. He has really been led down the path by Margaret, but unfortunately not the first married person to fall for 'lust' instead of 'love at home.' You weave your story with 'spice' but not 'filth'. You give the reader enough to paint a realistic scene without being overly graphic. It was touching to see Nate with the baby.. Elizabeth certainly had a tale for Mrs. Wainwright. So Margaret is Dr. Koren's daughter. Interesting turn of events. I hope Grace softens....
Well done, Carolyn

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 10-Sep-2014
    Thank you so much, Carolyn for keeping up with my book. I was ill for a while and had not post for two months. I'd hope no one had forgotten the story. Again, I thank you.
Comment from forestport12
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Your dialogue without tags was timely and fit the scene and movement of the plot, the further development of the characters too. I could visualize everything as the conflict with dialogue unraveled.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
    Thank you, Stan. I'm trying to hurry up and write, post and bring an ending to this story. I don't want fans to get bored with it. I've already started another book, and fantasy, then after that a Christian book. So keep me in your prayers. And thanks for keeping up with the book.
Comment from royowen
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Beautifully written and told Amahra, I've managed to get a handle on the main characters in this articulate and expressively told story, the main players are clear and well defined, the plot well structured and designed, the narrative absorbing and readable, well done, I look forward to the outcome of the blackmail of Rose, sad encounter with Nathan's little girl,
( so sad) and the snub by Grace, well done, blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
    Thank you so much, Roy. I really do appreciate you wanting to keep up. Blessings to you, also.