Death Rattle
My more srious take on Rigor mortis, and death...63 total reviews
Comment from rjuselius
this is a brilliant piece of poetic art! i love the imagery even if it is morbid and eerie! a true horror poem!
thank you for sharing, dearest friend!
rebekka x
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this is a brilliant piece of poetic art! i love the imagery even if it is morbid and eerie! a true horror poem!
thank you for sharing, dearest friend!
rebekka x
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
Comment from Marn
Love the artwork .Love the poem but I must admit I am a fan of your writing.Always intriguing,interesting and from the start of the very first sentence wanting to read more.Well done its excellent.
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Love the artwork .Love the poem but I must admit I am a fan of your writing.Always intriguing,interesting and from the start of the very first sentence wanting to read more.Well done its excellent.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
Comment from Acquired Taste
Pleasant Screams? You're a bowl full of fun this evening!
Love: Earthen hole, my weak legs straddle, gasping out my last death rattle. I can see Peter Boyle groping in Young Frankenstein.
I like this a lot Dean, the music is a plus - I was praying it didn't jump to a volume 45 in the middle and take my last breath.
The rhyming on this is pretty terrific and it flowed nicely. At one point I thought he'd wake up in a college dorm, drunk as hell, with some coed's sweater covering his face. Anyway...like it. Jean
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Pleasant Screams? You're a bowl full of fun this evening!
Love: Earthen hole, my weak legs straddle, gasping out my last death rattle. I can see Peter Boyle groping in Young Frankenstein.
I like this a lot Dean, the music is a plus - I was praying it didn't jump to a volume 45 in the middle and take my last breath.
The rhyming on this is pretty terrific and it flowed nicely. At one point I thought he'd wake up in a college dorm, drunk as hell, with some coed's sweater covering his face. Anyway...like it. Jean
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
Comment from Lynne
Holy cow, what amazing graphics. More importantly, your verbage was gripping. Excellent imagery and the flow was spot on. I truly enjoyed your graphics and more importantly, the effect of your words. Nicely done!
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Holy cow, what amazing graphics. More importantly, your verbage was gripping. Excellent imagery and the flow was spot on. I truly enjoyed your graphics and more importantly, the effect of your words. Nicely done!
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
Comment from Winslow
Dear Master of the Macabre,
A death rattle sounds but is it me? Yes, oh God let it not be. The candle flickers at my feet while my heart no longer beats. Demons come to my bed oh whoa is me I think I'm dead. Oh raven take pity and don't quote, "Never any more."
Warm regards,
Winslow
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Dear Master of the Macabre,
A death rattle sounds but is it me? Yes, oh God let it not be. The candle flickers at my feet while my heart no longer beats. Demons come to my bed oh whoa is me I think I'm dead. Oh raven take pity and don't quote, "Never any more."
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
Comment from w.j.debi
A very spooky write. I can see why you had to do a new one for the prompt. No humor here, just a blood curdling tale. Excellent graphics to add to the thrill of your presentation.
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A very spooky write. I can see why you had to do a new one for the prompt. No humor here, just a blood curdling tale. Excellent graphics to add to the thrill of your presentation.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
Comment from acerisestory
A wonderful poem, Dean, and so very eerie! Well done rhyming couplets.
Your words move with a great rhythmic pace, and your rhyming and meter are perfect! Of course, your accompanying artwork enhances your words very well.
I can give you nothing but a six! Thank you for sharing your immense talent. Take care. Alana
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A wonderful poem, Dean, and so very eerie! Well done rhyming couplets.
Your words move with a great rhythmic pace, and your rhyming and meter are perfect! Of course, your accompanying artwork enhances your words very well.
I can give you nothing but a six! Thank you for sharing your immense talent. Take care. Alana
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
Comment from kristo81
What a tour de force. This poem Gothic & reminiscent of Poe & Mary Shelley paints a picture in one's mind too realistic for the senses to bear. The artwork & background music made the lines resonate and the flesh creep. Nightmares beset men's minds a fill them with the dread of what is to come.
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What a tour de force. This poem Gothic & reminiscent of Poe & Mary Shelley paints a picture in one's mind too realistic for the senses to bear. The artwork & background music made the lines resonate and the flesh creep. Nightmares beset men's minds a fill them with the dread of what is to come.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh, my friend, you have mastered it! I am SO PROUD OF YOU! This is magnificent, Dean, and that includes meter! It brings tears to my eyes, no kidding, compadre. (I KNEW you could do it - no stopping you.)
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Oh, my friend, you have mastered it! I am SO PROUD OF YOU! This is magnificent, Dean, and that includes meter! It brings tears to my eyes, no kidding, compadre. (I KNEW you could do it - no stopping you.)
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Sorry for the six, but I'm fresh out of tens. Poe couldn't have said it better. Poe and Stephen King together couldn't have said it better. Pardon me, I have to get back in my grave, the sun is coming up, and...
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Sorry for the six, but I'm fresh out of tens. Poe couldn't have said it better. Poe and Stephen King together couldn't have said it better. Pardon me, I have to get back in my grave, the sun is coming up, and...
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
