Comment from thee-name

Excellent

The child has a nice smile. I to like to do mostly rhyming and schemes.
WHEN SUN WAS JUGGLING SUNBEAMS
ONCE MUST HAVE GONE ASTRAY
FOR I JUST FOUND A SUNBEAM
A MILLION MILES AWAY

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

thanks so much, thee-name :-) Brooke

reply by thee-name on 06-Sep-2014

THANK YOU!

Comment from persevere

Excellent

What a magical interpretation of the sunshine in someone's eyes!I love the scientific fact,a million miles time ninety three, thrown in. Altogether these quatrains are a delightful read.

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

persevere, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from MissMerri

Excellent

I was so relieved when I got to the last verse and found out where that lost sunbeam was found! I should have known it was in those sparkling eyes.
This is an example of creative writing at its best. How you continue to think of these unique ideas is more than I can fathom, but I enjoy reading your poems always.

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

Thank you so much, Adonna :-) The pictures are a great inspiration and motivation :-) Brooke

Comment from pattipac

Excellent

Your poem about a stray sunbeam is as radiant as Sawyer's smile. Excellent word choice and rhyme make your poem flow. I, too, have a four year old grandchild starting school. One radiant smile from her makes my heart melt. Deserving of a six, but my pockets are empty.

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

Patti, thank you so much :-) I bet your grand daughter is a sweetheart :-) Brooke

reply by pattipac on 06-Sep-2014

Yes, grandchildren are one of God's greatest blessings.

Comment from Andrewajgblue

Excellent

I really enjoyed this poem, but i loved the surprise at the end it was great,
Good alliteration with brightness and brilliance, another great poem, well done,
Andrew

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

Andrew, thanks so much :-) Brooke

Comment from heyjude

Excellent

Brooke, another cute poem to add to Sawyer's book.
I like the last part especially. We all like
seeing smiling faces. Cute job of rhyming and
rhythm.

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

Jude, thanks so much :-) Brooke

Comment from CHIGYSISKI

Exceptional

This is an amazing poem. It is inspirational how you describe things we all see and pay little attention to, into really lovely verses. kudos!! The last stanza is my favorite.Well done!

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

Chigysiski, thank you so very much for your generous and gracious review :-) Brooke

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I can still remember when he was born, you were so excited and couldn't wait to hold him. I can't remember if you were there when he was born, but I do remember smiling at your poem, you were just like me when mine were born. I can't believe he is starting school! The photo of him smiling, well, I can see where this poem came from. It's lovely, Brooke! :) xsx Sandra

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

Thank you so much, Sandra. At 28 months old, the kid is already at the head of his class - he's the only one of the dozen kids who is potty trained. LOL I bet he's the first one to operate a tricycle correctly too LOL :-) Brooke

Comment from humpwhistle

Exceptional

And in honor of Sawyer's graduation to school,
you decided to work in some educational material, eh?
Sounds like you're trying to keep his balance between the arts and the sciences. Wise. Let the boy choose.

Delightful and cheery. Just like the errant sunbeam.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

Thanks so very much, Lee :-) The educational material was actually inspired by Nora, the kindergartner Miranda nannies. She has been plaguing Miranda with questions about the planets and about the Presidents. LOL Addah, when was Grover Cleveland president? LOL
Addah is using Google a lot more since school started. ;-) Brooke

Comment from Ekim777

Excellent

By and large, the bright images that shine in every verse portray a child's vision of the universe, except for the last one. A child-like freshness makes magic of it all. However it is the final verse that attracts attention. Irrationally it reminds me of the line; "There's a light that lies in a woman's eyes and it lies , and it lies, and it lies." Forgive the old cynic in me. -Ekim777

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

Ekim, thank you so much :-) Brooke