I Found a Missing Sunbeam
quatrains in abcb rhyme146 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
Each year he gains pushes you up a notch. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good job.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Each year he gains pushes you up a notch. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good job.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Gee, thanks for reminding me of that, Charlie LOL :-) Brooke
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I shouldn't be the only one to suffer. 27 nephews and nieces, 42 grandnephews and nieces, and 17 great grand nephews and aieces(and still counting).
You'll get no Sympathy from me. (LOL) Charlie
Comment from Leineco
Awww. . .
the sun that's beaming from your eyes
each time you smile at me.
Very sweet turn at the end :-) truly catches your attention and makes you smile and the trickery (not to mention the intent) ;-)
Wonderful build-up for the crescendo you were aiming for!
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Awww. . .
the sun that's beaming from your eyes
each time you smile at me.
Very sweet turn at the end :-) truly catches your attention and makes you smile and the trickery (not to mention the intent) ;-)
Wonderful build-up for the crescendo you were aiming for!
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Leineco, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from jaeladarling
Awww, this makes me think of my 3-year-old niece. All sunshine! This poem was a joy to read. All of your work is, of course. :) Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Awww, this makes me think of my 3-year-old niece. All sunshine! This poem was a joy to read. All of your work is, of course. :) Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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jaeladarling, thank you so much :-) I bet your niece is a cutie :-) Brooke
Comment from GeraldS
Wonderful poem. Great description of a grandchild's smile. I think I found that sunbeam too ... last week when my youngest was visiting me.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Wonderful poem. Great description of a grandchild's smile. I think I found that sunbeam too ... last week when my youngest was visiting me.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Gerald, thank you so much. I'm so glad you can identify, and I appreciate your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from RodG
I really like how you TEACH a child about sunbeams and the sun itself in this poem, Brooke. I especially like how you worked in Earth's distance from the Sun in stanza 2.
Great personification of Sun "juggling."
And, as usual, you have a more serious theme about love, both giving and receiving.
Although you vary the length of your meter, your rhythm is flawless.
Rod
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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I really like how you TEACH a child about sunbeams and the sun itself in this poem, Brooke. I especially like how you worked in Earth's distance from the Sun in stanza 2.
Great personification of Sun "juggling."
And, as usual, you have a more serious theme about love, both giving and receiving.
Although you vary the length of your meter, your rhythm is flawless.
Rod
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Rod, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I love your poem. It has great flow. I like the last verse the best. I like the reference to the eyes when they beam at you. The picture is perfect. I see nothing to change. What a sweet boy.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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I love your poem. It has great flow. I like the last verse the best. I like the reference to the eyes when they beam at you. The picture is perfect. I see nothing to change. What a sweet boy.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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jannypan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Domino 2
Good luck to Sawyer in his new school adventure, Brooke - I'm sure he'll do great!
Lovely comparison wth the sun's brightness, and that conveyed by love in the eyes.
I think it takes a few days at the speed of light for the sun's rays to reach Earth, so for all we know it could have blown up 2.5 days ago and we're all doomed in 12 hours. I just thought I'd mention that cheerful point. LOL!
Cheers, Ray xx
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Good luck to Sawyer in his new school adventure, Brooke - I'm sure he'll do great!
Lovely comparison wth the sun's brightness, and that conveyed by love in the eyes.
I think it takes a few days at the speed of light for the sun's rays to reach Earth, so for all we know it could have blown up 2.5 days ago and we're all doomed in 12 hours. I just thought I'd mention that cheerful point. LOL!
Cheers, Ray xx
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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ROTFLMAO, Ray. I write about a cute personified sun doing a juggling act and you manage to get to our being doomed! LOL
You've just made my day, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from baustian64
What a sweet tribute to your grandson. He sure is cute. They grow so fast you have to enjoy each and every day he is on this earth. Children are changing so very fast. We have to hold on to each little smile.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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What a sweet tribute to your grandson. He sure is cute. They grow so fast you have to enjoy each and every day he is on this earth. Children are changing so very fast. We have to hold on to each little smile.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Baustian, thank you so much :-) I just can't get over how cute he is. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from evilynne
Sunbeams are cool and, of course, we can see them in the eyes of children. Your poem, as always is wonderful. Children grow up so fast and the first day of school is such a milestone, not just in their lives but in ours. It is awesome that Sawyer is embarking on his special adventure!
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Sunbeams are cool and, of course, we can see them in the eyes of children. Your poem, as always is wonderful. Children grow up so fast and the first day of school is such a milestone, not just in their lives but in ours. It is awesome that Sawyer is embarking on his special adventure!
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thank you, evilynne, for your generous rating and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from gazzagodbod
aww beautiful writing my friend love the sunbeams wonderful write could only be a sixer from the gazzagodbod well done my friend xx
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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aww beautiful writing my friend love the sunbeams wonderful write could only be a sixer from the gazzagodbod well done my friend xx
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Gazza, thank you so very much for your generous review :-) Brooke
