I Found a Missing Sunbeam
quatrains in abcb rhyme146 total reviews
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Brooke,
School! Grandma, what a big boy for sure. Once they start school, they grow us soooo fast.
I enjoy how you teach a little lesson in your poetry. Like, today, it was about the distance to the sun.
Nicely done.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*^*)
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Hi Brooke,
School! Grandma, what a big boy for sure. Once they start school, they grow us soooo fast.
I enjoy how you teach a little lesson in your poetry. Like, today, it was about the distance to the sun.
Nicely done.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*^*)
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Jax, thanks so much. He's already the most advanced kid in the class - Miranda learned at orientation that he's the only one who is potty trained. LOL :-)
Comment from kiwijenny
No he can't be starting school ....no no no........
Little sunbeam of joy that he is......
Maybe Miranda will homeschool him.....:o)
I'm a little bit serious about that ...love your poem....
God bless
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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No he can't be starting school ....no no no........
Little sunbeam of joy that he is......
Maybe Miranda will homeschool him.....:o)
I'm a little bit serious about that ...love your poem....
God bless
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Jenny, thanks so much - Miranda is sending him to this private school at 28 months old because she wants him to play with other children - her neighborhood doesn't have lots of kids to play with. And when he gets older, I'm sure she wants him in a social setting with all the benefits of a social setting. Brooke :-)
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I teach at a precious school and I love it. He is so special and he will do great.
Comment from Deniz22
Lovely! Sawyer...may he catch sunbeams all of his life...it must be easier when you already are one...wonder where he got that for a heritage? : INO
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Lovely! Sawyer...may he catch sunbeams all of his life...it must be easier when you already are one...wonder where he got that for a heritage? : INO
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thank you so very much, Dennis :-) I appreciate your gracious comments and generous stars :-) Brooke
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi,:-)Brooke,
"I Found a Missing Sunbeam" is another one of your exceptional children's story poems. With a wonder fully appropriate interesting, children's theme that is bound to capture the interest of young listeners. As always meter, rhyme, and rhyme scheme are excellent.
Preston
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Hi,:-)Brooke,
"I Found a Missing Sunbeam" is another one of your exceptional children's story poems. With a wonder fully appropriate interesting, children's theme that is bound to capture the interest of young listeners. As always meter, rhyme, and rhyme scheme are excellent.
Preston
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Preston, thank you so very much for your generous stars and thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from fastdigits
Ah, I am always fascinated when
you write a children's tale. Firstly,
I'm drawn in by the face of Sawyer,
and from there your words just
add to the allurement, as you tell
tales for children of all ages, the sun
juggling sunbeams and then to find
a lost one beaming from Sawyer's
eyes; fantastic imagery.
Well done
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Ah, I am always fascinated when
you write a children's tale. Firstly,
I'm drawn in by the face of Sawyer,
and from there your words just
add to the allurement, as you tell
tales for children of all ages, the sun
juggling sunbeams and then to find
a lost one beaming from Sawyer's
eyes; fantastic imagery.
Well done
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Thanks so very much, fastdigits :-) Brooke
Comment from amahra
I can't believe we here on fanstory has followed little Sawyer until he' ready for school. Loved the poem about following a sunbeam. You never tire of finding things to write about. Let's see, have you done a trip to Mars yet? LOL
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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I can't believe we here on fanstory has followed little Sawyer until he' ready for school. Loved the poem about following a sunbeam. You never tire of finding things to write about. Let's see, have you done a trip to Mars yet? LOL
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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amahra, thank you so much for the review and the laugh:-) Brooke
Comment from krys123
Brooke;
What a marvelously written children's fees of poetry which is not only enjoyable but also captivating as it brought me back into my childhood. Especially when I was in science class.
Remarkable imagery and superb mental images were created by your very descriptive and well expressed symbolism: "And though it came some distance, its brightness didn't fade--it showed with all the brilliance of where the sun still played." I found this t be a great personification of the sun.
Your writing helped with the rhythmic flow as your writing was neither forced nor labored aneurysm flowed smoothly throughout your writing,
Thank you so much my friend for sharing and posting this and may the good Lord be always with you Brooke.
Alex
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Brooke;
What a marvelously written children's fees of poetry which is not only enjoyable but also captivating as it brought me back into my childhood. Especially when I was in science class.
Remarkable imagery and superb mental images were created by your very descriptive and well expressed symbolism: "And though it came some distance, its brightness didn't fade--it showed with all the brilliance of where the sun still played." I found this t be a great personification of the sun.
Your writing helped with the rhythmic flow as your writing was neither forced nor labored aneurysm flowed smoothly throughout your writing,
Thank you so much my friend for sharing and posting this and may the good Lord be always with you Brooke.
Alex
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Alex, thank you so very much, my gracious friend :-) Brooke
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You are so sincerely welcome Brooke.
Alex
Comment from Dean Kuch
You found one too, Brooke? I wonder what would happen if we decided to combine them? We would shine as bright as the sun! LOL...
A wonderful little verse, in excellent meter, tempo and rhyme, on how a simple smile can brighten up someone's day.
Great pic of little Sawyer too!
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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You found one too, Brooke? I wonder what would happen if we decided to combine them? We would shine as bright as the sun! LOL...
A wonderful little verse, in excellent meter, tempo and rhyme, on how a simple smile can brighten up someone's day.
Great pic of little Sawyer too!
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Dean, yep, found one! LOL Thanks so much, my friend :-) Brooke
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Shore 'nuff! 8>]
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Awwww... so sweeet. What a beautiful face. Everything to smile about, too.
it's hard to hide a sunbeam,
for they are just too bright.
I lovvvve those lines. You always come thru with those clever phrases that make the reader smile. Another poem that kids will love.... not to mention LEARN from.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Awwww... so sweeet. What a beautiful face. Everything to smile about, too.
it's hard to hide a sunbeam,
for they are just too bright.
I lovvvve those lines. You always come thru with those clever phrases that make the reader smile. Another poem that kids will love.... not to mention LEARN from.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Phyllis, thank you so very much, my friend :-) I love to sneak in a little learning LOL Brooke
Comment from nomi338
Awe, Lovely. I think you may well own the patent on prose that really touches the heart. Your words touch my so often that my heart easily recognizes the touch. I doubt that Sawyer would be smiling so brightly if he knew what was ahead. Once you start school it seems to never end. LOL.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Awe, Lovely. I think you may well own the patent on prose that really touches the heart. Your words touch my so often that my heart easily recognizes the touch. I doubt that Sawyer would be smiling so brightly if he knew what was ahead. Once you start school it seems to never end. LOL.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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thanks so much, nomi - at least for now I think school for 28 month olds is all fun and games LOL :-) Brooke
