Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

wow... this one is exceptional
you have penned a great work of artistry here
your imagery was the best
but it is your message that really shines in this piece... John

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2005

Comment from Aleksandramarie

Excellent

You go girl, when are we complete, done, fully baked so to say

A great place I hope, this sums up an experience (I didn't say bad, I said over)
in a quiet thoughtful way... ahhh the path....

Here we go on to the next... can't wait, licking my lips setting my chin,,,...........

thanks, mspotter

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2005

Comment from ShadowKatmandu

Excellent

We are who we are
When we are most alone
Never too far from this
Even when with another we roam

Good words to live by
I hope you hear them as well
Be who you are
And give the rest hell! :)

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2005

Comment from CYRANOGATOR

Excellent

Why would we want to go back and revisit the past. We must live and enjoy the present. To recapture that which we cannot, truly sad.

Good well written poem and thoughts.

Wally III

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2005

Comment from fly4hi

Excellent

A very strong and introspective write of someone trying to cleanse the soul of indelible memories. You use some really nice combinations of emotions and thoughts to represent past feelings and current desires. Nicely done Pili. fly
much to clear
much " too" clear

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2005

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

this was beautilfully written
excellent flow all the way through!

"How to erase
all that it was,
to pretend
by denial"

nice work
thanx for sharing :-)

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2005

Comment from Mzhurst

Excellent

Darn, not biography.
I was going to give a 10 but since this is just imagination it only gets a 2. LOL
Seriously, beautifully written.
i don't know why I am surprised as everything you write is "beautifully written."

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2005

Comment from Thomas Raine

Excellent

This is a very well written poem, and your last stanza is a good contrast to the first one. Great imagery used here to go along with a flawless style.

- TR :-)

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2005

Comment from Sallyo

Good

I love the "certain silence" line, and the "how to take back". The only oddity I found was this verse;

In my longing
I forsaken all,
in exchange
for a smile.

In the second line, I think there is a word missing. Maybe "have"?

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 Comment Written 06-Sep-2005

Comment from Sandisan

Excellent

A great poem. I enjoyed reading this. It kind of reminded me of "I am woman hear me roar"...I liked the way the poem read, it flowed very smoothly and I can't see anything to change.

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 Comment Written 06-Sep-2005