The Dandelion Stood Alone
a chain rhyme - see contest directions161 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem has a good rhythm and easy rhymes. In its rhythm is shown the movement of the seed.
It seems the dandelion is the sun in this field of purple.
I always thought dandelions were the prettiest weed.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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This poem has a good rhythm and easy rhymes. In its rhythm is shown the movement of the seed.
It seems the dandelion is the sun in this field of purple.
I always thought dandelions were the prettiest weed.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful comments and generous sixth star, my fellow dandelion lover :-) Brooke
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No problem, Brooke
Joan
Comment from lizabethrita
I wish there were more stars for you. I am touched, as usual, by your words. I identify with this blossom, so much like me
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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I wish there were more stars for you. I am touched, as usual, by your words. I identify with this blossom, so much like me
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much for your gracious comments, lizabethrita :-) Brooke
Comment from mfowler
This unusual rhyme scheme from Frost's poem works well in unison with your single focus verse here, Brooke. The dandelions are the central motif and their arrival as a singularly beautiful sight along the roadside is a thing to be celebrated. I love the allusion to the bee:
So captivated by her sight,
the bees would interrupt their flight
to pay a visit where she glowed,
her solitary beacon bright. ....this reinforces the imagery built around the light that comes from the flower's beauty.
Lovely poem; good luck with this.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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This unusual rhyme scheme from Frost's poem works well in unison with your single focus verse here, Brooke. The dandelions are the central motif and their arrival as a singularly beautiful sight along the roadside is a thing to be celebrated. I love the allusion to the bee:
So captivated by her sight,
the bees would interrupt their flight
to pay a visit where she glowed,
her solitary beacon bright. ....this reinforces the imagery built around the light that comes from the flower's beauty.
Lovely poem; good luck with this.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, Mark, for the thoughtful reading and contest wishes :-) Brooke
Comment from Jackarrie
I love this poem Brooke, it is a beautiful read,my daughter is with me at the moment and she loves it too. I am sure you will do well in the contest with it.
Your rhyming of aabb is done so well, and the picture is magic, with the one dandelion.
Well done
Mary
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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I love this poem Brooke, it is a beautiful read,my daughter is with me at the moment and she loves it too. I am sure you will do well in the contest with it.
Your rhyming of aabb is done so well, and the picture is magic, with the one dandelion.
Well done
Mary
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Mary, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Caressa_08
Well, what a challenge & wish I had six to give, as you followed the tricky requirements for this contest...Iambic meter, & this being a tetrameter... I'm still trying to comprehend, though realize that you, an educated poet, have already mastered this...A pleasant read for me as I am a fan of dandelions & think these flowers hold many health benefits & aren't considered a nuisance by everyone...So beautiful can they be in the countryside & a delight for bees & butterflies...It's just front yards, especially some in suburbia if they appear, then a lot of people consider them to be weeds.
Caressa
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Well, what a challenge & wish I had six to give, as you followed the tricky requirements for this contest...Iambic meter, & this being a tetrameter... I'm still trying to comprehend, though realize that you, an educated poet, have already mastered this...A pleasant read for me as I am a fan of dandelions & think these flowers hold many health benefits & aren't considered a nuisance by everyone...So beautiful can they be in the countryside & a delight for bees & butterflies...It's just front yards, especially some in suburbia if they appear, then a lot of people consider them to be weeds.
Caressa
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thank you so very much, Caressa :-) Brooke
Comment from Lulube
Yep those damn dandelions will pop up anywhere. lol Just a color contrasting for you though eh Brooke? lol
Good poemly story though. good flow and great rhymes.
good luck in the contest
lulube
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Yep those damn dandelions will pop up anywhere. lol Just a color contrasting for you though eh Brooke? lol
Good poemly story though. good flow and great rhymes.
good luck in the contest
lulube
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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lulube, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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welcome Brooke
lulube
Comment from Raoul D'Harmental
Hi Brooke. This is a sweet rhymed pastoral poem which has brightened up my morning. All the best in the contest and thanks for sharing this! R
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Hi Brooke. This is a sweet rhymed pastoral poem which has brightened up my morning. All the best in the contest and thanks for sharing this! R
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Raoul, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Shirley B
Dear Brooke, I truly enjoyed your poem. I liked this more serious and formal format of poetry. I also enjoyed the content and message of your poem. The dandelion stood alone and was beautiful by herself and did not need the light or attention of the other flowers. Great message. Best of luck in the contest, Shirley
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Dear Brooke, I truly enjoyed your poem. I liked this more serious and formal format of poetry. I also enjoyed the content and message of your poem. The dandelion stood alone and was beautiful by herself and did not need the light or attention of the other flowers. Great message. Best of luck in the contest, Shirley
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Shirley, thank you so much for your kind contest wishes and generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from Winslow
Dear Brooke,
The dandelion all alone did quite well. For the bees did spot its yellow light and came to share a little feast. Superb rhyming as always.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Dear Brooke,
The dandelion all alone did quite well. For the bees did spot its yellow light and came to share a little feast. Superb rhyming as always.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, Winslow :-) Brooke
Comment from Warren Rodgers
Hi Brooke,
A great entry for the contest in perfect form, meter, and rhyme scheme. Excellent story with plenty of enjambment and some alliteration. Nice personification of your favorite flower :). I enjoyed every line and my favorite verse was the third. Good my neighbors weren't around with their spray bottles and their garden tools! Good luck in the contest,
All the best,
Rodger
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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Hi Brooke,
A great entry for the contest in perfect form, meter, and rhyme scheme. Excellent story with plenty of enjambment and some alliteration. Nice personification of your favorite flower :). I enjoyed every line and my favorite verse was the third. Good my neighbors weren't around with their spray bottles and their garden tools! Good luck in the contest,
All the best,
Rodger
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Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much, Rodger! I have a nephew, a blood relative, who is one of those people with the spray bottles, but he is a yuppie so he hires professionals to do the dirty deed. LOL
