The Dandelion Stood Alone
a chain rhyme - see contest directions161 total reviews
Comment from barkingdog
What a lovely sentiment, Brooke. We are all familiar with that occasional unique person that is born into an ordinary family or community.
Fine iambic meter and rhyme. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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What a lovely sentiment, Brooke. We are all familiar with that occasional unique person that is born into an ordinary family or community.
Fine iambic meter and rhyme. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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Ellen, thank you so much for your kind contest wishes and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Judy Couch
This is very good and follows the prompt well. It has the correct rhyming pattern. It tells a fun story. The first two lines sums it up well. "The dandelion stood alone,
for that is where her seed was blown"
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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This is very good and follows the prompt well. It has the correct rhyming pattern. It tells a fun story. The first two lines sums it up well. "The dandelion stood alone,
for that is where her seed was blown"
Comment Written 15-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2014
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Judy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Green Lake Girl
This is a darling poem and perfect for this contest. I'm assuming this photograph inspired the poem. A finely penned tribute to the lowly yet sunny and beautiful dandelion. You have my vote!
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2014
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This is a darling poem and perfect for this contest. I'm assuming this photograph inspired the poem. A finely penned tribute to the lowly yet sunny and beautiful dandelion. You have my vote!
Comment Written 14-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2014
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Thank you so very much, Green Lake Girl, for your kind contest encouragement and your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from sgalletti
Lovely, delightful imagery throughout this gem, Brooke, which uses meter and rhyme so effortlessly. Love the personification of the often abused dandelion who now captures the bees with her beauty. I also appreciate the use of the monorhyme in the last stanza to finish the piece off. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2014
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Lovely, delightful imagery throughout this gem, Brooke, which uses meter and rhyme so effortlessly. Love the personification of the often abused dandelion who now captures the bees with her beauty. I also appreciate the use of the monorhyme in the last stanza to finish the piece off. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
Comment Written 14-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, Sue - I also enjoyed your entry :-) Brooke
Comment from michaelcahill
This reads so smoothly. I love the thought process. A perfect metaphor that flows from the first line to the last. Still some entries to come, but this is going to be really tough to beat. It is flawless in form and so uplifting to read. I suppose the luck should be wished elsewhere. They'll need it to compete with this. mikey
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014
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This reads so smoothly. I love the thought process. A perfect metaphor that flows from the first line to the last. Still some entries to come, but this is going to be really tough to beat. It is flawless in form and so uplifting to read. I suppose the luck should be wished elsewhere. They'll need it to compete with this. mikey
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014
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Mikey, thanks so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from starkat
Outstanding. Beautifully written and rhymed - chain rhyme in the style of Robert Frost's 'miles to go before I sleep' poem. Beautiful presentation - picture and color scheme. Great job of bringing the reader into the world of dandelions and bees, the personification throughout helps the reader understand the relationship between these two. The bees are attracted to and grateful for this dandelion, her independent spirit noticed and appreciated. You paint quite the picture and story within four stanzas. There are lessons we can learn from watching interactions within nature. I wonder if nature smiles at our interpretation and imagination as we explore her world. Bees and dandelions don't notice us very much ... or do they?
Great contest entry. Delightful poem ... ;o)
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Outstanding. Beautifully written and rhymed - chain rhyme in the style of Robert Frost's 'miles to go before I sleep' poem. Beautiful presentation - picture and color scheme. Great job of bringing the reader into the world of dandelions and bees, the personification throughout helps the reader understand the relationship between these two. The bees are attracted to and grateful for this dandelion, her independent spirit noticed and appreciated. You paint quite the picture and story within four stanzas. There are lessons we can learn from watching interactions within nature. I wonder if nature smiles at our interpretation and imagination as we explore her world. Bees and dandelions don't notice us very much ... or do they?
Great contest entry. Delightful poem ... ;o)
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Thanks so very much, Art - I appreciate the thoughtful comments and generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from pattipac
Brooke,your lovely poem is deserving of a six, but, alas, I have already deposited mine along the way. Your excellent word choice, and rhyme-scheme reminds us to give thanks for the singular beauty that we see in nature.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Brooke,your lovely poem is deserving of a six, but, alas, I have already deposited mine along the way. Your excellent word choice, and rhyme-scheme reminds us to give thanks for the singular beauty that we see in nature.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Patti, thanks so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was incredible. The dandelion was perfectly placed for your poem to shine through. I liked the rhyme scheme, 'a chain rhyme'? I'll have to look at the description of that.
Sorry I am so late reviewing, my laptop has been down for a couple of days and now I have it back, my MS Word is missing with all my stuff on it!! I have it in the clouds, but have no idea how to get it without the 'word' programme. So cross! Good luck in the contest, Brooke. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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That was incredible. The dandelion was perfectly placed for your poem to shine through. I liked the rhyme scheme, 'a chain rhyme'? I'll have to look at the description of that.
Sorry I am so late reviewing, my laptop has been down for a couple of days and now I have it back, my MS Word is missing with all my stuff on it!! I have it in the clouds, but have no idea how to get it without the 'word' programme. So cross! Good luck in the contest, Brooke. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Sandra, thank you for your kind contest wishes and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Brooke,
Thought provoking nice piece of poetry beautifully conveying its message: Intrinsic value of a thing can never remain hidden - come what may!
Impressive and matching the theme wording.
Smooth flow with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
The most striking lines are:
"She grew apart, but not concealed,
a blazing star whose sight revealed
she did not need another's light
to validate what hers could yield."
Good Luck!
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Hello Brooke,
Thought provoking nice piece of poetry beautifully conveying its message: Intrinsic value of a thing can never remain hidden - come what may!
Impressive and matching the theme wording.
Smooth flow with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
The most striking lines are:
"She grew apart, but not concealed,
a blazing star whose sight revealed
she did not need another's light
to validate what hers could yield."
Good Luck!
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
RP, thank you so much for your kind good luck wishes and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Auroraboreal800
Amazing poem and picture as well. Lovely structure, you managed to keep to the requirements. I hope the dandelion did not get lonely. My very beast wishes for the contest.
Great job Brooke!
:)
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Amazing poem and picture as well. Lovely structure, you managed to keep to the requirements. I hope the dandelion did not get lonely. My very beast wishes for the contest.
Great job Brooke!
:)
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Aurora, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
