The Animal Doctor
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "A Woman Scorned"Love Among the Thorns
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Comment from lynglyng
This story is so good. I was completely drawn into the storyline and characters. You are a very good writer and have done an excellent job with this story. I want to read more. I am jealous of your talent.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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This story is so good. I was completely drawn into the storyline and characters. You are a very good writer and have done an excellent job with this story. I want to read more. I am jealous of your talent.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Thank you, lynglying, that's very sweet of you. But I still have a lot of growing to do as a writer.
Comment from adewpearl
excellent use of dialogue to convey strong emotion as he worries about going home so late and when he arrives home to find he was right to be worried
I like the dialogue with Elizabeth!
Brooke
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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excellent use of dialogue to convey strong emotion as he worries about going home so late and when he arrives home to find he was right to be worried
I like the dialogue with Elizabeth!
Brooke
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Brooke.
Comment from forestport12
First thing: I love how you use the simplicity of your prose to make us feel every action or verb and don't throw too much distraction of descriptions, but the ones that you give have variety and spice using different senses from splashing the cold water on his face. Descriptive movements, keeping the reader engaged. You know how to do it. It's not with fluff, it's with the good plot, a realism of romance and the engaging and descriptive style. Stan
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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First thing: I love how you use the simplicity of your prose to make us feel every action or verb and don't throw too much distraction of descriptions, but the ones that you give have variety and spice using different senses from splashing the cold water on his face. Descriptive movements, keeping the reader engaged. You know how to do it. It's not with fluff, it's with the good plot, a realism of romance and the engaging and descriptive style. Stan
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Wow, thank you stan. And I don't mean just for the six stars. I want this published and really needed to know if I had enough talent to be widely read. This review is the most encouraging I've ever had. I may not be there yet. But with more work, according to this review, I may not be far. Bless you, Stan.
Comment from CHIGYSISKI
I like the way the story is developing. I knew it was only a matter of time before he would be found out. I do hope she finds it in her heart to forgive him. After all 'To err is masculine, to forgive feminine' I think! LOL! Well done!
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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I like the way the story is developing. I knew it was only a matter of time before he would be found out. I do hope she finds it in her heart to forgive him. After all 'To err is masculine, to forgive feminine' I think! LOL! Well done!
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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LOL I don't think that's how it goes, but I like it. Thank you so much.
Comment from robina1978
Beautiful chapter once more. When Nathan arrives home his wife does not want to know him, she found out about his escapade. He goes to her parents to talk.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Beautiful chapter once more. When Nathan arrives home his wife does not want to know him, she found out about his escapade. He goes to her parents to talk.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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No, the Korens are his friends. The older man was his mentor when his was younger. Thank you for reviewing, my dear.
Comment from Carole Rosa
amahra, Of course, I just started to read your book, but this chapter is very good. My question is, if he drove home, why didn't he drive himself away in his own car? I'm just wondering, because I know nothing about the actual story line. However, I enjoyed this chapter. Carole
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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amahra, Of course, I just started to read your book, but this chapter is very good. My question is, if he drove home, why didn't he drive himself away in his own car? I'm just wondering, because I know nothing about the actual story line. However, I enjoyed this chapter. Carole
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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He never drives himself. But he drove himself to meet another women. He didn't want his driver to know that. Thanks for stopping by, Carole.
Comment from royowen
Great synopsis you have, also character lineup! Just one slip, unless of course it's just colloquial language, just reporting " nothing gon happen". I must confess it's been a while since I've read your writing Amahra, so I'm not sure whether Natan committed infidelity or not, I think he was silly but he didn't! I was captivated by your well written story, characters are believable and well defined, the story structure is well designed and composed, I loved it, and look forward to more, well done, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Great synopsis you have, also character lineup! Just one slip, unless of course it's just colloquial language, just reporting " nothing gon happen". I must confess it's been a while since I've read your writing Amahra, so I'm not sure whether Natan committed infidelity or not, I think he was silly but he didn't! I was captivated by your well written story, characters are believable and well defined, the story structure is well designed and composed, I loved it, and look forward to more, well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Yeah, he was weak, I'm afraid. He couldn't resist Margaret. Thank you for this fine review, royowen. At first I did a dumb thing; I was writing the chapters two weeks after posting the previous chapter. Now I'm finishing the book before even posting the first chapter; that way, readers can keep up with the book.
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Oh well, good room for a chapter on forgiveness! Just a thought! Roy.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, amahra, I enjoyed reading this chapter where Nathan is found out and finds his stuff on the lawn and locked out of his house, he goes to stay with his friends.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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this is very well written, amahra, I enjoyed reading this chapter where Nathan is found out and finds his stuff on the lawn and locked out of his house, he goes to stay with his friends.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thank you sweetwoodjax. Always a pleasure having you stop by.
Comment from stroncoso1
This is compelling and kept me riveted throughout. I like how the story flows easily into the next thought and action. The dialogue between your characters is believable. I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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This is compelling and kept me riveted throughout. I like how the story flows easily into the next thought and action. The dialogue between your characters is believable. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much, stroncoso1.
Comment from Jay Squires
I'm glad you started back with this story, Ama. I like your characters. Your portrayal of Grace was particularly touching in this chapter.
at the end of the hall, Joseph." [I realize, from joseph's answer who the first speaker was, but the reader should not have to wait to know. Since it followed on Nate's thought process, I thought it was he who spoke to Joseph, not Elizabeth.]
Everything else flows so effortlessly from your "pen". I hope this is one you plan to publish.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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I'm glad you started back with this story, Ama. I like your characters. Your portrayal of Grace was particularly touching in this chapter.
at the end of the hall, Joseph." [I realize, from joseph's answer who the first speaker was, but the reader should not have to wait to know. Since it followed on Nate's thought process, I thought it was he who spoke to Joseph, not Elizabeth.]
Everything else flows so effortlessly from your "pen". I hope this is one you plan to publish.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thanks, Jay, I'll take another look at that. Thanks for keeping up with the book. yes, I will have this book published.
