Comment from Twilightspire

Excellent

Rudyard Kipling's tale was awesome and you did a fine job paying homage to it with this poem.
I love how you gain sympathy for the cobra as she tries to warn the mongoose away and finally her eggs lay cold.
Excellent work, my friend.
-T.J.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

Thanks, TJ, I really appreciate you taking time to read and review this poem for me. it's always a pleasure, my friend. :)

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Yes Rudyard Kipling would be proud.....my dad called my brother Ricky Ticky Tarvay.....after a Kipling mongoose.....he called me Wiggy and Brussels sprouts ,.fairy cabbages so I'm not sure he could be trusted about Rudyard references :o) I love your poem..
God bless

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

Thanks, kiwijenny, and so sorry about the delayed response. Things have been rather crazy for me lately, but are finally starting to calm down a bit. I truly am grateful for your review and kind comments.

Comment from brentman99

Excellent

I enjoyed your poem as it made particularly good use of pictures. I really liked the line "The mongoose pups ate well that night, while serpents eggs sat cold" as it describes the deadly side of nature very well.

I noticed what appear to be some grammatical issues. Use or delete as you see fit.

Thanks for sharing, Brent.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

Thanks, Brent. I appreciate the review. 8-]

Comment from JudyS

Exceptional

Dean, Loved this one! Great job writing. Animal Planet is addicting isn't it? I've seen videos of a mongoose and a cobra and it's amazing to watch. The animal kingdom is awe inspiring. Again, excellent job on this one with perfect graphics to go with it. Have a great day, Judy

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

Thanks so much, Judy. I appreciate the six stars as well as the thoughtful comments. it's always a pleasure to hear from you. :)

Comment from Father Flaps

Excellent

Hi Dean
Your poetry continues to make me squirm, and glance over my shoulder. I hate snakes...of any kind, even little green grass snakes. If I ever ran into a cobra or some other slithering menace, I would be frozen stiff in fear.
You've done an excellent job of putting this fight into words. The mongoose is a brave rascal indeed. I had to re-read parts to establish the rhythm, but it reads smooth once that is established. Some nice alliteration, such as
"die with dignity"
"make a meal of me"
"slinky serpent"
"tackle such a task"
"find a fight"
make this another great read.
Fine presentation!
Thanks for sharing.
cheers
Kimbob

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

Thanks, Kimbob, and I'm really happy you reread it to take in the intended rhythm. As always, I sincerely appreciate you thoughtful review, my friend. :)

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Very well written Dean. Strange that we are never on the side of the snakes. We always want the other to win, not even sorry for the snake's hatchlings left lying there. Amazing animal the mongoose. Your rhyme scheme is perfect in rhyming couplets accompanied by the usual amazing pictures. Kind regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

Thanks so much for sharing your thoughts with me on this, Dorothy. I really appreciate it.

Comment from faragon

Excellent

I was thinking the same thing as I read this poem...Rikki Tikki Tavi! One of my favorite stories! I like how you portrayed the deadly battle between these two life long foes! Great Job!

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

Thanks so much, fargon. I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. :)

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Exceptional

AAAAAAhhhhhh this is the best I have read in such a long time. Rhyming and flow and adventure all in one piece. this is excellent and I would expect nothing less.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

Oh, you are far too kind, Barb. However, I do appreciate your thoughtful and complimentary review, my dear friend. Thanks so much for the six stars as well. :)

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

Well look! It's Sir David Dean Attenborough in poem! lol
great read David really enjoy your poetry commentary! I have actually seen footage of this it is amazing how quick the moon goose is..classic SURVIVAL OF THE FITTEST

Thanks for posting Sir David!

dip

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014

Ha ha, thanks so much, dipster! I as watching one of the battles on Animal Planet, which inspired this poem. You are right, the mongooses speed and lightning fast reflexes are amazing!

Thanks a bunch for the review. I sincerely appreciate it. :)

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Beaut poem you've scribed here Dean, Mark fowler is writing on Australian tourist destinations, he's becoming a travel writer, and you're becoming a animal poet, and I'm just confused, I love this well written, expressive and well designed poem, exceptionally well done, Dean, great write, and informative work, blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014

Hah, you're not alone there, Roy. I'm pretty confused myself, LOL.

Thanks for the thoughtful review. :)