Another Day
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Comment from rrabinow
Wonderfully written poem that you wrote. Great imagery created by your use of descriptive words. Your poem flows well, and the picture works well. I enjoyed reading your poem.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Wonderfully written poem that you wrote. Great imagery created by your use of descriptive words. Your poem flows well, and the picture works well. I enjoyed reading your poem.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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I am so glad you enjoy it, love your comment. Pili
Comment from linsbm
A day to pass is "a breath of sigh".
Very nice flow of thoughts expressed in meaningful words and expressive language. Every stanza conveys insightful truths. Third stanza is my best. Excellent free verse poem. I enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing.} Lin
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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A day to pass is "a breath of sigh".
Very nice flow of thoughts expressed in meaningful words and expressive language. Every stanza conveys insightful truths. Third stanza is my best. Excellent free verse poem. I enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing.} Lin
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Wonderful comment, thank you so much. PILI
Comment from Carole Rosa
Phili, Your poem is both lovely and sad. The presentation enhances your poetic words with grace. There are so many meaningful lines in your piece of work. Excellent. Carole
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Phili, Your poem is both lovely and sad. The presentation enhances your poetic words with grace. There are so many meaningful lines in your piece of work. Excellent. Carole
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Thank you for a very meaningful comment. Pili
Comment from mikemagine
Love how this sounds when I read aloud. "Another day is gone" The day is gone and what meaning did it hold? Was it "Just another day"? Did anything new or unusual happen? Yes, the first sentence holds me...I'm not being critical, I'm merely thinking of how so many DAYS in our lives are really wasted.
But on a positive spin, how many nights have we ENJOYED?? I guess I LOVE the night. Obviously, I'm not commenting completely along the lines of this poem, lol. But I DO like this and I see no flaws. Sorry for rambling and wandering:)
Mike
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Love how this sounds when I read aloud. "Another day is gone" The day is gone and what meaning did it hold? Was it "Just another day"? Did anything new or unusual happen? Yes, the first sentence holds me...I'm not being critical, I'm merely thinking of how so many DAYS in our lives are really wasted.
But on a positive spin, how many nights have we ENJOYED?? I guess I LOVE the night. Obviously, I'm not commenting completely along the lines of this poem, lol. But I DO like this and I see no flaws. Sorry for rambling and wandering:)
Mike
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Thank you so very much Michael, I have painful health issues, maybe that helps " another day is gone". Love your comment... Smiles. Pili
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Sure thing, Pili!!
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Smiles.
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Comment from Eigle Rull
Wow! This poem is beautiful and very well written in easy to read and understand words. It flows nicely too. The picture is great. I really enjoyed reading this powerful little poem. It was excellent in my opinion.
Always with respect,
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Wow! This poem is beautiful and very well written in easy to read and understand words. It flows nicely too. The picture is great. I really enjoyed reading this powerful little poem. It was excellent in my opinion.
Always with respect,
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Thank you my friend , great comment. Pili
Comment from CR Delport
I wake up every day, and wait in wonder what surprises the new day may bring. This poem is very well written and the art work compliments it very well.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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I wake up every day, and wait in wonder what surprises the new day may bring. This poem is very well written and the art work compliments it very well.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Thank you C R for a great review. Pili
Comment from lalajovanoski
Inward mysteries reveal hidden truths my mind plunges Into a sea of me
a thousand meanings of what lays withing sorrows hide in your shadows in somnolent heaviness
I sigh
Such a beautiful lie and I truly enjoyed reading this poem really was a breath of fresh air
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Inward mysteries reveal hidden truths my mind plunges Into a sea of me
a thousand meanings of what lays withing sorrows hide in your shadows in somnolent heaviness
I sigh
Such a beautiful lie and I truly enjoyed reading this poem really was a breath of fresh air
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Glad you enjoy it , great review, thank you so much. Pili
Comment from LIJ Red
A beautiful picture, a serene thought-but I think "shines"
is the correct word in line two, and that "within" is what you mean in line 14. Check it out...
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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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A beautiful picture, a serene thought-but I think "shines"
is the correct word in line two, and that "within" is what you mean in line 14. Check it out...
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Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much for your help , is done, very meaningful comment. Pili
