Another Day
Free Style68 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
Another day is done and it sounds like it has been a tough one with a lot of concerns and duties, and you look forward to the release of deep sleep.
Excellent free verse with a smooth flow. Excellent use of enjambment.
My favorite lines
my mind plunges
Into a sea of me
Sleep well.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Another day is done and it sounds like it has been a tough one with a lot of concerns and duties, and you look forward to the release of deep sleep.
Excellent free verse with a smooth flow. Excellent use of enjambment.
My favorite lines
my mind plunges
Into a sea of me
Sleep well.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Wonderful comment , thank you so much w.j.. Pili
Comment from Christine B.
Hello, Pili Pubul. Another Day is full of life. Too rarely is the valuable mysteriousness of sleep and dreams carried neatly, definitely, into a poem. You've managed to write of pain without a small, self-centered atmosphere. This is a beauty.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Hello, Pili Pubul. Another Day is full of life. Too rarely is the valuable mysteriousness of sleep and dreams carried neatly, definitely, into a poem. You've managed to write of pain without a small, self-centered atmosphere. This is a beauty.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Very meaningful comment Christine, thank you so much. Pili
Comment from Linda England Bonam
Nice writing, nice presentation. I enjoyed your words
and see that many others have enjoyed it too. Congrats on your two ribbons at the bottom of the page
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Nice writing, nice presentation. I enjoyed your words
and see that many others have enjoyed it too. Congrats on your two ribbons at the bottom of the page
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Thank you so very much. Pili
Comment from thee-name
Nice verse. The beginning of your verse was excellent.
ANOTHER DAY IS GONE
WHILE GOLDEN MOON NOW SHINES
LOVELY FORMS SLOWLY
FLOAT AROUND
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Nice verse. The beginning of your verse was excellent.
ANOTHER DAY IS GONE
WHILE GOLDEN MOON NOW SHINES
LOVELY FORMS SLOWLY
FLOAT AROUND
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Thank you so very much. Pili
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THANK YOU!
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Thank you.... Pili
Comment from artisart4u
This is a nice poem about how one feel in your quiet time.
The color of the font and background goes good with the poem.
Good luck with your poem.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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This is a nice poem about how one feel in your quiet time.
The color of the font and background goes good with the poem.
Good luck with your poem.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much, great review. Pili
Comment from jshep
Gentle emotion is felt from another being gone and that sleepy sigh, Pili.
A world of dreams await (s) and as the mind and body clear of pain and plunge (i)nto the sea of you. Each stanza flows into the next with a great deal of thought for what lies within. Makes me think of the purpose of it all and how a good nights sleep can be cleansing and prepare for the challenges each new day brings. There is a great deal of meaning behind your wordsand I really enjoyed reading you poem and letting the words stimulate my feelings. Great job. Joyce xx
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Gentle emotion is felt from another being gone and that sleepy sigh, Pili.
A world of dreams await (s) and as the mind and body clear of pain and plunge (i)nto the sea of you. Each stanza flows into the next with a great deal of thought for what lies within. Makes me think of the purpose of it all and how a good nights sleep can be cleansing and prepare for the challenges each new day brings. There is a great deal of meaning behind your wordsand I really enjoyed reading you poem and letting the words stimulate my feelings. Great job. Joyce xx
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much for a very meaningful comment and the shiny star, you humble me, I appreciate the correction very much. Thanks. Pili
Comment from Trybuck
Just past the night season
A brand new day is dawning
and maybe the answer
to yesterday's problem
Well done with this one. Enjoyed reading it, Buck
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Just past the night season
A brand new day is dawning
and maybe the answer
to yesterday's problem
Well done with this one. Enjoyed reading it, Buck
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Good one my friend, perhaps you are right. Thank you for a great review. Pili
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Pili
Solemn and sad, yet those dreams open so much to reveal what we can't face during the light of day. Magnificent presentation to accompany this insightful poem.
" ...my mind plunges
Into a sea of me " ..... excellent phrasing ....I can feel you take that 'plunge'. Great metaphor.
" .... sorrows hide in shadows
in somnolent heaviness" . a sigh .... of .... ????? acceptance??, regret?? Peace??
A moving piece of writing with much to say and feel and expressed so eloquently in so few words. To me this poem seems to express what has been in your day, now released, and held at bay, while you rest. I hope tis is the case. I would have liked to give you a six .. they seem to be gobbled up so fast. Love hugs - Lovi xoxox
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Hi Pili
Solemn and sad, yet those dreams open so much to reveal what we can't face during the light of day. Magnificent presentation to accompany this insightful poem.
" ...my mind plunges
Into a sea of me " ..... excellent phrasing ....I can feel you take that 'plunge'. Great metaphor.
" .... sorrows hide in shadows
in somnolent heaviness" . a sigh .... of .... ????? acceptance??, regret?? Peace??
A moving piece of writing with much to say and feel and expressed so eloquently in so few words. To me this poem seems to express what has been in your day, now released, and held at bay, while you rest. I hope tis is the case. I would have liked to give you a six .. they seem to be gobbled up so fast. Love hugs - Lovi xoxox
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Thank you so very much Lovinia for a fabulous review. Hugs. Pili
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My pleasure ... an excellent poem. Hugs - Lovi xoxo
Comment from Dom G Robles
Pili, your choice of words as well as of color of the poem and picture background is very appealing. They all blend together. Image is strong, lines flowed freely. My sincere congratulations. Dom
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Pili, your choice of words as well as of color of the poem and picture background is very appealing. They all blend together. Image is strong, lines flowed freely. My sincere congratulations. Dom
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much Dom , wonderful comment. Pili
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You are welcome, Pili. Dom
Comment from scd41
Your poem serves to inspire hope and put the painful past behind. If past is history and future is uncertain, present is much better. In the present, one could find happiness by delving within to discover self. A nice poem.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Your poem serves to inspire hope and put the painful past behind. If past is history and future is uncertain, present is much better. In the present, one could find happiness by delving within to discover self. A nice poem.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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I love your comments , thank you so much scd... Pili
