Comment from Just2Write

Excellent

Desert Storms can bring flash-flooding. Good thing the tortoise has a place to get out of the storm's fury. Nice interconnected lines, followed by a strong statori.
One can easily visualize the tortoise weathering out the storm.
Rose.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Hello, Rose. Thanks for reviewing and liking it.

Comment from GracieAnn

Excellent

This Haiku - Storm writing prompt entry fulfills all the elements of the contest with proper title, nature as its topic, perfect line and syllable count and the ah hah moment at the end. A bonus of alliteration is a nice touch. Well done. All the best in the contest.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thanks, GracieAnn. I appreciate your comments and review.

Comment from hari anand

Excellent

storm drowns desert
so wise tortoise shelters in shell, very creative concrete imagery
I liked the satori line, nature's own safe House.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Hello, Tera. Thanks for liking it.

Comment from Rubylou

Excellent

Nicely written haiku.
Wonderful visual with the satori, "nature's safe house."
When caught in a storm, it's great to have shelter like a tent in the wilderness.
I enjoyed your work.
Rubylou

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thank you, Rubylou. Glad you liked it.

Comment from artisart4u

Excellent

This is good, I never thought about a turtle (if I may say so) on the desert. I guess, if you think about it exactly what crawls or creeps along in the desert. The only thing I can think of is a snake and I am scared of snakes.
This is true, he has his own natural shelter.

You have the right amount of syllables.

Good luck with your haiku.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

He isn't a turtle, but turtles are relatives. This is a desert tortoise, a land creature. Thanks for reading and reviewing.

Comment from Alan K Pease

Excellent

Your haiku fits the extended constraint of this type of poetry very well. Its very cute and a reality to use the tortoise's own shell as its safe house.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thanks, Alan. I appreciate the review and your comments.

Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

Very good imaging with so few words. I can picture the torrents of rain surrounding the tortoise protected by his shell. Oh, no, I just saw him carried away in the flood. Nicely written. Hugs, Lou

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Hello, Louise. Thanks for reviewing and for your comments. He's related to turtles, so maybe he can just swim out of the flood, he-he.

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

Storm drowns desert
so wise tortoise shelters in shell
nature's safe house

a wonderful imagery! The satori is genius. Very well-penned piece of poetic art, my friend!
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Hello, rebekka. My first haiku, so thanks for liking it.

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This follows the contest requirements nicely in form and imagery. I hope it does well as, for me, this is more about the tortoise than a storm and the satori confirms that. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thanks for reading and your comments.

Comment from padumachitta

Excellent

Hi, A very good contest entry. I can see the wee one covering up and waiting it out. I did no know that these wee desert animals...so i have learned something new.
padumachitta

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Glad you like the poem, especially since it's my first haiku. Thank you.