haiku (storm drowns desert)
a storm in the desert125 total reviews
Comment from Waishali Deshmukh
Exact syllable count,
A simple yet profound comment on how the Creator creats and also takes care of his creation,
Nice alliteration with S,
A very good entry for the contest,
Wish you all the best.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Exact syllable count,
A simple yet profound comment on how the Creator creats and also takes care of his creation,
Nice alliteration with S,
A very good entry for the contest,
Wish you all the best.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Thank you for a nice review. I appreciate it.
Comment from elizvinod
Nice poem explaining how a tortoise escape from the storm with the help of it's shell. Nature supplies us with the shell we needed to escape from the storms or bad things we are suffering. It reminds how carefully creator created even small species.Good Work
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Nice poem explaining how a tortoise escape from the storm with the help of it's shell. Nature supplies us with the shell we needed to escape from the storms or bad things we are suffering. It reminds how carefully creator created even small species.Good Work
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Thank you for your comments and review.
Comment from S.Yocom
This is a nicely written haiku, Anonymous Writer. You followed the required pattern perfectly and told a good story. Well done.
Sally
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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This is a nicely written haiku, Anonymous Writer. You followed the required pattern perfectly and told a good story. Well done.
Sally
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Sally, for your comments and review.
Comment from krys123
Mystery writer;
such a unique perspective on a flooded desert in with the turtle is so perfectly at home inside a shell.
Your first two lines are very descriptive and expressive as your imagery goes and makes To perfectly interconnecting lines Also.
The third line or satori creates a great summary for the total concept of your haiku.
Good luck in the contest and made good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Mystery writer;
such a unique perspective on a flooded desert in with the turtle is so perfectly at home inside a shell.
Your first two lines are very descriptive and expressive as your imagery goes and makes To perfectly interconnecting lines Also.
The third line or satori creates a great summary for the total concept of your haiku.
Good luck in the contest and made good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Hello, Alex, and thank you for your encouraging review.
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You are so sincerely welcome my friend
Comment from JudyS
I really like this one. Not only to you have the storm but you chose a turtle to be in it. Nice touch. Best of luck in the contest. Judy
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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I really like this one. Not only to you have the storm but you chose a turtle to be in it. Nice touch. Best of luck in the contest. Judy
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Thanks, Judy. Appreciate your comments and review.
Comment from Ben Colder
Lucky turtle but not in a flash flood. Some of those canyons have water running so fast nothing survives. Best to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Lucky turtle but not in a flash flood. Some of those canyons have water running so fast nothing survives. Best to you in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Thanks, Ben. Appreciate the review.
Comment from flamingstar
Well, I see where you're going, but one thought that leapt out at me is, he can easily drown in his shell unless he gets to higher ground. That would be the key to his survival during a flash flood. Also, you might consider centering the lines to accentuate the short-long-short format and give it a more balanced look.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Well, I see where you're going, but one thought that leapt out at me is, he can easily drown in his shell unless he gets to higher ground. That would be the key to his survival during a flash flood. Also, you might consider centering the lines to accentuate the short-long-short format and give it a more balanced look.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Appreciate the review, and thanks for reading.
Comment from acerisestory
Well written haiku! I love the imagery of your words. You've made great use of alliteration to increase the flow of your words.
Great entry for the contest! Good luck. Alana
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Well written haiku! I love the imagery of your words. You've made great use of alliteration to increase the flow of your words.
Great entry for the contest! Good luck. Alana
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Thanks, Alana. Appreciate the review.
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You are welcome!
Comment from cupa tea
well ok...you did what the instructions said...it was short, sweet and right to the point....but then this type of poetry is like that I think....
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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well ok...you did what the instructions said...it was short, sweet and right to the point....but then this type of poetry is like that I think....
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Yeah, it's always three lines. Pictures weren't allowed. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from LIJ Red
It talks about a storm, as to prompt, and it's seventeen syllables in a short-long-short format and makes sense-
I really can't find it other than excellent.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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It talks about a storm, as to prompt, and it's seventeen syllables in a short-long-short format and makes sense-
I really can't find it other than excellent.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Thanks, LIJ red. Appreciate the review.
