Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

Great storm haiku. Tortoises do have their own shelter. Perfectly written in correct form. Good luck in the contest.
Teresa

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thanks. I'll probably need good luck. I'm new at this.

Comment from jshep

Excellent

This is a well done haiku. I especially like the satori line wthw nature's safe house. Very clever. I do have one suggestion. I do not think of the land drowning. My choice of word would be flood - storm floods desert as.

Best of luck in the contest. Joyce

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thanks for the suggestion, Joyce. I appreciate it.

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

Good combination of words in this 5-7-5.
Expressive without image gives a clear view of your thesis. Well done.
Best wishes in the contest.
RGstar

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thanks, RG. Appreciate your review.

Comment from dennis0530

Excellent

The author has found the perfect animal for the survival role. Having a portable house with retractable doors and windows, a tortoise easily weathers a storm.

I guess we all want to mimic such a house that is windproof, sturdy and maintenance free.

But who wants to live a tortoise's life?

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Wouldn't want to carry my house on my back, but I guess they don't have to worry about clutter, LOL.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

The desert is no place to be after a storm. One never knows how the terrain will react. This has the appearance of meeting the criteria of the poem. Good luck in your conteste.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thanks for reading and reviewing.

reply by c_lucas on 02-Sep-2014

You're welcome.

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

A storm in a desert is rare, but I suppose when it rains, it pours. Interesting house, I mean the tortoise. The last line is what makes this poem. Good luck with the contest. Les

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Hello, Les. Desert soil can't absorb the downpour, so there's flash flooding.Thanks for reading and reviewing.

Comment from mauial

Good

I like the thought behind this haiku to meet the prompt requirements. The last line is great. But I think the first two lines, especially the first need some work. The wording just doesn't flow as good between those two lines.
storm drowns desert
so wise tortoise hides in shell
nature's own safe house

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Good idea. Might use it, if it doesn't mess with the syllable count. Thanks.

Comment from James Dooney

Exceptional

You have done well with this one my friend. Its so natural and so obvious your simple message that it is so well done. Great job !

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thanks. I appreciate the six stars.

Comment from Marn

Excellent

Can visualise this place as I have been reading a book that tells the story of migration of turtles.Nicely written piece of poetic art.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thanks for reviewing and commenting.

Comment from lynglyng

Excellent

I loved the play on words. Great poem. Especially one that had to meet these requirements. Very cleverly written. thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thanks for reading. Glad you liked it.