Comment from Eternal Muse

Excellent

Excellent haiku with some amazing visuals. You have two topics here - a storm and a turtle - and both are painted with TLC (smile). I like the wisdom of the turtle finding refuse in her own shell. Unusual rhyme scheme of 4/8/5 - I hope it qualifies fir short-long-short format.

Beast of luck in the prompt, really.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

I think it does qualify, but I'll take a look. Short/long/short syllable count. Supposed to be 17 syllables or less, not the usual 5/7/5

Thanks for reviewing. It's my first haiku.

reply by Eternal Muse on 03-Sep-2014

I heard, the contest committee disqualified a few entries in the past because of the syllable count. Perhaps, to be on the safe side you want to consider 5/8/5 count - this way you only have to add one syllable to the first line, like:

storm dries the desert

Just a thought.

Comment from Connie C

Excellent

A really good haiku provides imagery that works, and this one works for sure! Very clever reference to the tortoise's shell as "nature's own safe house." My best to you in the contest.
Connie

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thanks, Connie. I appreciate the review and your comments.

Comment from Maggieluv

Excellent

Different and interesting Haiku. Is the shell a symbol? Love the in realism of'stirm drowns desert' Certainky back to nature fior this Haiku. Good luck in the contest. Well done.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thanks for liking it, Maggie. It's my first haiku.

Comment from BCScot

Excellent

A wonderful image, both of the storm and the way nature and it's beasts take care of each other. Thank you for sharing, hard to do when there is no artwork allowed.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thanks for reading and reviewing.

Comment from zanya

Excellent

Yes a reminder of Mother Nature's caring ways for her life forms and Her provision for safety and security'nature's own safe house'.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thanks for reading, Zanya. I appreciate it.

Comment from 4hisglory

Excellent

I really like the last line - very cleaver. Don't quite understand the prompt, so not much help there.

Blessings in the contest. LaVonne

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Hello, LaVonne. Glad you liked and reviewed it. Thanks.

Comment from amahra

Excellent

Beautiful haiku. I have yet to master one. I loved the very simple truth about nature. Love that you didn't think you didn't an art image.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

There's hope, amahra. This is my first one. Contest wouldn't allow art.

Comment from Acquired Taste

Excellent

Excellent description of the benefits of having one's own home on your back... safe and sound without the need for homeowners insurance. Very nice haiku - creative and fairly visual. AT=/

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thanks for reading, and for liking it.

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

What a clever haiku - the imagery is wonderful, the kire perfect and the kigo implied by the rain. I also loved the satori - a safe house for the tortoise! LOL

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

You made me feel great, Dawn. This is the first one I've done.

reply by Dawn Munro on 02-Sep-2014

Oh good! You're welcome. :)

Comment from Dutchie

Excellent

Very well written this haiku with perfect sylable count.
Love the imagination of the storm in the desert and the safe shelter of the tortoise.Well done!! Fia

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thanks for reviewing and liking it.