Comment from livelylinda

Excellent

Author: very good Haiku with correct syllable count. I liked the subject; fresh, original, new. A good contender in the contest. livelylinda

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

Thanks for liking my first haiku.

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

storm drowns desert as
wise tortoise shelters in shell
nature's own safe house

Great imagery with the starkness of the flat, open, arid desert being drenched by rare downpour, and the tortoise cozily sheltered in his carry-along home. :-)

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

Thanks, Leineco. Glad you like it.

Comment from Trybuck

Excellent

hurricane winds howl
erupting tornadoes 'tail
rains save farmer's crop

You've got a very good entry in this contest. Hope it does well, Buck

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

I don't know whose poem you're quoting, but it isn't mine.

reply by Trybuck on 01-Sep-2014

No it isn't yours, it's one I just wrote as part of the review. Sorry if I offended you, Buck

Comment from rrabinow

Excellent

Wonderfully written poem that you wrote for this prompt. Great use of descriptive words. The syllable count is correct as well. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

Thanks for reviewing and for your comments.

Comment from Dom G Robles

Excellent

Haiku: 17 or less syllables. A clear image presented. A raging storm floods the desert while a Turtle tries to protect itself in its shell.The image : storm, desert and a tortoise.
Complies with the requirement... Congratulations. Dom

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

Thanks, Dom. My first haiku.

Comment from Drew Delaney

Excellent

A good idea writing about a turtle being able to find shelter in his own dwelling place, his shell. Quite an awesome thing, when you really think about it. They are quite safe in their shell but I have seen some with broken shells. Very sad when that happens. Best wishes with the contest.

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

Thanks for the review and your comments, Drew.

Comment from mikemagine

Excellent

Nature...it can teach us so much! Just step out of doors, breathe deeply, use all your senses...and you're well on your way to expanding your mind - especially during Spring! We learn from the wise tortoise that our Creator has equipped us and this world with so much...But, sadly we too often take it for granted, eh?

Mike

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

Right you are. Thanks for reviewing.

reply by mikemagine on 01-Sep-2014

Glad to rev. this!!

Comment from DerivedBetter

Excellent

I'm not the best poet around, but I really liked this poem. I liked the comparison of the tortoise shell to the safe house. Well done. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

Glad you liked it, especially since it's my first. Thanks for reviewing.

Comment from RodG

Excellent

You've packed quite a narrative into 17 syllables. We can visualize a flash flood on the desert and a tortoise being buffeted in his shell by the sudden rush of water.
An excellent satori and play on words. We think literally it is a safe house and then we (who love mysteries) think of a "safe house" for witnesses who will be testifying.
I also like your use of alliteration.

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

Thanks, Rod. Your comments are most welcome, especially since I've never written one of these before.

Comment from CHIGYSISKI

Excellent

Nice haiku.I like the reference to the tortoise's shell as nature's safe house which is probably what it is. I like the idea of the desert being drowned by the storm.great concrete images evoked here.Well done.

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014

Thanks. Appreciate your comments and review, especially since I've never written one of these before.