Comment from padumachitta

Excellent

Hi. Such a scary era. This has good dialogue and an interesting character, not to be trusted perhaps, but then we will find out won't we.
I didn't find any obvious spag.
Hurry up and post the next bit.

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014

Hi. Glad you like it. Will get the next chapter up as soon as I can. Thanks for reviewing.

Comment from Kausar_Javeria

Excellent

Hello there~!
Ah! Another amazing chapter. I missed a few earlier chapters but I went back and read them. Wonder what'll happen next!

JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)

(^_^)-<~~KAUSAR~~>-(^_^)

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014

Thanks for going back and catching up. I especially appreciate that. What will happen next? Hmmm... something will. Thanks for your comments, Kausar.

Comment from michaelcahill

Excellent

Wow. This is so tense I kept expecting my wife to sneak up behind me! The dialogue is perfection as the men chose each word with deadly care while she says whatever comes to mind not realizing the possible dire consequences. Every reader wants to muzzle her. Perfect how he cares so much for the kitten, very believable. That makes his disregard for human life all the more chilling. Great chapter. mikey

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014

Hi, Mikey. When a guy tells me that I did male dialogue at least acceptably well, I'm glad. Never been a guy. Poor Elsa. People just don't like her very much, not even the two men she believes should both worship her.

reply by michaelcahill on 03-Sep-2014

She is one of those gals that gets her mate into trouble all the time. She tells 6'5'' guys that they better shut up or her 5'7'' boyfriend is going to kick their butts! I have the feeling there is more to her that will be revealed as time goes by. Yep, these are certainly guys being guys, no question!

Comment from Auroraboreal800

Excellent

Excellent narrative in this very well written piece. I think Hands is ambivalent about Elsa, since She's hurt him before. I enjoyed this story and the Author Notes as well.
Great job Nor!
:)

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Hi, and thanks for reviewing. He's actually fairly done with her, other than for the convenience of sex. She's already flirting with another man, and he'll have something to say to her about that. Unfortunately, he's set himself the task of getting her out of Berlin ahead of the Russian invaders, to save her from multiple rape, and once he's set his mind, he doesn't give up.

Comment from Twilightspire

Excellent

Excellent work, nor. I love that you give Hans a rough and tumble exterior, but still must be reminded on occasion to be "manly."
There was one part, where the two are talking and you say "unwilling to talk about himself." That sounds like a POV assumption. Hans can't know he isn't willing to talk about himself, but he can seem that way, yeah?
Again, great work and on to the next.
-T.J.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

I think it's OK, TJ. Hans knows the guy won't talk about himself. He's been trying to get him to do it for hours. He's done everything but come right out and say, "What the hell ARE you, Schutte? Army, Navy, Gestapo...What?" He can't do that, because there's more than one skeleton in his own closet.

Yeah, two alpha males. Hans couldn't let Schutte think Elsa'd refused to make the coffee. Couldn't let her intrude on their "man" talk. Glad you like it.

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Ohhh, I love that deal they struck - this Schutte really IS an enigma, but it's a deft touch. (His liking that kitten even more than the woman - LOL. The chauvinist!) As usual, nothing to change, in my opinion. Most enjoyable. :)

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Hi, Dawn. Glad you like the little guy-to-guy scene. Hans got what he wanted -- finally. Thanks for liking the story.

Comment from Donya Quijote

Excellent

Enigma only begin to describe this character Schutte. Smooth hands, compassionate toward kitten, leary of women, and a cold-blooded killer. I smell danger and the scent is very strong. I suppose the pact is Hans' way of controlling the situation. Guess Elsa is trying a bit to impress the new guy. Oblivious to the dangers. So typical of her type. On the surface is seems you have revealed more about Schutte but you really haven't. So very sneaky you are. Hope the kitten makes it out alive... Nice hook you have going here to us reading. Master craftsman...

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Hey, thanks for the compliment. Schutte isn't even my character, as I may have said before. He was created by a friend and we wanted to write him into this story so he and Hans -- opposites -- could play off one another. Oh, he does like women, the kind he can knock around. I couldn't say it here, but while Hans is a gorgeous man, this one is the kind who turns heads. Elsa can't help but see him as a prize. He's new, and he's right there. She's known Hans for years, was engaged to him. He's old news.

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

Scheisse is a cuss word I think. A likely pair to make a pact. One cares for a woman and the other a kitten. They are as different as night and day . How do we know they are honorable? First I have seen of your story. Interesting. Nancy

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Glad you like it, and thanks for reading the older stuff. got those reviews, too, and appreciate them.

Actually, both men are womanizers, although Hans didn't start out that way and is faithful when he's in a relationship. Five years ago, Elsa (the woman in the story) and Hans were engaged. He was only 20 and just out of military training. She was supposed to wait for him. They were supposed to marry after the war ended. She didn't wait.

He's an honorable guy. Schutte, well not so much. He uses women, loves kittens. Yes, they are different as daylight and dark. Glad you like it. Elsa is the spoiled daughter of a rich German family, and was once a great beauty. Still could be, with the proper clothes and makeup, but all these people are down on their luck. The men have traded their uniforms for civilian clothes. Less likely to get shot, unless they run into one of those prowling SS units that might hang them as traitors.

Comment from comanalbert

Exceptional

That food zwier...something...I'll google it but it might not be there...
This guy Schutte smells rotten like the chute he is...he will not stand by his word, I can sense that...
Excelent chapter!

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

We'll see if you're right about Schutte. Thanks for reviewing.

Comment from boxergirl

Excellent

This is a good continuation of your story line. Hans conversation with Shutte is realistic and engaging. Hopefully, Elsa and the kitten will be okay.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Hans doesn't trust anyone he can't figure out, but he needs a comrade. Elsa wouldn't see danger until it was too late. Thanks for reading and reviewing.