The Rose Petal Story
This is a fable about being mindful of the things we say11 total reviews
Comment from abul qasim
Reminds of rip van winkle and coleridge's mariner.starting portion is sublime for rose is a topic I feel.the personification of summer is interesting.has the petals something to do with innocence or chastity?
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Reminds of rip van winkle and coleridge's mariner.starting portion is sublime for rose is a topic I feel.the personification of summer is interesting.has the petals something to do with innocence or chastity?
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
Comment from CR Delport
I suppose it depends on what kind of love you are talking about, but it is possible. This is very well written. Good luck in the contest.
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I suppose it depends on what kind of love you are talking about, but it is possible. This is very well written. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
Comment from Jean Lutz
I give you a five star rating because of the excellent message and poem. However it does not qualify in the 5-7-5 contest. Five-seven-five is written in three lines, seventeen syllables. Don't be discouraged; become more familiar with the site and let your talent flow.
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I give you a five star rating because of the excellent message and poem. However it does not qualify in the 5-7-5 contest. Five-seven-five is written in three lines, seventeen syllables. Don't be discouraged; become more familiar with the site and let your talent flow.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
Comment from owlgirl615
This was a very deep read. I loved the symbolism. I'd have never thought to use rose petals as passed lovers. I loved that you described the man as a sort of phantom that just seems to pass through town, leaving everyone else to wonder about his story.
Keep it up.
~Crystal
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This was a very deep read. I loved the symbolism. I'd have never thought to use rose petals as passed lovers. I loved that you described the man as a sort of phantom that just seems to pass through town, leaving everyone else to wonder about his story.
Keep it up.
~Crystal
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, mad poet, and I have heard the same metaphor except with feathers instead of rose petals. but this is entered in the wrong contest. a 5 7 5 poem is three lines with the 5 7 5 syllable count. maybe you meant this to go in the fairy tale poem contest?
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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this is an excellent write, mad poet, and I have heard the same metaphor except with feathers instead of rose petals. but this is entered in the wrong contest. a 5 7 5 poem is three lines with the 5 7 5 syllable count. maybe you meant this to go in the fairy tale poem contest?
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Thank you. I'm just learning this new site, so I appreciate the advice.
Comment from mikemagine
What can I say?? I'm very much at a loss for words...It's a remarkable poem and then some! Beautifully written, and woven within is a valuable lesson that we never stop learning...
This is impeccably written and I'm glad I stopped in:)
Mike
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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What can I say?? I'm very much at a loss for words...It's a remarkable poem and then some! Beautifully written, and woven within is a valuable lesson that we never stop learning...
This is impeccably written and I'm glad I stopped in:)
Mike
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the positive comment, Mike. I really appreciate the support.
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Glad to my friend!!
Mike
Comment from Trybuck
I read your reviews
At least some of them were true
and scored about right
What I've written above is what a 5-7-5 looks like. Five syllables first line, seven on the second and five on the third..
You can edit your poem to meet the requirements until the deadline, or you may even be able to withdraw from the contest. Not sure about that..
Hope you enjoy your stay here. I will come back and upgrade the rating if you revise, Buck
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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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I read your reviews
At least some of them were true
and scored about right
What I've written above is what a 5-7-5 looks like. Five syllables first line, seven on the second and five on the third..
You can edit your poem to meet the requirements until the deadline, or you may even be able to withdraw from the contest. Not sure about that..
Hope you enjoy your stay here. I will come back and upgrade the rating if you revise, Buck
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Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Revising my poem to match the contest will compromise the flow substantially. I'm not looking to place in this contest; I'm just learning this site. I'll be better prepared the next contest. You gave me 3 stars, so I'm grateful. My ex-girlfriend gave my poem an F. Anything better than no stars, and I'm a happy camper :)
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Enjoy the learning experience.. There's a lot of contest on here. I'm sure you'll learn the how to maneuver real quick..
Let me know when you're finished revising, Buck
Comment from CHIGYSISKI
I like this poem because it tells a story and has a tinge of humor to it but it does not quite fit the syllabic count requirements of this contest. It is a nice free verse poem with a story to tell. Well done. Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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I like this poem because it tells a story and has a tinge of humor to it but it does not quite fit the syllabic count requirements of this contest. It is a nice free verse poem with a story to tell. Well done. Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Thank you very much for your comment and stars. I really appreciate it. I'm not looking to place in this contest being that I didn't comply with the contest rules. I'm just excited to get this poem out there. The next contest, I'll be better equipped.
Comment from J Patience
This strikes me as a poem that can touch each reader's life somehow. Everyone has some rose petals to strew and find. For me it's moments with my husband and boys that shouldn't be wasted. Thank you. It's told in a sort of sing-songy way without being too sappy. It's a good read.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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This strikes me as a poem that can touch each reader's life somehow. Everyone has some rose petals to strew and find. For me it's moments with my husband and boys that shouldn't be wasted. Thank you. It's told in a sort of sing-songy way without being too sappy. It's a good read.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Thank you for such inspirational words.
Comment from kiwijenny
We can't take the words that scar back.....this is true....but God forgives and gives us a clean slate........
Beautifully done
God bless
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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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We can't take the words that scar back.....this is true....but God forgives and gives us a clean slate........
Beautifully done
God bless
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Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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I concur. God is more forgiving than us humans are.
