Of Icky Things and Girls
You can't let your guard down for a moment.46 total reviews
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Heebie jeebies!!!!!!!!!!! Lee, I find these stories just hilarious and yet they have such a 'reality' about them that rings in the nostalgia. I remember being in the sixth grade. The story involves falsies.... I will leave it at that for now. I am sending one of my weekly sixers before I run out. Spread it over several stories as I know they will deserve them.
:-) Carolyn
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Heebie jeebies!!!!!!!!!!! Lee, I find these stories just hilarious and yet they have such a 'reality' about them that rings in the nostalgia. I remember being in the sixth grade. The story involves falsies.... I will leave it at that for now. I am sending one of my weekly sixers before I run out. Spread it over several stories as I know they will deserve them.
:-) Carolyn
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That has to have been biographical! LOL, I can just imagine you to be a shy, sweet, cute little boy, but not that shy you wouldn't touch her butt! LOL. You are a scream, Lee. We didn't call it, Post Office, it was called Postman's Knock, but the rules were the same. Goodness, that was a long, long time ago, what sweet and funny memories that brought back, and no, I didn't wear falsies, I didn't know there was such things. I was so sweet and innocent, still am!! Another Lee special, brilliant. xsx Sandra :)
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That has to have been biographical! LOL, I can just imagine you to be a shy, sweet, cute little boy, but not that shy you wouldn't touch her butt! LOL. You are a scream, Lee. We didn't call it, Post Office, it was called Postman's Knock, but the rules were the same. Goodness, that was a long, long time ago, what sweet and funny memories that brought back, and no, I didn't wear falsies, I didn't know there was such things. I was so sweet and innocent, still am!! Another Lee special, brilliant. xsx Sandra :)
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
Comment from brentman99
I liked the flow of your story. I didn't notice any spelling or grammar issues and things moved along quite nicely. On the plus side, I think I just found out what I missed in Grade 6 as I don't recall playing Post Office. I think your character was right, in that girl-butt does feel different. A cute story that I enjoyed reading. Thanks for sharing, Brent.
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I liked the flow of your story. I didn't notice any spelling or grammar issues and things moved along quite nicely. On the plus side, I think I just found out what I missed in Grade 6 as I don't recall playing Post Office. I think your character was right, in that girl-butt does feel different. A cute story that I enjoyed reading. Thanks for sharing, Brent.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
Comment from AAud
This piece of nostalgia was SO sweet and SOOO funny! Are you published? If you aren't you should be! You are an amazing writer!!
It takes a special, creative person to come up with a description like: "A cowlick that, on windy days, made him look like a weather vane."
I cracked up when the biggest, loudest girl in 6th grade also played the tuba. That is priceless!
Another favorite line: "shower-curtained den of iniquity" LOL
I laughed the whole way through, especially the way you portrayed Gerald's innocence. Feeling a girl's butt just felt like denim. :-)
And as always, you've given us delightful, witty, realistic and very funny dialog! Kudos!
I never even noticed the spacing problems, that's how engaged I was.
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This piece of nostalgia was SO sweet and SOOO funny! Are you published? If you aren't you should be! You are an amazing writer!!
It takes a special, creative person to come up with a description like: "A cowlick that, on windy days, made him look like a weather vane."
I cracked up when the biggest, loudest girl in 6th grade also played the tuba. That is priceless!
Another favorite line: "shower-curtained den of iniquity" LOL
I laughed the whole way through, especially the way you portrayed Gerald's innocence. Feeling a girl's butt just felt like denim. :-)
And as always, you've given us delightful, witty, realistic and very funny dialog! Kudos!
I never even noticed the spacing problems, that's how engaged I was.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
Comment from sibhus
Well, I should say that Beth Morton's sister should be mortified. Can you imagine you falsies in the hands of a sixth grad boy, imagine the stains. Good stuff there, Lee. great descriptions that really bring back the simply days of yesteryear. I can't imagine what kids play today, what spin the crack pipe or Kama Sutra post office. Again, good stuff.
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Well, I should say that Beth Morton's sister should be mortified. Can you imagine you falsies in the hands of a sixth grad boy, imagine the stains. Good stuff there, Lee. great descriptions that really bring back the simply days of yesteryear. I can't imagine what kids play today, what spin the crack pipe or Kama Sutra post office. Again, good stuff.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
Comment from livelylinda
humpwhistle: now I know what I missed because my grandparents wouldn't let me go to parties 'cause I might get in trouble . . . it is fascinating hearing this story from a sixth grade boy . . . being a girl, I would never have known how they think at that age. A wonderful story which put a smile on my face. Love your author's notes; nice touch to end the story. livelylinda
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humpwhistle: now I know what I missed because my grandparents wouldn't let me go to parties 'cause I might get in trouble . . . it is fascinating hearing this story from a sixth grade boy . . . being a girl, I would never have known how they think at that age. A wonderful story which put a smile on my face. Love your author's notes; nice touch to end the story. livelylinda
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Poor Gerald. He's not ready for this. Seems he excels at something...all without meaning to or even knowing what it is that makes him so special. He's so confused he's sweet. I do so enjoy these peeks at what it's like to grow up male. And I thought boys had it easy. :D Nancy
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Poor Gerald. He's not ready for this. Seems he excels at something...all without meaning to or even knowing what it is that makes him so special. He's so confused he's sweet. I do so enjoy these peeks at what it's like to grow up male. And I thought boys had it easy. :D Nancy
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
Comment from adewpearl
no surprise here that I love the title :-)
I love Gerald's laid back attitude toward life and what constitutes living a successful life :-_)
Leave it to a girl to change everything LOL
great passage about the activities of the fast crowd :-)
love the lesson in touching girl butt
Inviting a boy to kiss her is one thing, but to feel up her falsies? This girl is a real hussy
The ending is killing me, Lee - I need to find a way to gasp for air LOL It's been a slow labor day, but this sure picked it up. :-) Brooke
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no surprise here that I love the title :-)
I love Gerald's laid back attitude toward life and what constitutes living a successful life :-_)
Leave it to a girl to change everything LOL
great passage about the activities of the fast crowd :-)
love the lesson in touching girl butt
Inviting a boy to kiss her is one thing, but to feel up her falsies? This girl is a real hussy
The ending is killing me, Lee - I need to find a way to gasp for air LOL It's been a slow labor day, but this sure picked it up. :-) Brooke
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Just the thought of being a kid again is frightening.
I wouldn't want to go through that again would you?
I do enjoy your stories Lee. They are always a hoot!
Great job on this one. Nancy
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Just the thought of being a kid again is frightening.
I wouldn't want to go through that again would you?
I do enjoy your stories Lee. They are always a hoot!
Great job on this one. Nancy
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
Comment from Jay Leeward
A wonderful trip down memory lane. Granted, it's difficult for me to remember that far back, but this story feels absolutely true. I would accuse the author of sneaking a video camera into that basement, but a Super 8 was too big to sneak into anywhere.
The author has given us some amazing phrases and images. "as unremarkable as a silent fart in the Grand Canyon." "a notoriously un-astute noticer". "He had no training tit training." I stand in serious envy.
Thank you, sir, for a delightful tale, and for a graphic lesson in how to create images in prose that will stay with the reader for a very long time.
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A wonderful trip down memory lane. Granted, it's difficult for me to remember that far back, but this story feels absolutely true. I would accuse the author of sneaking a video camera into that basement, but a Super 8 was too big to sneak into anywhere.
The author has given us some amazing phrases and images. "as unremarkable as a silent fart in the Grand Canyon." "a notoriously un-astute noticer". "He had no training tit training." I stand in serious envy.
Thank you, sir, for a delightful tale, and for a graphic lesson in how to create images in prose that will stay with the reader for a very long time.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
