Of Icky Things and Girls
You can't let your guard down for a moment.46 total reviews
Comment from Muffins
A heady mixture of pre- adolescence exploration and confusion. The girls, especially Beth who will probably end up pregnant upon entering high school, are full of dynamite with the knowledge of the power their bodies, their presence have on boys.
Gerald brims with innocence, hilarious observation and conclusion. This is a fun, creative entertaining story.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
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A heady mixture of pre- adolescence exploration and confusion. The girls, especially Beth who will probably end up pregnant upon entering high school, are full of dynamite with the knowledge of the power their bodies, their presence have on boys.
Gerald brims with innocence, hilarious observation and conclusion. This is a fun, creative entertaining story.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Muffins. I appreciate you digging this one out. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from pafaust
I don't think that Gerald was as impressed as he should have been about the super powers of girl butt. But I remember being in sixth grade and will cut him some slack for his ignorance and I'd give him a high five for his allure. Especially, because I think I have the same cowlick and I understand that the guys find it intriguing. "There was a little girl who had a little curl"...
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014
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I don't think that Gerald was as impressed as he should have been about the super powers of girl butt. But I remember being in sixth grade and will cut him some slack for his ignorance and I'd give him a high five for his allure. Especially, because I think I have the same cowlick and I understand that the guys find it intriguing. "There was a little girl who had a little curl"...
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, pafaust. I've got the cowlick, too. Peace, Lee
Comment from pattipac
LOL, you got me with the training tit-training segment of your story about a naive six-grader, who learns to kiss and butt feel at his first six-grade party.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014
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LOL, you got me with the training tit-training segment of your story about a naive six-grader, who learns to kiss and butt feel at his first six-grade party.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014
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Thank you, pattipac. I guess we all, male and female, go through a training tit phase. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from barkingdog
This read like a scene from a movie. Wonderfully visual and so entertaining. It took me back to the awkward days but with a young boy's point of view.
Thank you for creating this one.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014
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This read like a scene from a movie. Wonderfully visual and so entertaining. It took me back to the awkward days but with a young boy's point of view.
Thank you for creating this one.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, Ellen. I always visualize when I write, so I'm glad that comes through--even when I don't spend many words on descriptions. Thanks for the galaxy. Peace, Lee
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There is a magic in that. I see now how lengthy descriptive passages slow down a read. Less is better. You use the imagination of the reader by using just the right words to spark an image. You know when to stop. Something I need to learn.
:)e
Comment from WritingsByG
Come on admit it you're not the old git you want everyone to think you are. You're either a 12 yo boy or 14 yo girl, or ... or ... an old git mentally stuck being a preadolescence or on the cusp of being an adolescence - LOL
Excellent story, again. If you weren't so damn funny I'd say you were boring being constantly funny :-)
G
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014
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Come on admit it you're not the old git you want everyone to think you are. You're either a 12 yo boy or 14 yo girl, or ... or ... an old git mentally stuck being a preadolescence or on the cusp of being an adolescence - LOL
Excellent story, again. If you weren't so damn funny I'd say you were boring being constantly funny :-)
G
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, G. Old git suits me to a T. Trouble is, I'm still an immature twit when it comes to sex. My maturity was arrested mid-puberty.
Thanks for the comments, my friend. Peace, Lee
Comment from vickib
Super cute story Lee. The way you take the ball and run with it cracks me up. You just can't help it can you? This story is chock-full of great lines and images of icky things and boys. I hated boys at that age, of course I did have three little brothers too. But it did make me remember those awful awkward days. For a shy tomboy girl this stuff sucked for me. Only you could make me smile and giggle through it. Only you. Love how he only felt dungarees. Those were my all time favorite jeans.
I predict a sotm nomination but how do they choose exactly which one of your stories is what I want to know.
I'm behind on your post but I'm the slow c average girl who in time does eventually catch up.
Wanna play spin the bottle next?
XO
Vicki
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Super cute story Lee. The way you take the ball and run with it cracks me up. You just can't help it can you? This story is chock-full of great lines and images of icky things and boys. I hated boys at that age, of course I did have three little brothers too. But it did make me remember those awful awkward days. For a shy tomboy girl this stuff sucked for me. Only you could make me smile and giggle through it. Only you. Love how he only felt dungarees. Those were my all time favorite jeans.
I predict a sotm nomination but how do they choose exactly which one of your stories is what I want to know.
I'm behind on your post but I'm the slow c average girl who in time does eventually catch up.
Wanna play spin the bottle next?
XO
Vicki
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Vicki. Sorry this is late, but I get backed up when I'm ill. Yes, having little brothers must have influenced you feelings about boys. You know, I wonder when we stopped calling them dungarees, and switched to jeans. Where I grew up, we called all jeans dungarees, but I suppose it must have been a brand name, too. I'm glad you enjoyed my story. Peace, Lee
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Excellent. A virtual, already spent six, double oh.
Loved this. You captured the naivety so well and gave me a few laughs as well.
as a silent fart in the Grand Canyon. - yes. A complete waste of time.
a realie?? LOL!!!
THIS comment (or these two lines if you like) is/are my favourite. Dunno why, exactly. It just struck me a so funny, I laughed out loud:
Rosalind Hibbert was the biggest and loudest person in sixth grade. She played the tuba.
I just laughed again.
Really fun! I had a blast.
Av
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Excellent. A virtual, already spent six, double oh.
Loved this. You captured the naivety so well and gave me a few laughs as well.
as a silent fart in the Grand Canyon. - yes. A complete waste of time.
a realie?? LOL!!!
THIS comment (or these two lines if you like) is/are my favourite. Dunno why, exactly. It just struck me a so funny, I laughed out loud:
Rosalind Hibbert was the biggest and loudest person in sixth grade. She played the tuba.
I just laughed again.
Really fun! I had a blast.
Av
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Av. I'll never grow up. Yes, I like those two lines as well. It's one of the kid-like almost-non-sequiters (sorry, I never learned how to spell Greek). Anyway, the tuba line seemed perfect to me.
I'm glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from mikemagine
I never played post office. I wasn't very sociable and I didn't consider girls attractive till a few years later. Tried baseball...but I kept striking out:) Such is life...
This is a funny, well written story. I'm guessing this a childhood memory? Beth's vocabulary is impressive! I wonder how her older sister got back at her...
This prompted me to look back at not just how I did - didn't, actually - with the girls, but it "sent" me back to easier, more fun times:)
Thanks for sharing!
Mike
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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I never played post office. I wasn't very sociable and I didn't consider girls attractive till a few years later. Tried baseball...but I kept striking out:) Such is life...
This is a funny, well written story. I'm guessing this a childhood memory? Beth's vocabulary is impressive! I wonder how her older sister got back at her...
This prompted me to look back at not just how I did - didn't, actually - with the girls, but it "sent" me back to easier, more fun times:)
Thanks for sharing!
Mike
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Mike. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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Sure thing, Lee!!
Comment from onebrit
Oh to be so young and innocent again....how sweet. This poor kid is obviously overwhelmed by girls. I love how you wrote this, it's adorable, and so innocent at the same time. I like the inner dialogue, it sounds so like an 11 year old. Well written
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Oh to be so young and innocent again....how sweet. This poor kid is obviously overwhelmed by girls. I love how you wrote this, it's adorable, and so innocent at the same time. I like the inner dialogue, it sounds so like an 11 year old. Well written
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Thank you, onebrit. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from RRHughes
Well Mr. Humpwhistle, you captured perfectly the language to match the thought process of a pre-teen. Oh the memories. Reminds me of a boy so shy that Gerald would look like Sir Lancelot. Judith, who remains without a last name, invited this boy to a party. He knew that she had this thing for him but he accepted her invitation anyway. Little did he know that she had prearranged and masterminded the outcome of spin the bottle. That can't be done you say, like fixing a roulette wheel? Well it was obvious when each of the other couples disappeared and it got down to Judith and this boy. I heered tell that he wasn't about to touch that bottle. Hopefully Judith's mother explained to her afterwards that some boys are so shy, you just got to wait awhile.
As usual your stories are brilliantly written. This one does an excellent job of capturing the inner conflicts of the pre-teen. How many of these have you had published?
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014
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Well Mr. Humpwhistle, you captured perfectly the language to match the thought process of a pre-teen. Oh the memories. Reminds me of a boy so shy that Gerald would look like Sir Lancelot. Judith, who remains without a last name, invited this boy to a party. He knew that she had this thing for him but he accepted her invitation anyway. Little did he know that she had prearranged and masterminded the outcome of spin the bottle. That can't be done you say, like fixing a roulette wheel? Well it was obvious when each of the other couples disappeared and it got down to Judith and this boy. I heered tell that he wasn't about to touch that bottle. Hopefully Judith's mother explained to her afterwards that some boys are so shy, you just got to wait awhile.
As usual your stories are brilliantly written. This one does an excellent job of capturing the inner conflicts of the pre-teen. How many of these have you had published?
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much for the galaxy, RRHughes. I really appreciate your comments. Peace, Lee
