Comment from visionary1234

Excellent

Love the feeling you've conveyed here, Theresa (great idea not to have art work, by the way) ... you've captured perfectly the silence and stillness of peace itself.
:)Sharyn

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thank you Sharyn:)

Comment from mikemagine

Excellent

Rich, this is! And every line, every word belongs to each other - if that makes sense? I hope:) "I float as one with clouds through endless skies" Superb!!

I wish I had a sixer to give you...

Thanks!!

Mike

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thank you Mike:)

reply by mikemagine on 02-Sep-2014

Sure thing my friend!!

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Nice peaceful spiritual free verse wit lovely alliteration and a fine flow. Nice abundance of S sounds in the opening stanza, which serve to set a hushes, serene tone somehow:


I saturate
my soul
in silence
drinking
in the nature sounds
around me

the S sounds continue in second stanza, accentuated by assonance of E n breeze, secrets and tree:

Listening
to the breeze
as it blows
secrets
from tree to tree


LOVE THIS AHA Epiphany line--very Zen:

Absorbing
beauty
through my eyes
though
they are closed


nice echo of assonant O between closed in previous line and float. Good alliteration of C and G as well, with echoing consonance of K:

I float
as one
with clouds
through endless skies

I bask
in all
God's glorious gifts
allowing
peace and loving kindness (nice slant rhyme sound of gifts and kindness)


good ending note:

to permeate
my body
my mind
my soul

I felt the serene bliss in this. Well done!

Love,

rd

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thank you RD:)

reply by rama devi on 02-Sep-2014

:-)))

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Teresa;
an excellently composed piece of poetry that I enjoyed reading very much as it was very inspirational and enlightening is a very good spiritual poems should be.
Your imagery was very descriptive and expressive throughout your writing and very spiritual way: "Listening to the breeze as it blows secrets from tree to tree". I can actually visualize this breeze.
Thank you so much for writing and sharing this wonderfully formatted and composed piece of poetry for everyone to read and may the Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thank you Alex:)

reply by krys123 on 02-Sep-2014

You are so welcome

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

''drinking
in the nature sounds
around me''

This one jumped out at me early, Debbie.
I might have changed the above to
'' drinking in the sounds of nature'' rather than ''drinking in nature sounds'' somehow does not completely relaxes.

The rest is beautifully composed , giving the feeling of weightlessness and relaxation. One with God and nature.
Good write.
Best wishes,
RG

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thank you RG for the great review and suggestion.

Comment from rrabinow

Excellent

I like the imagery I see from secrets going from tree to tree, and I see that as peaceful. Great use of description in your poem. It flows well also.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thanks:)

Comment from Christine B.

Excellent

Rejuvenating, within this piece there is a hope to recapture the zest circumstance can sap from a soul. It, in its own right, reminds one that their efforts to seek peace aren't worthless, that their being is not altogether conquered. Bask away, you've earned it.

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

thank you:)

Comment from thee-name

Excellent

Nice spiritual verse. I BASK
IN ALL
GOD'S GLORIOUS GIFTS
ALLOWING
PEACE AND LOVING KINDNESS
TO PERMEATE
MY BODY
MY MIND
MY SOUL

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thank you:)

reply by thee-name on 02-Sep-2014

THANK YOU!

Comment from faragon

Excellent

This poem, to me, is almost like a Native American Indian prayer. I feel instantly at peace when reading this poem. Very lovely!

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thank you so much:)

Comment from nancyjam

Excellent

I enjoyed sharing your peaceful moments in nature.
The images are lovely and do bring a feeling of
Peace and well being.
There is nothing like nature's sights and sounds to help one feel refreshed.

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thank you Nancy:)