Harrison Harrington Smythson
a story poem for children150 total reviews
Comment from JosieL
I like writing poems for children and I really enjoyed your poem. It's a good story with a good message. Your rhyme sceme and rhythm add to the read of the poem. Very well done.
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I like writing poems for children and I really enjoyed your poem. It's a good story with a good message. Your rhyme sceme and rhythm add to the read of the poem. Very well done.
Comment Written 31-May-2018
Comment from Magdelyn Brennan
I really enjoyed reading this poem! It was sweet and funny and it rolled off the tongue. It's totally delightful. I'm sure kids love it, too. I look forward to reading more of your writing here, as I also love to write rhyming children's poetry.
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I really enjoyed reading this poem! It was sweet and funny and it rolled off the tongue. It's totally delightful. I'm sure kids love it, too. I look forward to reading more of your writing here, as I also love to write rhyming children's poetry.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2018
Comment from pamelaperron
funny with the 4th dimension of reality (that's where parents believe they'll bring their dreams to their children actually thinking it will work) your consistency within lines as well as words were loudly heard. because we need to critique... you have an extra space between the second and third line from the bottom::)...pamela
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funny with the 4th dimension of reality (that's where parents believe they'll bring their dreams to their children actually thinking it will work) your consistency within lines as well as words were loudly heard. because we need to critique... you have an extra space between the second and third line from the bottom::)...pamela
Comment Written 09-May-2016
Comment from writeapoem
This was a excellent poem and I can see why it was chosen as the poem of the month. I love the story and the contrast between father and son. No doubt it is that way nowadays few follow daddy's footsteps. I was smitten by the storyline, the rhyme and the ending. All the best and God Bless
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This was a excellent poem and I can see why it was chosen as the poem of the month. I love the story and the contrast between father and son. No doubt it is that way nowadays few follow daddy's footsteps. I was smitten by the storyline, the rhyme and the ending. All the best and God Bless
Comment Written 11-Jan-2016
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
Awesome! The story is enchanting, the poem flows nicely, and the words tickle my fancy. The child's name alone is a work of art. This review was worth doing for one point and 2 member cents. :)
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Awesome! The story is enchanting, the poem flows nicely, and the words tickle my fancy. The child's name alone is a work of art. This review was worth doing for one point and 2 member cents. :)
Comment Written 06-Oct-2015
Comment from Colette Breeze.
Hello there,
thank-you for your exciting piece of writing.The rhymes are very good.Did you know,that there is actually a real creature just like the one on the photograph,that really exists?I saw one in the nineties in the jungle in Thailand.
It was so big ,and quite scary looking,so I just stayed very still.Then it just disappeared back into the undergrowth.Shame I didn't get a picture,but it's true,it was about 1 metre tall,and built like a rhinoceros.It was greyish black and had a huge frill around it's neck.What an amazing experience!I was lucky that it didn't hurt me though,huh?
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Hello there,
thank-you for your exciting piece of writing.The rhymes are very good.Did you know,that there is actually a real creature just like the one on the photograph,that really exists?I saw one in the nineties in the jungle in Thailand.
It was so big ,and quite scary looking,so I just stayed very still.Then it just disappeared back into the undergrowth.Shame I didn't get a picture,but it's true,it was about 1 metre tall,and built like a rhinoceros.It was greyish black and had a huge frill around it's neck.What an amazing experience!I was lucky that it didn't hurt me though,huh?
Comment Written 01-Oct-2015
Comment from Patricia Dsouza
Your writing is remarkable and refined. I value the way you progress and flow throughout. You have remarkably brilliant skills.
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Your writing is remarkable and refined. I value the way you progress and flow throughout. You have remarkably brilliant skills.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2015
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Little runaways some times learn hard lessons and your poem details this message crystal clear. Easy to see why it is an All-Time Best. Write on.
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Little runaways some times learn hard lessons and your poem details this message crystal clear. Easy to see why it is an All-Time Best. Write on.
Comment Written 01-May-2015
Comment from dragonpoet
This sounds like a version of Oz. He was dreaming of the forest and the triceritops.
It sounds like a childhood fantasy to be brave but not follow the father's lead. It shoes that children can be opposites of their parents. It also shows the importance of the reality of home.
This poem read very quickly for such a long poem. Its meter pulls you through it.
I like the alliteration in the name.
Keep writing
Joan
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This sounds like a version of Oz. He was dreaming of the forest and the triceritops.
It sounds like a childhood fantasy to be brave but not follow the father's lead. It shoes that children can be opposites of their parents. It also shows the importance of the reality of home.
This poem read very quickly for such a long poem. Its meter pulls you through it.
I like the alliteration in the name.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
Whata lovely poem and all those lines. I can't immagine myself writing those lines twelve is my limit. A lovely poem
Thanks for sharing. Mary
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Whata lovely poem and all those lines. I can't immagine myself writing those lines twelve is my limit. A lovely poem
Thanks for sharing. Mary
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Thanks so very much, Mary Ann - I appreciate your generous six stars and complimentary comments :-) Brooke
