A whisper ...
Lover of your soul. In 4 different syllable counts.aabbcc90 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
Great opening lines for a spiritually uplifting declaration of faith. Interesting and effective use of varied syllable count that lengthens and builds as it goes--much as we should do with our lives and faith. Excellent title. It reminds me of the "still small voice" that we need to listen for. Amazing artwork to accompany your work. Very nice presentation.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Great opening lines for a spiritually uplifting declaration of faith. Interesting and effective use of varied syllable count that lengthens and builds as it goes--much as we should do with our lives and faith. Excellent title. It reminds me of the "still small voice" that we need to listen for. Amazing artwork to accompany your work. Very nice presentation.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Thank you for this great review, I appreciate the warm comments also, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Sankey
Well done Bro good verses and great inspiration. Loved the picture well known I believe and well used in this situ. God Bless. No errors and a great read.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Well done Bro good verses and great inspiration. Loved the picture well known I believe and well used in this situ. God Bless. No errors and a great read.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Thank you Geoff, for great rating and lovely review, blessings Roy.
Comment from nannabot
Hi, I think this is a lovely poem, with a strong message, and which you execute with much passion. It moves along like a ship on the waves, with powerful imagery giving a sense of being there.
A curious last line.Rather like a conundrum. If you say, 'lost' he will find you, and if you say 'found' it means you must have been lost in the first place!
Very well written with good strong rhyming. Lol xxxxx
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Hi, I think this is a lovely poem, with a strong message, and which you execute with much passion. It moves along like a ship on the waves, with powerful imagery giving a sense of being there.
A curious last line.Rather like a conundrum. If you say, 'lost' he will find you, and if you say 'found' it means you must have been lost in the first place!
Very well written with good strong rhyming. Lol xxxxx
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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It's really a paradox, if you want to be found, you will, Jesus said, "they choose to live in darkness, because the light exposes their sin"! in Romans 3:23" " for all have sinned and fall short of the glory of God" Christ made up the shortfall! Salvation is a gift, you either want or not, the choice is ours! Thanks for the great review, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Excellent poem of faith. I love the way the stanzas add line length each time, building to a crescendo.
There's just two gates << Should be "There ARE" but that ruins the syllable count, so I suggest WITH, like this:
With just two gates in your highways' choice,
Either found or lost, choose one, give voice.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Excellent poem of faith. I love the way the stanzas add line length each time, building to a crescendo.
There's just two gates << Should be "There ARE" but that ruins the syllable count, so I suggest WITH, like this:
With just two gates in your highways' choice,
Either found or lost, choose one, give voice.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Brilliant Phyllis, that's why you're a genius and I'm not! "To instead of in", thanks for the great review, I love reviewers like you! I helped somebody out tonight, with one line, making it near perfect, sometimes you can see for others but not one's self! Thanks again. Blessings, Roy.
Comment from TamzinWhite
Uplifting, inspiring, imaginative and thank you. I needed to hear that. It never ceases to amaze me how speaking of deity, Him, Christ, our Saviour, always, always, uplifts and gives peace.
Thank you for a lovely sweet, enduring, message.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Uplifting, inspiring, imaginative and thank you. I needed to hear that. It never ceases to amaze me how speaking of deity, Him, Christ, our Saviour, always, always, uplifts and gives peace.
Thank you for a lovely sweet, enduring, message.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Thank you Tamzin, I'm gad you liked it and it helps, that's why we're here, to inspire one another, I'm grateful for the great review! Blessings, Roy.
Comment from elizvinod
Very true.Our Only hope is our God who searches and loves us. God is my refuge and my salvation. I will prefer the road that leads to life.Nice Poem with a beautiful message
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Very true.Our Only hope is our God who searches and loves us. God is my refuge and my salvation. I will prefer the road that leads to life.Nice Poem with a beautiful message
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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We only have to choose and He is happy you did and will help. Thanks for the great review and comments, blessings, Roy.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'A whisper......' is an exceptionally well-written and spiritually-uplifting piece. This talented poet has with craft and style, described God's love of His flock. Never lose your faith in the Good Shepherd. It was a privilege to review a work of this standard.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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'A whisper......' is an exceptionally well-written and spiritually-uplifting piece. This talented poet has with craft and style, described God's love of His flock. Never lose your faith in the Good Shepherd. It was a privilege to review a work of this standard.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Thank you Duchess, you always manage to encourage and help with the will to go on, bless you dear,friend,Roy.
Roy, you're very welcome. KEEP WRITING!
Bless you too my friend, the Duchess
Comment from OLA THOMAS
What a well thought out spiritual poem, I wonder you categorize this under general poetry. i love the essence of this poem especially in the 4th stanza "But God will search, He loves your soul,
Your only hope, He'll make you whole,
For God condemned, Son sacrificed,
So He could touch, your heart entice."
ola thomas
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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What a well thought out spiritual poem, I wonder you categorize this under general poetry. i love the essence of this poem especially in the 4th stanza "But God will search, He loves your soul,
Your only hope, He'll make you whole,
For God condemned, Son sacrificed,
So He could touch, your heart entice."
ola thomas
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Thank Ola, for stopping by and delivering a thoughtful and encouraging review and remarks, blessings, Roy.
Comment from chasennov
Lover of your soul. In 4 different syllable counts.aabbcc
"A whisper ..." This is an excellent poem you have created here, Roy. The lighthouse stands guard at night, as does God. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Lover of your soul. In 4 different syllable counts.aabbcc
"A whisper ..." This is an excellent poem you have created here, Roy. The lighthouse stands guard at night, as does God. Well done.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Thank you for this gracious review and kind remarks, I appreciate them, blessings, Roy.
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You are very welcome, Roy.
Comment from mjac777
This was so inspiring, Roy.
Lovely rhyme, nice flow.
I loved the lines:
"But God will search, He loves your soul,
Your only hope, He'll make you whole,
For God condemned, Son sacrificed,
So He could touch, your heart entice. "
and the last lines were the clincher - calling us to choose and give voice to our faith.
Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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This was so inspiring, Roy.
Lovely rhyme, nice flow.
I loved the lines:
"But God will search, He loves your soul,
Your only hope, He'll make you whole,
For God condemned, Son sacrificed,
So He could touch, your heart entice. "
and the last lines were the clincher - calling us to choose and give voice to our faith.
Well done.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the lovely review, I'm so glad it worked for you, blessings, Roy.
