Comment from Eric1

Excellent

This is a beautifully written Terza rima, it has great description and imagery, with lovely rhythm and a most wonderfully smooth flow, I wish you every luck in the contest friend.

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

Thanks, Eric.

reply by Eric1 on 06-Sep-2014

You are very welcome my friend

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

I rested. Towering against the blue
of distant sky, rose massive trunks so vast
they formed a great cathedral. Then I knew

a peace that soothed the troubles of the past,
a voice that whispered, "Yes, you're home at last."
This reminds me of walking to the largest kauri tree in the bush,..it was massive.....no lower branches,....,home at last
Well done
God bless

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

Not too far away that tree, Tane Mahuta...

Thanks for the kind words.

reply by kiwijenny on 06-Sep-2014

Tane mahuta...are you a kiwi?

Comment from Chrisfiore

Excellent

Greetings author,

Wow, very nice. This is a great example of the poetic form you have chosen. I could feel myself following stride for stride in your journey off the beaten path, it felt that real to me, and that is not an easy thing for a poet to accomplish. Well done!

My best to you with this contest entry. ;) Chrisfiore

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

Thanks a lot for the generous review.

Comment from softtoysrule

Excellent

Hi,
I really like this poem. The picture, too, fits with it very well. It has the feel of Robert Frost's "A road less travelled by."

I have a small suggestion
Line 2, stanza 2. Take out the second 'and', I think it reads better like this "and then I crossed, headed upwards, where"

softtoysrule


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 Comment Written 01-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

Thanks for the kind review and the suggestion.

Well done for picking Frost - that's exactly who I had in mind, although perhaps a different piece.

Comment from daeneam

Excellent

Thanks for sharing your poem... what a nice journey I have...
With that scenic view and soothing surroundings, there's really no place like home. I wish you well in the contest! c", Mae

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 Comment Written 01-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

Thanks, mae - glad you enjoyed.