Texas Dream Catcher
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "CHAPTER CINCO, PART DOS"Drug & human trafficking, can romance win?
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Comment from L.M.Mullins
Finally she get's that long build up of emotions off her chest. Great work showing her emotions reaching their limit.
LM
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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Finally she get's that long build up of emotions off her chest. Great work showing her emotions reaching their limit.
LM
Comment Written 22-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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Bless you.
Comment from Acquired Taste
Have not read all of your previous work, but I did eyeball several chapters to get a 'flavor' of your story. I will go back and read and review.
That said, I liked this chapter. It was interesting and starting to raise deeper questions - it seemed to progress nicely from previous chapters.
It may be me, but the sentence below seemed awkward.
"It was." should it be... I was.
or
the sentence before might read: It was an ambush?
author notes: barren land
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Have not read all of your previous work, but I did eyeball several chapters to get a 'flavor' of your story. I will go back and read and review.
That said, I liked this chapter. It was interesting and starting to raise deeper questions - it seemed to progress nicely from previous chapters.
It may be me, but the sentence below seemed awkward.
"It was." should it be... I was.
or
the sentence before might read: It was an ambush?
author notes: barren land
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leave this helpful review. I check those areas out.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
Yet another well written addition to the story which is absolutely engaging. Quite the predicament for her since she knows in a way she is aiding and abetting which will do her no good in the long run. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Yet another well written addition to the story which is absolutely engaging. Quite the predicament for her since she knows in a way she is aiding and abetting which will do her no good in the long run. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from Loren (7)
Well, the intrigue and mystery deepens. You are creating some interesting and very real (motive-driven) characters that makes the reader want to find out what's up and how's this all going to pan out. I'll keep reading...Loren
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Well, the intrigue and mystery deepens. You are creating some interesting and very real (motive-driven) characters that makes the reader want to find out what's up and how's this all going to pan out. I'll keep reading...Loren
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
The suspense builds--leaves me feeling sort of creepy. Isn't it great we have Fanstory to help us find our errors. I make quite a few with prose, not so much with poetry. Have a good week, my friend
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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The suspense builds--leaves me feeling sort of creepy. Isn't it great we have Fanstory to help us find our errors. I make quite a few with prose, not so much with poetry. Have a good week, my friend
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from Kausar_Javeria
Hello there~!
I've been away for quite a while and coming back from reading the previous chapters, I enjoyed catching up with your work.
As always, love the work and love the way the story is progressing!
JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)
(^_^)-<~~KAUSAR~~>-(^_^)
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Hello there~!
I've been away for quite a while and coming back from reading the previous chapters, I enjoyed catching up with your work.
As always, love the work and love the way the story is progressing!
JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)
(^_^)-<~~KAUSAR~~>-(^_^)
Comment Written 03-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. I have missed you. How are your college plans going?
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I've missed you (and your work) too! It's all going well so far. Haven't submitted the application yet, will be doing do next week or so!
Keep praying though! :)
Comment from abbasjoy
This is certainly interesting and quite intriguing. It seems the longer Jim's around, the more questions are asked rather than answers given to anyone.
Hmm, wonder what side of the law, he's on.
The interaction between Soni and Jim is very short even terse, but there is obviously some great secret that he's not sharing, and it's making Soni mad.
Looking forward to hearing what that secret is about.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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This is certainly interesting and quite intriguing. It seems the longer Jim's around, the more questions are asked rather than answers given to anyone.
Hmm, wonder what side of the law, he's on.
The interaction between Soni and Jim is very short even terse, but there is obviously some great secret that he's not sharing, and it's making Soni mad.
Looking forward to hearing what that secret is about.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. I somehow lost the notice in my PM box about the sixes. Thank you for the sixes and your support of my writing. I appreciate you being a fan.
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You are welcome, Barbara.
Comment from Sankey
Great chapter you got my interest. Not many interesting stories on FS atm. Poor old Michael Cahill has finished his funny Bard story and his new one ain't got me in yet. Thanks again. One possible spag... It shows the baron (barren?)land
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Great chapter you got my interest. Not many interesting stories on FS atm. Poor old Michael Cahill has finished his funny Bard story and his new one ain't got me in yet. Thanks again. One possible spag... It shows the baron (barren?)land
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
Wonderful short chapter, I like the dialogue and interaction between characters. Very good intrigue in a very well written piece.
Great job Barbara!
:)
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Wonderful short chapter, I like the dialogue and interaction between characters. Very good intrigue in a very well written piece.
Great job Barbara!
:)
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Barbie, a short sweet chapter. Soni isn't impressed with Jim and his clandestine affairs. I wouldn't be either. Best for him to talk to her. Nice bit of tension in here. Well done. luv jada
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Hi Barbie, a short sweet chapter. Soni isn't impressed with Jim and his clandestine affairs. I wouldn't be either. Best for him to talk to her. Nice bit of tension in here. Well done. luv jada
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
