Lazing about
A story about this painting16 total reviews
Comment from 9999pool
I get of my bed -> 'off'
A very good attempt to write a story about love and lovemaking. The boldness and the seduction were not expected, but the story ended well.
The character was painted to be a nice sexy lady who is not easily impressed with eyes of praise and the ending of the story was rather unexpected. She is just like any ordinary women with a passion and need for love and appreciation. A glass or two of wine made the them both tipsy and it ended well as was supposed to be, smiles.
Excellent write and well pen.
Cheerio, hugs, bro Richie. :))
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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I get of my bed -> 'off'
A very good attempt to write a story about love and lovemaking. The boldness and the seduction were not expected, but the story ended well.
The character was painted to be a nice sexy lady who is not easily impressed with eyes of praise and the ending of the story was rather unexpected. She is just like any ordinary women with a passion and need for love and appreciation. A glass or two of wine made the them both tipsy and it ended well as was supposed to be, smiles.
Excellent write and well pen.
Cheerio, hugs, bro Richie. :))
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thanks for your kind and lovely review. Have a lovely week, Ine. Thanks for the lovely six, bro, and hogs back.
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My pleasure, smiles.
Cheerio, hugs back, bro Ritchie. :))
Comment from judiverse
What a great short story from you. It definitely fits the romance category. I love the way you drew such a contrast between the image the nurse Jana and her dedicated working image with the sexy side that reveals itself when David shows up. She enjoys the spur-of-the-moment love-making, and it allows her to show another side of herself. As David observes, he never knew she was this pretty. You did a great job of showing Jana's character and how she breaks out. of her nurse image. judi
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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What a great short story from you. It definitely fits the romance category. I love the way you drew such a contrast between the image the nurse Jana and her dedicated working image with the sexy side that reveals itself when David shows up. She enjoys the spur-of-the-moment love-making, and it allows her to show another side of herself. As David observes, he never knew she was this pretty. You did a great job of showing Jana's character and how she breaks out. of her nurse image. judi
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Thanks for your kind and lovely review. Have a nice weekend, Ine
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You're so welcome. judi
Comment from adewpearl
in a nearby hospital, it is still - I would use a period there instead of a comma
Sounds like a pleasant way to spend a day off to me :-) I guess this shows that one should always be open to new possibilities :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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in a nearby hospital, it is still - I would use a period there instead of a comma
Sounds like a pleasant way to spend a day off to me :-) I guess this shows that one should always be open to new possibilities :-) Brooke
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014
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Thanks for your kind and lovely review. Have a nice weekend, Ine
Comment from emrpoems
i think you did a fantastic writing this story around the image. Great visuals
Excellent story development with a good twist in the end. Held my attention and was altogether natural in content and execution.
All the best in the contest
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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i think you did a fantastic writing this story around the image. Great visuals
Excellent story development with a good twist in the end. Held my attention and was altogether natural in content and execution.
All the best in the contest
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thanks for your kind and lovely review. Have a nice weekend, Ine
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi Robina, it is a pity about not managing the right amount of words, you have written a very good story that goes so well with the image you were presented with
Well done
Mary
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Hi Robina, it is a pity about not managing the right amount of words, you have written a very good story that goes so well with the image you were presented with
Well done
Mary
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thanks for your kind and lovely review. Have a nice weekend, Ine
Comment from l.raven
HI Ine, I am sorry you didn't have enough words...but I loved the story...very sensual...and romantic...and very well written...Luff Linda xxoo love
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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HI Ine, I am sorry you didn't have enough words...but I loved the story...very sensual...and romantic...and very well written...Luff Linda xxoo love
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thanks for your kind and lovely review. Have a nice weekend, Ine
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you are so welcome you...Luff xxoo
Comment from Writingfundimension
Ine, I like the picture you chose for this contest and the story to go along. Loved the way the story progressed and young nurse decides to throw off her professional persona and let some passion into her life. Well done! :) Bev
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Ine, I like the picture you chose for this contest and the story to go along. Loved the way the story progressed and young nurse decides to throw off her professional persona and let some passion into her life. Well done! :) Bev
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thanks for your kind and lovely review. Have a nice weekend, Ine
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You're very welcome, Ine. :)
Comment from misscookie
The picture that you choose to go with your poem tells it all
You had my attention al; the way.
I found your poem to be a very interesting read.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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The picture that you choose to go with your poem tells it all
You had my attention al; the way.
I found your poem to be a very interesting read.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thanks for your kind and lovely review. Have a nice weekend, Ine
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You're very welcome. have a blessed week-end also.
Cookie
Comment from MizKat
Hi Ine,
I think you did a good job in writing the story for the picture. Sorry you didn't get enough words. I think you were pretty close though.
Kat
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Hi Ine,
I think you did a good job in writing the story for the picture. Sorry you didn't get enough words. I think you were pretty close though.
Kat
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thanks for your kind and lovely review. Have a nice weekend, Ine
Comment from Dutchie
Hi Ine. Very well written this story about the picture.. Seems so hard to me, because there are a lot of limitations.
But you did it so well. I know how difficult it is for both of us. A nice love story and a pleasure to read
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Hi Ine. Very well written this story about the picture.. Seems so hard to me, because there are a lot of limitations.
But you did it so well. I know how difficult it is for both of us. A nice love story and a pleasure to read
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thanks for your kind and lovely review. Have a nice weekend, Ine. Thanks very much for the great six. Love, Ine
