My Family
an acrostic in rhyming couplets156 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
OK Brooke, this is a picture frame picture....and it truly is sad all kids don't have mommies and daddies like Sawyer...but then our world would be at peace...sigh...I love your poem...and sooooooooooo love the picture....luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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OK Brooke, this is a picture frame picture....and it truly is sad all kids don't have mommies and daddies like Sawyer...but then our world would be at peace...sigh...I love your poem...and sooooooooooo love the picture....luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Linda, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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you are so welcome...xxoo
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Another masterpiece, and so much meaning. Sadly, everyone isn't cut out to be a parent. Maybe the people who aren't can't be blamed, but children can still be loved. I had wonderful, supportive parents and I was adopted. I don't know the history of it. It was the depths of the depression, and all I know is the name of my biological parents and the fact that they had two or three other children. I was an only child and all my life, no matter how much love I receive, I sometimes want to know who I am, where I came from. In those days it wasn't possible to find out. When I was fifteen I had a brief, disastrous marriage and my mother offered to pay for an abortion. I'm glad to say I didn't consider it and my daughter is now my closest friend in the world and has two children of her own and four grandchildren. Yet, I know there are valid medical reasons for abortions, and I don't judge anyone. Yes, Sawyer is loved not just by his family, but by everyone on Fan Story. That precious little guy, he's probably a worldwide celebrity by now. Thanks for sharing this wonderful poem.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Another masterpiece, and so much meaning. Sadly, everyone isn't cut out to be a parent. Maybe the people who aren't can't be blamed, but children can still be loved. I had wonderful, supportive parents and I was adopted. I don't know the history of it. It was the depths of the depression, and all I know is the name of my biological parents and the fact that they had two or three other children. I was an only child and all my life, no matter how much love I receive, I sometimes want to know who I am, where I came from. In those days it wasn't possible to find out. When I was fifteen I had a brief, disastrous marriage and my mother offered to pay for an abortion. I'm glad to say I didn't consider it and my daughter is now my closest friend in the world and has two children of her own and four grandchildren. Yet, I know there are valid medical reasons for abortions, and I don't judge anyone. Yes, Sawyer is loved not just by his family, but by everyone on Fan Story. That precious little guy, he's probably a worldwide celebrity by now. Thanks for sharing this wonderful poem.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much for your generous sixth star and for sharing your experience with me. I'm so glad you created a wonderful family from your brave decision :-) Brooke
Comment from thee-name
Nice verse of a family. Looks like their having fun. Good feel to it.
MANY HAVE YEARNED FOR HAPPINESS
MOTHERS SMILE, A DAD'S EMBRACE.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Nice verse of a family. Looks like their having fun. Good feel to it.
MANY HAVE YEARNED FOR HAPPINESS
MOTHERS SMILE, A DAD'S EMBRACE.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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thee-name, thank you for you positive comments. Since the comments are all positive, could I ask for a clarification of the 4 rating, which means needs improvement? What would you like to see changed? Brooke
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SORRY! PRESSED THE WRONG BOTTON. DO YOU THINK I COULD DO IT OVER AGAIN?
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yes, you can go back to your original review and scroll to the 5 and then hit send - I appreciate it :-)
Comment from words
You can make even the clunky acrostic a work of art.
Love the sentiment here.
I am in full agreement. I think that most of the world 's problems would be solved, if children were simply loved and cared for from birth.
Hugs,
D
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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You can make even the clunky acrostic a work of art.
Love the sentiment here.
I am in full agreement. I think that most of the world 's problems would be solved, if children were simply loved and cared for from birth.
Hugs,
D
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Diane, at most I write two of them a year for the site contests. Thanks so much, my friend :-) Brooke
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You do them so beautifully. This is a hard form to execute elegantly, yet you manage to do it beautifully.
Hugs, d
Comment from kiwijenny
But Brooke what lifts our heart is what a loving family Sawyer has......it does break mine too at children that are not loved....I tell women all the time the greatest task on earth is to be a good mother....you are forming a little person....love love love and love some more
Hugs...
God bless
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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But Brooke what lifts our heart is what a loving family Sawyer has......it does break mine too at children that are not loved....I tell women all the time the greatest task on earth is to be a good mother....you are forming a little person....love love love and love some more
Hugs...
God bless
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Jenny, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwisteveh
Brooke, this is a rather poignant piece, exploring as it does the sad fact that many children are neglected and worse by those who should love and protect them.
Perhaps appropriately for this you have veered away from your usual bouncy and cheerful meter to give a more hesitant feel to this when read aloud.
Good luck.
Steve
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Brooke, this is a rather poignant piece, exploring as it does the sad fact that many children are neglected and worse by those who should love and protect them.
Perhaps appropriately for this you have veered away from your usual bouncy and cheerful meter to give a more hesitant feel to this when read aloud.
Good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Steve, thanks so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from comanalbert
Children often pay for their parent's mistakes, it is stated somewhere in the Old Testament and it is so unfair. They barely blink in this world to face hardships and grievance before even starting their own struggle to survive...Not fair but true. You said it better.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Children often pay for their parent's mistakes, it is stated somewhere in the Old Testament and it is so unfair. They barely blink in this world to face hardships and grievance before even starting their own struggle to survive...Not fair but true. You said it better.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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comanalbert, thank you so much - yep, totally unfair. Brooke
Comment from fastdigits
Ah, lady, how you can write. Here
you have an Acrostic set to rhyme
with such warm thoughts of the
life exhibited in the photo of
your family, yet in this same
writing, how for other people
life is not fair, a true reflection
of life itself.
Well done
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Ah, lady, how you can write. Here
you have an Acrostic set to rhyme
with such warm thoughts of the
life exhibited in the photo of
your family, yet in this same
writing, how for other people
life is not fair, a true reflection
of life itself.
Well done
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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fastdigits, thank you so much for your graciousness and generosity :-) Brooke
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I agree so much. I see broken families daily at my school. No child should live that way, yet for many it's so true. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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I agree so much. I see broken families daily at my school. No child should live that way, yet for many it's so true. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, Barbara - that is why God sent those kids teachers like you, to fill the void a little bit, at least :-) Brooke
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Brooke,
Here in this poem you write about love itself. Often having something in abundance makes me think of the dirth of it in others. I see that you do that too. For me, it's good looks and talent (kidding):)
Lovely write--Ted
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Dear Brooke,
Here in this poem you write about love itself. Often having something in abundance makes me think of the dirth of it in others. I see that you do that too. For me, it's good looks and talent (kidding):)
Lovely write--Ted
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Ted :-) Brooke
