My Family
an acrostic in rhyming couplets156 total reviews
Comment from Adri7enne
Sawyer's a lucky, happy little tyke! He's blessed for sure.
Loved your acrostic, every line falls so naturally. Well done, Brooke. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Sawyer's a lucky, happy little tyke! He's blessed for sure.
Loved your acrostic, every line falls so naturally. Well done, Brooke. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Adrienne, thank you so much for your kind contest wishes and generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from Linda England Bonam
Great poem, Brooke. I like a rhyming acrostic! The picture of your family is lovely. I know you are a very proud woman and it shows!
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Great poem, Brooke. I like a rhyming acrostic! The picture of your family is lovely. I know you are a very proud woman and it shows!
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Linda, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from gypsycaravan
i wish your words weren't true. Sawyer is a lucky little boy. I hope that when he grows up he will pass on that wonderful legacy to his children. BTW, they are all good looking, with gorgeous scenic setting behind them.
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i wish your words weren't true. Sawyer is a lucky little boy. I hope that when he grows up he will pass on that wonderful legacy to his children. BTW, they are all good looking, with gorgeous scenic setting behind them.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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gypsy, thank you so very much :-) I think by being a loved child he stands a far better chance of one day being a loving parent :-) And yes, they are one good looking trio :-) Brooke
Comment from Bryan G
This is a wonderful poem about the blessings of love and family. Your poem reminds me that I have been blessed with a loving friend and wife along with four sons and a daughter and a granddaughter and another grandchild on the way. I have been given the wonderful gift of poetry and a good group of writing friends on Fanstory. I guess you could say I have it all. Have a good day.
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This is a wonderful poem about the blessings of love and family. Your poem reminds me that I have been blessed with a loving friend and wife along with four sons and a daughter and a granddaughter and another grandchild on the way. I have been given the wonderful gift of poetry and a good group of writing friends on Fanstory. I guess you could say I have it all. Have a good day.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Bryan, thank you so much for your thoughtful comments and generous sixth star. Your family sounds delightful :-) Brooke
Comment from Louise Michelle
Oh, Brooke, I feel the same way. You've touched upon this topic with light verse, but I still got images of children being abused and neglected. Hugs, Lou
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Oh, Brooke, I feel the same way. You've touched upon this topic with light verse, but I still got images of children being abused and neglected. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
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Lou, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from lynglyng
beautiful, heartfelt poem that captures the readers emotions. Great rhyme and flow. I loved the picture that I am guessing is your lovely family. It added to the feel of the poem, that maybe some never found it, but that you have. Thank you for sharing, LyngLyng
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beautiful, heartfelt poem that captures the readers emotions. Great rhyme and flow. I loved the picture that I am guessing is your lovely family. It added to the feel of the poem, that maybe some never found it, but that you have. Thank you for sharing, LyngLyng
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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LyngLyng, thank you so much for your gracious and generous response to this poem. Yes, I identify my family members in my author notes :-) Brooke
Comment from Lulube
Totally agree, why can't love just find it's way and plop itself on the owner's lap and it's a done deal. we all want to be loved, whether or not one wants to admit it.
Great picture of family and it endorses your notes to break a heart that all children have this family type of life but so many do not.
good work Brooke
all the luck in the contest
lulube
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Totally agree, why can't love just find it's way and plop itself on the owner's lap and it's a done deal. we all want to be loved, whether or not one wants to admit it.
Great picture of family and it endorses your notes to break a heart that all children have this family type of life but so many do not.
good work Brooke
all the luck in the contest
lulube
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Lulube, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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welcome Brooke
lulube
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem is short and sweet. It tells of love and happiness that all should have but some sadly lack. We who have a loving family are very lucky.
The picture shows all that is in the happy part of the poem.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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This poem is short and sweet. It tells of love and happiness that all should have but some sadly lack. We who have a loving family are very lucky.
The picture shows all that is in the happy part of the poem.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Joan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are so welcome, Brooke.
Joan
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Not being able to "deserve" a parent's love is not uncommon. It shapes and drives us to "deserve" the love of others in their place. There are compensations. :) nancy
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Not being able to "deserve" a parent's love is not uncommon. It shapes and drives us to "deserve" the love of others in their place. There are compensations. :) nancy
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
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Nancy, thank you so much for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Brooke,
Thought provoking lovely piece of poetry in the form of 'Acrostic Poem' meeting the desired norms and beautifully depicting its theme!
Impressive and perfectly matching the theme wording.
Smooth flow with nice rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
The most striking lines are:
"Fate refuses to be fair --
Ask a child who longs to share
Mother's smiles, a dad's embrace,
If only fate would have such grace."
Best of Luck!
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Hello Brooke,
Thought provoking lovely piece of poetry in the form of 'Acrostic Poem' meeting the desired norms and beautifully depicting its theme!
Impressive and perfectly matching the theme wording.
Smooth flow with nice rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
The most striking lines are:
"Fate refuses to be fair --
Ask a child who longs to share
Mother's smiles, a dad's embrace,
If only fate would have such grace."
Best of Luck!
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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RP, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
