My Family
an acrostic in rhyming couplets156 total reviews
Comment from mommydear42
This poem is short and to the point and, I fear the subject is so far out of reach for too many. Again adewpearl writes in a a cuplet form, almost a sonnet, but too short. I understand her words about wishing more children being loved as Sawyer is. I've known many who are not.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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This poem is short and to the point and, I fear the subject is so far out of reach for too many. Again adewpearl writes in a a cuplet form, almost a sonnet, but too short. I understand her words about wishing more children being loved as Sawyer is. I've known many who are not.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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mommydear, thank you so much for your generous and thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is such an appealing yet poignant acrostic, enhanced by the picture of your happy, loving family. I'm glad to see the three of them together in one photo. Love the line "If only fate would have such grace." Love, Jeanie
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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This is such an appealing yet poignant acrostic, enhanced by the picture of your happy, loving family. I'm glad to see the three of them together in one photo. Love the line "If only fate would have such grace." Love, Jeanie
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Jeanie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dom G Robles
This, again,to me is beautiful. Short and very meaningful.
The note below taken into its full context. It is lamentable, Indeed, true. I could have rated this poem another 6, were it not for the rhyming of the first two lines "happiness" and "blessed." They do not rhyme. Further,the two last lines: the word "beseeched." and "reach." I feel the writer has a reason for the first one sacrifice for sharpness. Another one is the last two lines: "beseeched" past tense "besought" (from the dictionary) and "reach." I was thinking of the past tense of beseech, and I could be wrong and I stand corrected.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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This, again,to me is beautiful. Short and very meaningful.
The note below taken into its full context. It is lamentable, Indeed, true. I could have rated this poem another 6, were it not for the rhyming of the first two lines "happiness" and "blessed." They do not rhyme. Further,the two last lines: the word "beseeched." and "reach." I feel the writer has a reason for the first one sacrifice for sharpness. Another one is the last two lines: "beseeched" past tense "besought" (from the dictionary) and "reach." I was thinking of the past tense of beseech, and I could be wrong and I stand corrected.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Dom, for thoughtful feedback. I consider happiness/blessed to be proximate rhyme, and not even much of a stretch as proximate rhyme. The past tense of beseech, according to a couple of dictionaries I consult, is besought or beseeched.
:-) Brooke
Comment from GracieAnn
Brooke, this Acrostic Poetry Contest entry strongly meets the requirements of the contest with a poignant and universal message about love. Well done. All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Brooke, this Acrostic Poetry Contest entry strongly meets the requirements of the contest with a poignant and universal message about love. Well done. All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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GracieAnn, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from visionary1234
A sweet reminder to look at our own lives and absolutely count our blessings, and treasure them, Brooke. And yes, it breaks my heart too. Bless you!
:)S
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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A sweet reminder to look at our own lives and absolutely count our blessings, and treasure them, Brooke. And yes, it breaks my heart too. Bless you!
:)S
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Sharyn, thank you for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Drew Delaney
I thought I critiqued this one already.
You are so right. Not every child has loving parents who want the best for them. Thank goodness, Sawyer has both. And I believe my grandchildren are all loved by their parents as well. They gave and are giving help to go to the proper schooling, teaching them to be good citizens, and standing by them and encouraging them. I think this poem is sad for sure. Too many children go to bed each night thinking that nobody cares for them. So sad!
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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I thought I critiqued this one already.
You are so right. Not every child has loving parents who want the best for them. Thank goodness, Sawyer has both. And I believe my grandchildren are all loved by their parents as well. They gave and are giving help to go to the proper schooling, teaching them to be good citizens, and standing by them and encouraging them. I think this poem is sad for sure. Too many children go to bed each night thinking that nobody cares for them. So sad!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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I've done that before - I review something and then either don't send it or the internet doesn't send it LOL Thanks so much for your thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Cumbrianlass
How true, Brooke. We take things for granted that other kids can only dream about. This brought to mind the Nat King Cole (I adore him) song - 'Nature Boy'.
To love and be loved in return.
I'm humbled by your words.
Av
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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How true, Brooke. We take things for granted that other kids can only dream about. This brought to mind the Nat King Cole (I adore him) song - 'Nature Boy'.
To love and be loved in return.
I'm humbled by your words.
Av
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much, Av :-) Brooke
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello adewpearl, A beautiful and thought provoking acrostic. As summer comes to a close and the Holidays start to unfold, many people yearn for the love of family--even though "some" may have family living in the same house, but yet, still feel disconnected, unloved. Of special note:
Love shouldn't have to be beseeched,
Yet for some, it's out of reach.
(Sad, but true.)
As your poem is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Hello adewpearl, A beautiful and thought provoking acrostic. As summer comes to a close and the Holidays start to unfold, many people yearn for the love of family--even though "some" may have family living in the same house, but yet, still feel disconnected, unloved. Of special note:
Love shouldn't have to be beseeched,
Yet for some, it's out of reach.
(Sad, but true.)
As your poem is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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LateBloomer, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Brooke
I just commented on how fortunate Sawyer is in my last review. He has terrific parents who love him and show him the world. So many kids today are plunked in front of the tube to vegetate on cartoons, or whatever. But through your poems, it's easy to tell how wonderful Miranda and Andy are. And how happy Sawyer is. A happy childhood makes all the difference in the world. I look at this photo and see a happy family. You must be so proud.
Thanks for sharing.
your fan,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Hi Brooke
I just commented on how fortunate Sawyer is in my last review. He has terrific parents who love him and show him the world. So many kids today are plunked in front of the tube to vegetate on cartoons, or whatever. But through your poems, it's easy to tell how wonderful Miranda and Andy are. And how happy Sawyer is. A happy childhood makes all the difference in the world. I look at this photo and see a happy family. You must be so proud.
Thanks for sharing.
your fan,
Kimbob
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much, Kimbob - Miranda designs every day around that boy - from weekend outings to vacations to everyday mornings :-) For four days over Thanksgiving she is going away with her girlfriend and three other women while Sawyer stays with Andy and Andy's parents. Frankly, I don't know how she is going to last for four whole days. LOL :-) Brooke
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She will miss them, that's for sure!
Comment from zanya
This Acrostic reminds us of what really matters 'My Family' while posing a fundamental question about the game of chance that can be Life 'Love shouldn't have to be beseeched'.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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This Acrostic reminds us of what really matters 'My Family' while posing a fundamental question about the game of chance that can be Life 'Love shouldn't have to be beseeched'.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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zanya, thank you so much :-) Brooke
