From our soul.
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Comment from adewpearl
excellent use of enjambment to keep ideas flowing from line to line
lovely personification of the caressing grass
you create a haunting, evocative mood :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2013
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excellent use of enjambment to keep ideas flowing from line to line
lovely personification of the caressing grass
you create a haunting, evocative mood :-) Brooke
Comment Written 24-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2013
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Thank you so very much for a wonderful review. Pili
Comment from Rondeno
Podemos sacar - sino algria, pues algo de tranqilidad - de la belleza de la naturaleza. Tenemos todos nuestras cicatrices emocionales, pero de verdad, las flores y las delicias sensuales pueden aliviar nuestro dolor. Es un poema bravo, Pili.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2013
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Podemos sacar - sino algria, pues algo de tranqilidad - de la belleza de la naturaleza. Tenemos todos nuestras cicatrices emocionales, pero de verdad, las flores y las delicias sensuales pueden aliviar nuestro dolor. Es un poema bravo, Pili
Comment Written 24-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2013
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Thank you my friend, you are absolutely right. Great comment. Love Pili
Comment from Gungalo
My soul
awaits in silence
mysteries
unknown.
This one must have been in a contest or something. It's beautiful girl from start to finish. Sigh.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2013
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My soul
awaits in silence
mysteries
unknown.
This one must have been in a contest or something. It's beautiful girl from start to finish. Sigh.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2013
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No contest. Thank you girl, awesome review. Love. Pili
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Smiling big time.
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Nice smile,hug
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His babe. On no. Broke a molar?
Comment from James Chaima Phiri
Rebirth! I see a problem here. Why should one dilute his or her yearnings with aromatic herbs and other substances in the morning? Why should the fresh grass touch fondly my relationship with old scars? Why embracing shadows of comfort; is someone still missing something of the past? As it awaits the cycle of rebirth, my soul is concealed by what? Well, the problem I have seen is the inner fight a new believer goes through. To let go of the desires and the friends of the past is not easy. You need morning prayers to dilute those yearnings before you meet the challenges of the day. The Holy Spirit will touch you fondly as He leads you away from the old paths. All you have to do is let go of those old ideas you still cherish inside your heart. The Holy Spirit will conceal your soul. Then, you are born again. You are a new child of God! This is what I saw in this poem. The flow is excellent. Thank you.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Rebirth! I see a problem here. Why should one dilute his or her yearnings with aromatic herbs and other substances in the morning? Why should the fresh grass touch fondly my relationship with old scars? Why embracing shadows of comfort; is someone still missing something of the past? As it awaits the cycle of rebirth, my soul is concealed by what? Well, the problem I have seen is the inner fight a new believer goes through. To let go of the desires and the friends of the past is not easy. You need morning prayers to dilute those yearnings before you meet the challenges of the day. The Holy Spirit will touch you fondly as He leads you away from the old paths. All you have to do is let go of those old ideas you still cherish inside your heart. The Holy Spirit will conceal your soul. Then, you are born again. You are a new child of God! This is what I saw in this poem. The flow is excellent. Thank you.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Thank you for your extensive and meaningful comment. Battling two cancers and loosing suddenly a healthy son, is what is about.
Comment from Ekim777
Your life seems to be a tussle of feelings and those perceptions of your senses. This might sound like rigid thinking on my part but your senses shine through every image. It can only make good poetry. I bet you prefer to write in Spanish. It's good you can forget your yearnings (thoughts) for the taste, smell and vision of the good earth. Let us all bathe in your imagery while your soul looks on. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Your life seems to be a tussle of feelings and those perceptions of your senses. This might sound like rigid thinking on my part but your senses shine through every image. It can only make good poetry. I bet you prefer to write in Spanish. It's good you can forget your yearnings (thoughts) for the taste, smell and vision of the good earth. Let us all bathe in your imagery while your soul looks on. -Ekim777
Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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I like to write in both languages , your amazing generous comments moved me and humble me, thank you so much . Pili
Comment from Niccort72
Wow that 1st sentence,I love it! Deep from in your deepest waters. Thank you for sharing your mind. Why 4 stars? First two sentences was like you just brought me a banana split when I didn't even ask for it and I love ice cream. But the last two were not as potent. 3rd sentence my least favorite.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Wow that 1st sentence,I love it! Deep from in your deepest waters. Thank you for sharing your mind. Why 4 stars? First two sentences was like you just brought me a banana split when I didn't even ask for it and I love ice cream. But the last two were not as potent. 3rd sentence my least favorite.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much Niccort Pili
Comment from angelajfrank
that is a good poem and i give you four stars. The art work was good to. the poem you wrote was also good. i real enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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that is a good poem and i give you four stars. The art work was good to. the poem you wrote was also good. i real enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for your comment. Pili
Comment from Gabrieltheswifter
I like the use of imagery in this poem, not just with the picture but with the words as well. Its very well written, I enjoyed it thoroughly.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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I like the use of imagery in this poem, not just with the picture but with the words as well. Its very well written, I enjoyed it thoroughly.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Thank you for your encouraging comment Gabriel. Pili
Comment from Permelia
This is so lovely and a wonderful philosophy of preparing to meet the world again, after you've been hurt so bad, itfelt like a mortal wound.
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This is so lovely and a wonderful philosophy of preparing to meet the world again, after you've been hurt so bad, itfelt like a mortal wound.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2005
Comment from Black Wren
Another simple but beautiful one that is chock full of wonderful descriptions.
I love the way you write these poems.
Great job and well done.
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Another simple but beautiful one that is chock full of wonderful descriptions.
I love the way you write these poems.
Great job and well done.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2005
