Bel Air: A Bard's Guide
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "All's Well That Ends Well"Sequel to The Bard of Bel Air.
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Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Terrific happy ending! And I can't wait for the story about how the Bard came to be what he is.
>> He had lost his wife and children while living in Oklahoma to a tornado.
REWRITE THIS WAY: He had lost his wife and children to a tornado while living in Oklahoma.
>> The suite on the eighth floor had a different atmosphere then it did for the previous week.
CHANGE the words THEN IT DID to THAN IT HAD.
The suite on the eighth floor had a different atmosphere THAN IT HAD for the previous week.
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Terrific happy ending! And I can't wait for the story about how the Bard came to be what he is.
>> He had lost his wife and children while living in Oklahoma to a tornado.
REWRITE THIS WAY: He had lost his wife and children to a tornado while living in Oklahoma.
>> The suite on the eighth floor had a different atmosphere then it did for the previous week.
CHANGE the words THEN IT DID to THAN IT HAD.
The suite on the eighth floor had a different atmosphere THAN IT HAD for the previous week.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
Comment from GracieAnn
Mieky, this is a great finale with your signature humor to put the proverbial icing on the cake. Great creativity throughout, my friend. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
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Mieky, this is a great finale with your signature humor to put the proverbial icing on the cake. Great creativity throughout, my friend. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
Comment from CR Delport
Congrats of finishing another book. This is an interesting story and I enjoyed the read. The 6 is for the book overall and not just for this post. Good job, Mikey.
The staff had become to gamblers down on their luck feigning illness --- not sure what you wanted to say here
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Congrats of finishing another book. This is an interesting story and I enjoyed the read. The 6 is for the book overall and not just for this post. Good job, Mikey.
The staff had become to gamblers down on their luck feigning illness --- not sure what you wanted to say here
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
Comment from seaglass
This came to a good ending with all the children taken care of and a minister, needing a new vision, leading the project. Winston served the villain part well, going out with the phony patriot skit. Reminds me of these hate groups, yelling their guile while carrying the American flag.
bet you already have another one in the think tank
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This came to a good ending with all the children taken care of and a minister, needing a new vision, leading the project. Winston served the villain part well, going out with the phony patriot skit. Reminds me of these hate groups, yelling their guile while carrying the American flag.
bet you already have another one in the think tank
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Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
