Sunshine and I
a children's poem in rhyming couplets151 total reviews
Comment from Emily George
Lovely rhyme and a great subject for a poem
I found it enchanting a lovely view of a child's play caught in verse.
Only sweet dreams could follow that poem
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Lovely rhyme and a great subject for a poem
I found it enchanting a lovely view of a child's play caught in verse.
Only sweet dreams could follow that poem
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Emily, for your gracious and generous review :-) Brooke
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Sunshine and I' is an extremely well-written and entertaining piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.
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'Sunshine and I' is an extremely well-written and entertaining piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Duchess, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Brooke as always you're very welcome
:-) the Duchess
Comment from seaglass
Children and sunshine are natural companions. This is beautifully rhymed. The meter lightly skips along like a playful child. Sunshine and moonbeams are given personification in the manner children often think.
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Children and sunshine are natural companions. This is beautifully rhymed. The meter lightly skips along like a playful child. Sunshine and moonbeams are given personification in the manner children often think.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Seaglass, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from lancellot
A great fast pasted chidren's poem. That's how it would seem to a child at play, like the sun is just there for his enjoyment, and he may be right. Well done.
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A great fast pasted chidren's poem. That's how it would seem to a child at play, like the sun is just there for his enjoyment, and he may be right. Well done.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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lancellot, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from sibhus
Awe, this is so whimsically fun. I love the images of Sawyer and the sun tosssing ray around while the moon rested. The words display such great images of a perfect day and bing outside soaking them up. Good stuff there, Brooke.
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Awe, this is so whimsically fun. I love the images of Sawyer and the sun tosssing ray around while the moon rested. The words display such great images of a perfect day and bing outside soaking them up. Good stuff there, Brooke.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Thank you, sibhus, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from CHIGYSISKI
A very lovely children's poem. Something they can definitely relate to.The rhyming is excellent and appears effortless.I like the idea of moonbeams being tired from playing all night and being happy to be tucked in tight.Great job!
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A very lovely children's poem. Something they can definitely relate to.The rhyming is excellent and appears effortless.I like the idea of moonbeams being tired from playing all night and being happy to be tucked in tight.Great job!
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Chigysiski, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Pyrrho
A fun read and as usual, I analyze your poetry different from you. You start each line with a single stressed syllable and follow it with three anapests. But that doesn't really matter as long as the flow flows.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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A fun read and as usual, I analyze your poetry different from you. You start each line with a single stressed syllable and follow it with three anapests. But that doesn't really matter as long as the flow flows.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Pyrrho, thank you for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Dawn Munro
Gosh, wouldn't it be wonderful to be so young and innocent again...sigh...that's the feeling this charmer gives me, Brooke - what a lovely poem! I honestly never comment on anything technical because truth is, I learn from reading your work. (I'm blessed with the opportunity.)
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Gosh, wouldn't it be wonderful to be so young and innocent again...sigh...that's the feeling this charmer gives me, Brooke - what a lovely poem! I honestly never comment on anything technical because truth is, I learn from reading your work. (I'm blessed with the opportunity.)
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Dawn :-) Brooke
Comment from tfawcus
Nice to see (and hear) a poem not in the iambic rhythm that we become so accustomed to. This is another poem, like your Family one that explores the yin and yang of life, the light and darkness, the good and bad. The image of Sawyer chasing sunbeams is a lovely one. You remind me that I have a short story about moonbeams that is gathering dust in a drawer somewhere. I must dig it out and have another look at it!
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Nice to see (and hear) a poem not in the iambic rhythm that we become so accustomed to. This is another poem, like your Family one that explores the yin and yang of life, the light and darkness, the good and bad. The image of Sawyer chasing sunbeams is a lovely one. You remind me that I have a short story about moonbeams that is gathering dust in a drawer somewhere. I must dig it out and have another look at it!
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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tfawcus, thank you so much :-) I can't wait to read your story once you've dusted it off :-) Brooke
Comment from DerivedBetter
Wow, this was pretty awesome. The imagery was great and I loved the personification of the Sun and the moon. I'm sure my kids would love this. Thank you for sharing.
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Wow, this was pretty awesome. The imagery was great and I loved the personification of the Sun and the moon. I'm sure my kids would love this. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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DerivedBetter, thank you so much :-) Brooke
